Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: In your answer, try to use correct grammar and sentence structure. For example, say 'I am a big fan of flowers' instead of 'I have a very big fan of it'. Also, avoid redundancy and incomplete sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas clearly.

例: Yes, I love flowers very much. I am a big fan of them, so I grow many flowers in my garden and around my house. My friends often come to see the flowers, and we enjoy sitting together among them.

提案: Try to speak more clearly and avoid hesitation sounds like 'uh' and 'umm'. Use correct grammar, for example, say 'my sister' instead of 'my best sisters'. Also, complete your sentences and use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: Yes, I know many people who love flowers, including my friends and my sister. They grow and take good care of flowers in their gardens. In fact, my old friends and I all enjoy flowers very much.

提案: Improve your sentence structure and use plural forms correctly, for example, 'there are many flowers' instead of 'there is certain flower'. Use linking words like 'especially' properly and avoid incomplete phrases. Be specific and clear in your descriptions.

例: Yes, there are many flowers where I live. Especially, there is a large garden nearby, which is like a park. Many people visit it to enjoy the flowers and take photos. For example, there are flowers of many colors such as red, beige, yellow, and white.

提案: Try to avoid repeating words and incomplete sentences. Use correct prepositions and article usage, for example, 'take photos of flowers' and 'go to the gym'. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I love taking photos of flowers every day. Whenever I go to my university garden, I see many beautiful flowers. Especially in the morning when I go to the gym, I feel fresh surrounded by the flowers. So, I usually take photos there.

提案: Use correct grammar and sentence structure. For example, say 'on special occasions' instead of 'on the special occasionally'. Complete your sentences and use linking words to make your answer clear and logical.

例: Yes, in my country, people often send flowers to others. Flowers are a symbol of love and are given as gifts. For example, on special occasions like weddings, engagements, or birthday parties, people send flowers to greet and celebrate.

× I have grow so many flower in my own garden, in my apartments and house.

✓ I have grown so many flowers in my own garden, in my apartment and house.

The noun 'flower' should be plural 'flowers' because it refers to multiple items. Also, 'grow' is incorrect here; the past participle 'grown' is needed after 'have' to form the present perfect tense. 'Apartments' should be singular 'apartment' if referring to one place.

× So people do usually my friends come and see it and we go and sit together all in the.

✓ So usually my friends come and see it, and we all go and sit together.

The sentence structure is confusing and incomplete. 'Do usually' is incorrect; adverb 'usually' should come before the verb. The phrase 'all in the' is incomplete and unclear, so it is removed for clarity.

× I, I know a lot of people, which is include my friends, even my best sisters who keep, uh, growing flower and taking care and for flower for her own garden.

✓ I know a lot of people, including my friends and even my sisters who keep growing flowers and taking care of flowers in their own gardens.

'Which is include' is incorrect; 'including' is the correct form. 'Best sisters' is unclear; 'sisters' suffices. 'Flower' should be plural 'flowers'. 'For flower for her own garden' is incorrect; it should be 'taking care of flowers in their own gardens' with correct prepositions and plural forms.

× So they love flowers and they know how to take care of it.

✓ So they love flowers and they know how to take care of them.

'Flowers' is plural, so the pronoun should be 'them' instead of 'it' to agree in number.

× Umm, in my group, my old friends and me love.

✓ Umm, in my group, my old friends and I love flowers.

'Me' is incorrect as a subject; 'I' should be used. The sentence is incomplete without the object 'flowers'.

× Yes, there is certain flower where I live my life.

✓ Yes, there are certain flowers where I live.

'There is' is singular, but 'certain flower' implies plural, so 'there are' is correct. 'Where I live my life' is awkward; 'where I live' is sufficient.

× Especially we have a huge garden near to us which is even called park.

✓ Especially, we have a huge garden near us which is even called a park.

'Near to us' should be 'near us'. 'Called park' needs an article 'a' before 'park'.

× Many people come here and enjoy the with the flower, taking photos and selfies with a different kind of flowers.

✓ Many people come here and enjoy the flowers, taking photos and selfies with different kinds of flowers.

'Enjoy the with the flower' is incorrect; it should be 'enjoy the flowers'. 'A different kind of flowers' should be plural 'different kinds of flowers'.

× For example, there are so many color flowers, red, beige, yellow, white.

✓ For example, there are so many colorful flowers: red, beige, yellow, and white.

'Color flowers' is incorrect; 'colorful flowers' is the correct adjective form. Also, a colon is appropriate before listing colors.

× Yes, I love to take a photo of flower in my daily life.

✓ Yes, I love to take photos of flowers in my daily life.

'Photo' and 'flower' should be plural to indicate multiple instances in daily life.

× Even whenever I go to my university garden, there I find so many beautiful flowers.

✓ Whenever I go to my university garden, I find so many beautiful flowers there.

The phrase 'there I find' is awkward; placing 'there' at the end improves sentence flow.

× Especially when I go to gym in the morning in my university garden I feel very fresh around the flowers and garden.

✓ Especially when I go to the gym in the morning, I feel very fresh around the flowers and garden in my university.

'Go to gym' needs the article 'the gym'. The sentence is long and confusing; reordering improves clarity.

× So I usually take the photo and also.

✓ So I usually take photos as well.

The sentence is incomplete and awkward; 'take photos as well' is clearer and complete.

× It's a kind of symbol of love for the people who present them as a love, as a gift to send the flower to others.

✓ It's a kind of symbol of love for the people who present them as a gift to send flowers to others.

The phrase 'as a love, as a gift' is redundant and confusing; 'as a gift' suffices. 'Send the flower' should be plural 'send flowers'.

× For example, on the special occasionally when someone have a wedding engagement or birthday party or when someone come from the new country for greeting so.

✓ For example, on special occasions when someone has a wedding, engagement, or birthday party, or when someone comes from a new country for greeting.

'Occasionally' is an adverb; 'occasions' is the correct noun. 'Someone have' should be 'someone has'. 'Someone come' should be 'someone comes'. 'The new country' should be 'a new country'.