Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は自然ですが、"But"で終わっているため、文が未完成に感じられます。回答は5文以内にまとめ、文の終わりを明確にしましょう。また、"umm"の使用は控え、より流暢に話す練習をしてください。

例: Yes, I like flowers very much. I especially enjoy seeing seasonal flowers on my way to school. However, I rarely buy flowers for myself because I have an allergy to pollen.

提案: 文法の誤り（"my grandmother love"は"loves"）や冗長な表現があります。接続詞を使って文を論理的に繋ぎ、具体的な内容を簡潔に述べる練習をしましょう。

例: Yes, I do. My mother and grandmother both love flowers. They often talk about the flowers they grew up with in their gardens, and they have a lot of knowledge about different types of flowers.

提案: 回答が途中で終わっており、内容が不十分です。文を完結させ、具体的な説明を加えてください。また、冗長な表現を避け、明確に答えることを心がけましょう。

例: There are not many flowers in my city, but some seasonal flowers bloom along the Main Street. For example, cherry blossoms appear along the river in spring, which creates a beautiful scenery.

提案: "umm"や"because, but"のような不自然な言い回しを避け、文を簡潔にまとめましょう。具体的な理由や感想を付け加えると良いです。

例: Not really. I don't usually take photos of flowers in my daily life, but I often photograph seasonal flowers. For example, in spring and summer, I like to take pictures of cherry blossoms and sunflowers because they are very beautiful.

提案: "umm"の使用を控え、文法的に正しい表現を使いましょう。"each other"の使い方も誤っているため、正しい表現に直してください。

例: Yes, people in my country often give flowers on special occasions like Valentine's Day or birthdays. Many couples also exchange flowers on their anniversaries.

× My mother really likes flowers and also my grandmother love flowers so they often talk about their the flowers that they grow up in their garden and also they are really familiar, they have a lot of knowledge of flowers.

✓ My mother really likes flowers and also my grandmother loves flowers so they often talk about the flowers that they grew up with in their garden and also they are really familiar with them; they have a lot of knowledge of flowers.

The verb 'love' should be 'loves' to agree with the singular subject 'my grandmother' (subject-verb agreement). 'Grow up' is incorrect here; the correct phrase is 'grew up with' to indicate the flowers they were familiar with during their childhood. Also, 'their the flowers' is incorrect; it should be 'the flowers'. Additionally, 'familiar' requires the preposition 'with' to be correct.

× My mother really likes flowers and also my grandmother love flowers so they often talk about their the flowers that they grow up in their garden and also they are really familiar, they have a lot of knowledge of flowers.

✓ My mother really likes flowers and also my grandmother loves flowers so they often talk about the flowers that they grew up with in their garden and also they are really familiar with them; they have a lot of knowledge of flowers.

The phrase 'grow up in their garden' is incorrect in this context; it should be 'grew up with' to indicate familiarity with the flowers. Also, 'familiar' requires the preposition 'with' to be grammatically correct.

× Well, there are not so many flowers in my city, but there are some seasonal flowers on my on alongside the Main Street.

✓ Well, there are not so many flowers in my city, but there are some seasonal flowers alongside the Main Street.

The phrase 'on my on alongside' is incorrect and redundant. Removing 'on my on' clarifies the sentence and corrects the prepositional usage.

× Well, there are not so many flowers in my city, but there are some seasonal flowers on my on alongside the Main Street.

✓ Well, there are not so many flowers in my city, but there are some seasonal flowers alongside the Main Street.

The preposition 'on my on' is incorrect and unnecessary. The correct preposition to indicate location next to something is 'alongside'.

× For example, they are cherry blossoms along the river, which makes me.

✓ For example, there are cherry blossoms along the river, which I enjoy seeing.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks a clear object after 'which makes me'. The correction completes the sentence to express the intended meaning clearly.

× Not really. I don't often take photos of flowers, umm my daily life because, but I often take photos of seasonal flowers.

✓ Not really. I don't often take photos of flowers in my daily life, but I often take photos of seasonal flowers.

The phrase 'umm my daily life because, but' is fragmented and incorrect. The correction removes unnecessary words and connects the ideas properly with 'in my daily life, but'.

× In spring and summer I often take cherry blossoms and sunflowers because it's really big.

✓ In spring and summer I often take photos of cherry blossoms and sunflowers because they are really big.

'It's' refers to singular, but 'cherry blossoms and sunflowers' are plural, so 'they are' is correct. Also, specifying 'take photos of' clarifies the action.

× many dating couples often give flowers each other on their anniversary.

✓ Many dating couples often give flowers to each other on their anniversary.

The verb 'give' requires the preposition 'to' before the indirect object 'each other'.