Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is natural and detailed, but it is a bit long and slightly redundant. Try to keep your answer within 4-5 sentences and avoid repeating similar ideas. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I love flowers because their vibrant colors and fragrances brighten up any room. I enjoy gardening at home, which allows me to express my emotions and celebrate special occasions. Therefore, I often buy flowers to decorate my space.

提案: Your answer has good content but some grammar mistakes and awkward phrasing reduce clarity. Pay attention to sentence structure and word order. Also, use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, my mother loves gardening and has a beautiful flower garden. Additionally, a friend of mine is a florist who is passionate about arranging flowers. I often give flowers to my sister because she adores them.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains repetition and incomplete sentences. Try to organize your ideas clearly, avoid filler words, and complete your thoughts. Use linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, there are many parks and gardens filled with flowers in my area because the climate is suitable for growing various types. Moreover, the city decorates public spaces with flowers during certain seasons to celebrate festivals.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and lacks clarity. Avoid unfinished sentences and organize your ideas logically. Use linking words and provide specific examples to enrich your answer.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of flowers during my walks and often share them on social media stories. Flowers, especially small wildflowers in spring, are excellent subjects for practicing photography skills.

提案: Your answer has good points but contains repetition and some grammar errors. Avoid filler words and repeated words. Use linking words to connect ideas and complete your sentences clearly.

例: Yes, flowers are a popular gift for special occasions like birthdays, weddings, and anniversaries. They are also often used to express sympathy. Sending flowers is a traditional way to show love and appreciation, and florists are common in cities, making it easy to buy them.

× And I get often gift flowers to my sister because she adored them.

✓ And I often get flowers as gifts for my sister because she adores them.

The original sentence misplaces the adverb 'often' and uses incorrect verb forms. 'Get often gift flowers' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'often get flowers as gifts'. Also, 'she adored them' should be in present tense 'she adores them' to match the context. The pronoun usage is also corrected for clarity.

× Well, there are there are many parks and gardens in my area filled with flowers and uh, in the area that I live, the climate is suitable for growing a variety of flowers.

✓ Well, there are many parks and gardens in my area filled with flowers, and the climate where I live is suitable for growing a variety of flowers.

The sentence contains repetition ('there are there are') and awkward phrasing. Removing the repeated phrase and restructuring the sentence improves clarity and flow.

× The city organizes flower first of all during certain seasons and public spaces are decorated with flowers and haste to be.

✓ The city organizes flower festivals during certain seasons, and public spaces are decorated with flowers.

The original sentence is unclear and contains the phrase 'haste to be' which is incorrect. The intended meaning is likely 'flower festivals'. The sentence is corrected for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Well, I love capturing the beauty of flowers during my walks I often share flowers photos on social media, especially on the stories.

✓ Well, I love capturing the beauty of flowers during my walks. I often share photos of flowers on social media, especially in stories.

The phrase 'flowers photos' is incorrect; it should be 'photos of flowers'. Also, 'on the stories' is better expressed as 'in stories'. The sentence is split for clarity.

× Flowers are a great subject for practicing photography skills, especially the ones that are little and are known as the wildflowers and blue and spring.

✓ Flowers are a great subject for practicing photography skills, especially the small ones known as wildflowers that bloom in spring and have blue colors.

The original sentence is confusing and contains incorrect adjective usage ('the ones that are little'). It is corrected to properly describe 'small ones known as wildflowers' and clarifies the reference to 'blue and spring'.

× Flower Flowers are a popular gift for special occasions such as birthday weddings and anniversaries.

✓ Flowers are a popular gift for special occasions such as birthdays, weddings, and anniversaries.

The sentence repeats 'Flower Flowers' and lacks commas between items in the list. Correcting these improves readability and grammar.

× There are umm often used as a way to express sympathy and sending flowers as a very traditional way to show love and appreciation to loved ones and florists are common in cities, making it easy.

✓ They are often used as a way to express sympathy, and sending flowers is a very traditional way to show love and appreciation to loved ones. Florists are common in cities, making it easy.

The original sentence is a run-on with unclear subject references and missing verbs. It is corrected by clarifying the subject 'They' (flowers), fixing verb forms, and splitting into two sentences for clarity.