Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and use correct grammar, for example, 'Flowers are something very beautiful that anyone can think of.' Also, keep your answer concise and avoid repetition to make it more natural and effective.

例: Yes, I love flowers because they are very beautiful and colorful. Their pleasant smell attracts people, and I find them very refreshing.

提案: Avoid filler words and improve sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas clearly. For example, say 'My friend loves flowers because her husband often gives them to her, and she appreciates this gesture.'

例: Yes, I have a friend who loves flowers. Her husband often gives her flowers, and she shares pictures of them on social media to show her appreciation.

提案: Good use of linking words and details. To improve, avoid minor grammar mistakes like 'blooms are very attractive' (better: 'the blooms are very attractive'). Also, try to be more concise without losing detail.

例: No, there are not many flowers where I live because it's a city. However, several nearby parks have beautiful, colorful flowers, and I often visit them because their blooms are very attractive and refreshing.

提案: Avoid filler words and repetition. Use correct grammar, for example, 'Flowers really make me feel refreshed.' Also, try to combine sentences for better flow and coherence.

例: Yes, I love taking photos of flowers. Whenever I see one, I try to capture its beauty because flowers make me feel refreshed and happy.

提案: Good content and structure. To improve, correct minor grammar errors like 'a special occasions' should be 'special occasions' and 'a flower' should be 'flowers'. Also, try to use more varied vocabulary.

例: Yes, in my country, people often send flowers to express love or appreciation. For instance, flowers are commonly given on special occasions such as birthdays, anniversaries, and festivals. Additionally, many people give flowers even without any specific occasion.

× Flowers is something, uh, that is way beautiful that anyone can ever think.

✓ Flowers are something, uh, that is way beautiful that anyone can ever think.

The subject 'Flowers' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'. In English, plural subjects require plural verbs to maintain subject-verb agreement.

× Uh, flower smells good and they attract people and they are, they are really colorful, which is a most beautiful spectacular thing about flowers.

✓ Uh, flowers smell good and they attract people and they are really colorful, which is the most beautiful spectacular thing about flowers.

The word 'flower' should be plural 'flowers' to match the plural pronouns 'they'. Also, 'smells' should be 'smell' to agree with the plural subject 'flowers'.

× So yeah, I love flowers.

✓ So yeah, I love flowers.

No correction needed here as the sentence is grammatically correct.

× Yes, I know a friend of mine, uh, she loves flowers like her, she's married and her husband always brings, uh, her flower and she put that on her story and appreciate him.

✓ Yes, I know a friend of mine, uh, she loves flowers like her, she's married and her husband always brings, uh, her flowers and she puts that on her story and appreciates him.

The word 'flower' should be plural 'flowers' because it refers to multiple flowers. Also, 'put' should be 'puts' and 'appreciate' should be 'appreciates' to agree with the third person singular subject 'she'.

× So yeah, she loves flower and her husband likes to give her flower.

✓ So yeah, she loves flowers and her husband likes to give her flowers.

The word 'flower' should be plural 'flowers' to correctly refer to multiple flowers in both instances.

× No, there are not many flowers where I live because I live in a city.

✓ No, there are not many flowers where I live because I live in a city.

No correction needed here as the sentence correctly uses 'there are' for plural 'flowers'.

× Although there are plenty of trees, most of them are not flowering plants, which I find a bit disappointing.

✓ Although there are plenty of trees, most of them are not flowering plants, which I find a bit disappointing.

No correction needed here as the pronouns are used correctly.

× However, there are several parks near my home that have beautiful flowers, and I often visit them because they're colorful, blooms are very attractive, and flowers are very refreshing.

✓ However, there are several parks near my home that have beautiful flowers, and I often visit them because they're colorful, their blooms are very attractive, and flowers are very refreshing.

The phrase 'blooms are very attractive' lacks a clear subject. Adding 'their' clarifies that the blooms belong to the flowers, improving sentence clarity.

× Yes, I love to take photos of flowers in my daily life.

✓ Yes, I love to take photos of flowers in my daily life.

No correction needed here as the sentence is grammatically correct.

× Whenever I see a flower I try to take picture with them or try to take a solo picture of the flowers.

✓ Whenever I see a flower I try to take a picture with it or try to take a solo picture of the flowers.

The singular 'a flower' should be matched with singular pronoun 'it' and singular noun 'a picture'. 'Them' is plural and does not agree with singular 'flower'.

× Flowers really makes me feel uh very refreshing and I whenever I see flowers I feel very good and I really love flowers.

✓ Flowers really make me feel, uh, very refreshed and whenever I see flowers I feel very good and I really love flowers.

The verb 'makes' should be 'make' to agree with plural subject 'Flowers'. Also, 'refreshing' should be 'refreshed' to correctly describe the feeling experienced by the speaker.

× Yes, people in my country often send flowers to others, especially to express their love or appreciation.

✓ Yes, people in my country often send flowers to others, especially to express their love or appreciation.

No correction needed here as the sentence is grammatically correct.

× For example, it is common to give flowers on a special occasions like birthdays, anniversaries, or festivals.

✓ For example, it is common to give flowers on special occasions like birthdays, anniversaries, or festivals.

The phrase 'a special occasions' is incorrect because 'occasions' is plural and should not be preceded by the singular article 'a'.

× However, many people give a flower to each other for no occasion.

✓ However, many people give flowers to each other for no occasion.

The phrase 'a flower' should be plural 'flowers' to indicate that people give flowers in general, not just one flower.