Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 답변이 자연스럽지 않고 문법 오류가 있습니다. 문장을 간결하고 명확하게 표현하며, 중복되는 표현을 피하고, 구체적인 이유를 덧붙이세요.

例: Yes, I love flowers because they make me feel relaxed and refreshed. Seeing a colorful garden lifts my mood and makes me feel peaceful.

提案: 답변이 비교적 자연스럽지만, 문장 연결이 부자연스럽고 일부 문법 오류가 있습니다. 연결어를 사용해 문장을 매끄럽게 하고, 불필요한 단어를 제거하세요.

例: My mom loves plants so much that she's often called 'green fingers'. She always takes care of her small garden and balcony flowers carefully.

提案: 답변이 명확하지만, 문장 연결을 더 자연스럽게 하고 구체적인 예시를 추가하면 좋겠습니다.

例: Yes, my city has many flowers, especially cherry blossoms and other spring plants. They are popular because they create a beautiful and peaceful atmosphere during spring.

提案: 답변에 중복과 문법 오류가 있습니다. 문장을 간결하게 하고, 구체적인 상황을 설명하며, 연결어를 사용해 보세요.

例: Yes, I often take photos of unique flowers and beautiful scenery. Looking at these photos later makes me feel relaxed.

提案: 답변이 이해되지만, 문법과 표현을 더 자연스럽게 다듬고, 구체적인 예시를 추가하세요.

例: In my country, people often send flowers on special occasions like housewarming parties. It's a nice way to show respect and appreciation to the hosts.

× Yes, I love flowers because they makes me too feel relieved and to rest fresh atmosphere when I see a colorful blanket I feel on the cloud night.

✓ Yes, I love flowers because they make me feel relieved and refreshed. When I see a colorful blanket, I feel like I'm on cloud nine at night.

The verb 'makes' does not agree with the plural subject 'they'; it should be 'make'. Also, 'too feel' is incorrect; it should be 'feel'. The phrase 'to rest fresh atmosphere' is unclear and corrected to 'refreshed'. The sentence about 'colorful blanket' and 'cloud night' is unclear and corrected to a common expression 'feel like I'm on cloud nine at night' to convey the intended meaning.

× She always keeps her small garden and the balcony and she takes a lot of time to K take care of flowers.

✓ She always tends to her small garden and balcony and spends a lot of time taking care of flowers.

The phrase 'keeps her small garden and the balcony' is awkward; 'tends to' is more appropriate. The phrase 'takes a lot of time to K take care' contains a typo 'K' and incorrect verb form; corrected to 'spends a lot of time taking care'.

× Yes, there is a wide range of flowers in my city, especially cherry blossom and other spring plants.

✓ Yes, there is a wide range of flowers in my city, especially cherry blossoms and other spring plants.

'Cherry blossom' should be plural 'cherry blossoms' to match 'a wide range of flowers'. The use of 'there is' is correct here.

× It is popular among people because it creates beautiful and peaceful atmosphere during the spring season.

✓ It is popular among people because it creates a beautiful and peaceful atmosphere during the spring season.

The noun 'atmosphere' requires an article 'a' here to be grammatically correct.

× Yes, I usually snap portal or flowers when I see the unique kinds of flowers and the scenery is beautiful when I when I see my gallery.

✓ Yes, I usually snap photos of flowers when I see unique kinds of flowers, and the scenery looks beautiful when I see them in my gallery.

'Portal' is incorrect; it should be 'photos'. The phrase 'the unique kinds of flowers' should be 'unique kinds of flowers' without 'the'. The repetition 'when I when I' is an error. 'See my gallery' is unclear; corrected to 'see them in my gallery' to clarify the subject.

× When I see the flower in my gallery, I feel relieved.

✓ When I see the flowers in my gallery, I feel relieved.

'The flower' should be plural 'the flowers' to match the context of multiple flowers in the gallery.

× In my country, many people send a flower on special occasions such as home house warming party.

✓ In my country, many people send flowers on special occasions such as housewarming parties.

'A flower' should be plural 'flowers' because people usually send multiple flowers. 'Home house warming party' is redundant and incorrect; corrected to 'housewarming parties'.

× It is a great way to express respect to hosts that invites them.

✓ It is a great way to express respect to hosts who invite them.

'Hosts that invites' is incorrect; 'hosts who invite' is the correct relative pronoun and verb agreement.