Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to reduce filler words like 'umm' and 'uh' to make your speech more fluent. Also, use correct grammar such as 'many flowers' instead of 'so much many flowers' and 'a special place' instead of 'the special'. Keep your sentences clear and concise.

例: Yes, I love flowers. I grow and take care of many flowers in my home garden near the main hall. My friends and I often sit together in this special place to enjoy the flowers.

提案: Avoid repetition and filler words. Use correct grammar such as 'we have a beautiful garden with many flowers'. Also, complete your sentences fully to avoid abrupt endings. Use linking words like 'for example' properly to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I know many people who love flowers, including my sister and friends. For example, my sister and I have a beautiful garden with many flowers, and we usually sit there in the evening to have coffee.

提案: Use correct plural forms and sentence structures, for example, 'there are certain flowers' and 'my friends live in front of me'. Avoid filler words and be specific about the types of flowers. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, there are many flowers near my home, especially in my friends' garden in front of me. They decorate it well with flowers such as tulips and green plants.

提案: Improve sentence clarity and grammar, for example, 'I often take photos of flowers, especially in the morning when I go for exercise'. Avoid incomplete sentences and use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, I often take photos of flowers in my daily life, especially in the morning when I go for exercise. My university garden has many beautiful flowers, so I like to take pictures there.

提案: Avoid unclear phrases like 'top of the discussions'. Use correct grammar such as 'people usually send flowers to others as a symbol of love and greeting'. Use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: Yes, in my country, people often send flowers to others as a symbol of love and greeting. For example, when someone arrives from another country, we go to the airport to greet them with flowers.

× I tend to umm, grow the flowers and take care of it.

✓ I tend to umm, grow flowers and take care of them.

The verb 'grow' is correctly used here, but the pronoun 'it' is incorrect because 'flowers' is plural. The correct pronoun should be 'them' to agree with the plural noun 'flowers'.

× I have so much many flowers in my own house gardens which uh, located near to my uh, main hall and me and my friends usually come sit together in the special.

✓ I have so many flowers in my own house gardens which are located near my main hall, and my friends and I usually sit together in the special area.

The phrase 'so much many flowers' is incorrect; 'so many flowers' is correct for countable nouns. Also, 'which uh, located' lacks the verb 'are' for plural subject 'gardens'. 'Me and my friends' should be 'my friends and I' as the subject of the sentence. 'Come sit together in the special' is incomplete; 'special area' or 'special place' is needed.

× Yes, I know certain people who love flowers so much, especially including, you can say my friends, my sister own, uh, me and my sister, for example, we have a beautiful garden, which have a beautiful and so many flowers in my garden.

✓ Yes, I know certain people who love flowers so much, especially my friends and my sister. For example, my sister and I have a beautiful garden, which has many beautiful flowers.

The phrase 'which have' is incorrect because 'garden' is singular and requires 'has'. 'So many flowers' is better than 'and so many flowers' here. Also, 'me and my sister' should be 'my sister and I' as the subject.

× So me and my sister usually, uh, sit and having coffee in the evening time in the garden and.

✓ So my sister and I usually sit and have coffee in the evening in the garden.

The verb phrase 'sit and having' is incorrect; it should be 'sit and have' to maintain parallel structure. Also, 'me and my sister' should be 'my sister and I' as the subject.

× Yes Sir, there is certain flowers and beautiful area near to me especially the area which my friends is living in front of me.

✓ Yes Sir, there are certain flowers and a beautiful area near me, especially the area where my friends live in front of me.

'There is' is incorrect for plural 'flowers'; it should be 'there are'. 'Beautiful area' needs an article 'a'. 'Near to me' should be 'near me'. 'Which my friends is living' is incorrect; it should be 'where my friends live'.

× They have a beautiful garden and flowers.

✓ They have a beautiful garden and flowers.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× They decorate it with well uh, garden and well flowers uh, such as like a Tulip and green.

✓ They decorate it with a well-maintained garden and beautiful flowers such as tulips and greenery.

'With well uh, garden and well flowers' is incorrect; it should be 'with a well-maintained garden and beautiful flowers'. 'Such as like a Tulip and green' is incorrect; 'such as tulips and greenery' is correct. Articles and adjectives need correction.

× Yes, so most of the time I take the photo of flower in my daily life, especially when I wake up in the morning and going for exercise.

✓ Yes, most of the time I take photos of flowers in my daily life, especially when I wake up in the morning and go for exercise.

'The photo of flower' is incorrect; it should be 'photos of flowers' for plural. 'Going for exercise' should be 'go for exercise' to match the subject and tense.

× So on to a minor university. In my university garden there is so many beautiful flowers garden.

✓ So I go to a minor university. In my university garden, there are so many beautiful flowers.

'There is so many' is incorrect; it should be 'there are so many' for plural 'flowers'. 'Flowers garden' is redundant; 'flowers' is sufficient.

× So I prefer to take the photo with the flowers.

✓ So I prefer to take photos with the flowers.

'The photo' should be plural 'photos' to match the context. The sentence is otherwise correct.

× Yes, it's the top of the discussions.

✓ Yes, it's a popular topic of discussion.

'Top of the discussions' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'a popular topic of discussion'.

× In my country people usually send the flower to other as a symbol of love and greeting of to people.

✓ In my country, people usually send flowers to others as a symbol of love and greeting.

'Send the flower' should be 'send flowers' for plural. 'To other' should be 'to others'. 'Greeting of to people' is incorrect; 'greeting' alone suffices.

× Like for example when the people or someone come from the other country, we go to airport and greet him or her.

✓ For example, when people come from another country, we go to the airport and greet them.

'The people or someone' is awkward; 'people' suffices. 'Come' should be 'come' (plural). 'The other country' should be 'another country'. 'Greet him or her' can be simplified to 'greet them' for inclusivity.

× So we represent the flower to him while greeting.

✓ So we present flowers to them while greeting.

'Represent the flower' is incorrect; 'present flowers' is correct. 'Him' should be 'them' to be gender-neutral and plural agreement.