Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'umm' to make your answer sound more natural and fluent. Also, make your sentences more concise and clear by directly stating your opinion and supporting it with a specific reason.

例: Yes, I love flowers because many of them have a pleasant fragrance that makes me feel relaxed and happy.

提案: Avoid repeating words and filler sounds. Try to provide more specific details and avoid saying you can't remember names; instead, focus on describing the flowers or why your mom loves them.

例: Yes, my mom loves flowers. We have various kinds at home, including African violets and some rare species with vibrant colors that brighten our house.

提案: Try to use linking words to make your answer more coherent and reduce filler words. Also, be more specific about the types of flowers or seasons to enrich your answer.

例: Yes, I live near the Botanic Garden where you can find beautiful and colorful flowers throughout the year. For example, even in fall, many species bloom, creating a vibrant landscape.

提案: Reduce filler words and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide more specific details about when and why you take photos.

例: Yes, I definitely enjoy taking photos of flowers. On my campus, there are several small gardens with beautiful flowers that change with the seasons, and I usually take pictures during my breaks.

提案: Avoid filler words and incomplete sentences. Provide a complete and clear answer with examples of occasions and types of flowers or arrangements people send.

例: Yes, sending flowers is very popular in my country. People often give flowers for occasions like weddings, birthdays, and graduations, usually in bouquets or decorative arrangements.

× I think uh, uh, most of people uh, enjoying seeing uh flowers, umm, especially some of them, uh, have, uh, have have a nice smell that uh, it feels like.

✓ I think, uh, most people enjoy seeing flowers, umm, especially some of them have a nice smell that, uh, feels pleasant.

The phrase 'most of people' is incorrect; it should be 'most people' because 'people' is already plural and does not need 'of' here. Also, 'enjoying' is a verb form that does not fit here; the correct form is 'enjoy' to match the present simple tense. Additionally, 'have have have' is a repetition error and should be corrected to a single 'have'. The phrase 'it feels like' is incomplete and unclear; changing it to 'feels pleasant' clarifies the meaning.

× we have different, uh, kind of flowers in our house.

✓ we have different kinds of flowers in our house.

The phrase 'different kind of flowers' is incorrect because 'kind' should be plural 'kinds' when referring to multiple types, and 'of' should be used after 'kinds' to link to 'flowers'. So, the correct phrase is 'different kinds of flowers'.

× some rare species of flowers that really, I can't remember their name now.

✓ some rare species of flowers that really, I can't remember their names now.

The word 'species' is plural here, so the pronoun referring to it should be plural as well. Therefore, 'their name' should be 'their names' to agree in number.

× there are a lot of, uh, umm, species that they just, uh, grew and, uh, bloom.

✓ there are a lot of, uh, umm, species that just, uh, grow and, uh, bloom.

The verb 'grew' is the past tense form, but the sentence context requires present tense to describe a general fact. Also, the pronoun 'they' is unnecessary and should be omitted for correct sentence structure. The verbs should be in present tense 'grow' and 'bloom' to match the present description.

× there are a lot of uh, small garden and with really beautiful uh flowers in different season

✓ there are a lot of uh, small gardens with really beautiful uh flowers in different seasons

The phrase 'a lot of' requires a plural noun, so 'small garden' should be 'small gardens'. Also, 'in different season' should be plural 'in different seasons' to indicate multiple seasons.

× people for different occasion alike, uh, wedding, umm, birthday, uh, graduation ceremony, uh, send each other uh, nice flowers in different uh, form like.

✓ people for different occasions like, uh, weddings, umm, birthdays, uh, graduation ceremonies, uh, send each other uh, nice flowers in different uh, forms like.

The word 'occasion' should be plural 'occasions' because it refers to multiple events. The phrase 'alike' is incorrect here; 'like' is the correct preposition to introduce examples. Also, the events 'wedding', 'birthday', and 'graduation ceremony' should be plural to match the plural 'occasions'. Finally, 'form' should be plural 'forms' to agree with 'different'.