Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和用词不当，如“bartend my mood”应为“brighten my mood”，且句子结构不够自然。建议注意动词时态和词汇的准确使用，同时避免重复表达。

例: Yes, I love flowers because they always brighten my mood and make me feel joyful. However, as a student, I have to be careful with my budget, so I don't spend too much money on them.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和词汇使用不当，如“the magnet feel joyful”不合适。建议使用更准确的表达，并增加连接词使句子更连贯。

例: Yes, most people I know love flowers because receiving a bouquet as a gift makes them feel joyful and happy.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误，如“a lot of flower”应为“a lot of flowers”，且表达不够流畅。建议注意名词复数形式和句子结构的自然性。

例: No, there are not many flowers in my country; instead, there are more fruit trees. So, if I want to buy a bouquet for my friends, I usually have to travel to another city by bicycle or motorcycle.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清，如“Whenever I walking”应为“Whenever I walk”，且句子冗长且不连贯。建议简化句子并使用正确的时态。

例: Yes, definitely. Whenever I walk on the street or look through windows, I often see beautiful and delicate flowers. I love taking photos of them because their colors and shapes are very attractive and make me feel happy.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不清晰，如“a bouquet of flower”应为“a bouquet of flowers”，且后半句不合逻辑。建议使用简单明了的句子表达观点。

例: Yes, many people in my country like to send flowers as gifts on occasions such as Valentine's Day or birthdays. For example, I often buy a bouquet of flowers as a birthday gift for my friends to make them happy.

× Yes, I love flowers because whenever I receive a bouquet, it's bartend my mood and made me feel joyful.

✓ Yes, I love flowers because whenever I receive a bouquet, it brightens my mood and makes me feel joyful.

这里 'bartend' 是错误的词，正确的应该是 'brightens'，表示使心情变好。动词需要用第三人称单数形式，因为主语是 'it'。另外，'made' 应该用现在时 'makes'，因为描述的是习惯性动作。

× Well, most of people I know love flowers and I think people like to receive a bouquet of flowers as a gift because the magnet feel joyful and happy.

✓ Well, most of the people I know love flowers and I think people like to receive a bouquet of flowers as a gift because it makes them feel joyful and happy.

'most of people' 应该加定冠词变成 'most of the people'。'the magnet' 用词错误，应该用 'it' 指代花束，'feel' 前需要加 'makes'，并且 'them' 指代复数人称代词。

× Well, I think that no, there is not a lot of flower in my country, there are more fruit instead.

✓ Well, I think that no, there are not a lot of flowers in my country, there is more fruit instead.

'a lot of flower' 中 'flower' 应该用复数 'flowers'。'there is' 和 'there are' 要根据后面名词单复数形式一致。'fruit' 是不可数名词，单数形式正确。

× So if I want to buy a bouquet of flower to my friends, I always have to ride my bicycle, motorcycle to the other city.

✓ So if I want to buy a bouquet of flowers for my friends, I always have to ride my bicycle or motorcycle to another city.

'a bouquet of flower' 中 'flower' 应用复数 'flowers'。'buy ... to my friends' 应改为 'buy ... for my friends'，表示为某人买东西。'the other city' 应改为 'another city'，表示不同的城市。

× Yes, definitely. Whenever I walking on the street or looking through windows, I often see beautiful and delicate flowers and I love to take a photos of them because their colors and shapes are very attractive and take all the sides made me feel happy.

✓ Yes, definitely. Whenever I am walking on the street or looking through windows, I often see beautiful and delicate flowers and I love to take photos of them because their colors and shapes are very attractive and seeing them from all sides makes me feel happy.

'I walking' 应改为 'I am walking'，现在进行时需要助动词。'a photos' 中 'photos' 是复数，前面不加冠词。'take all the sides' 表达不清，改为 'seeing them from all sides' 更准确。'made' 应用现在时 'makes'，因为描述习惯性动作。

× Yes, in my country, many people love to send flowers as a gift such as umm Valentine's Day or birthday.

✓ Yes, in my country, many people love to send flowers as gifts on occasions such as Valentine's Day or birthdays.

'as a gift such as' 结构不正确，应该用 'as gifts on occasions such as' 来表达在特定场合送花。'birthday' 应用复数 'birthdays'，表示多次生日。

× For instance, I'd really love to buy a bouquet of flower as a birthday gift to my friends every time when they feel smile and joy for them feel.

✓ For instance, I'd really love to buy a bouquet of flowers as a birthday gift for my friends every time when they feel happy and joyful.

'a bouquet of flower' 中 'flower' 应用复数 'flowers'。'as a birthday gift to my friends' 应改为 'as a birthday gift for my friends'。'feel smile and joy for them feel' 语法错误，改为 'feel happy and joyful' 更通顺。