Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ваш ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и избыточные выражения. Постарайтесь использовать правильные формы глаголов и избегать повторов. Также сделайте ответ более естественным и структурированным, например, начните с общего утверждения, затем добавьте причину.

例: Yes, I love flowers because they make me feel happy. I find them very beautiful, and I think many people appreciate receiving flowers from loved ones like their boyfriend or family members.

提案: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и нечеткие выражения. Используйте правильные местоимения и глагольные формы. Избегайте повторов и уточните детали, чтобы ответ был более связным и понятным.

例: Yes, many people I know love flowers, including my friends and my mother. Older people especially appreciate flowers because they find them beautiful and calming.

提案: Ответ достаточно понятен, но можно улучшить связность и структуру. Используйте связующие слова, чтобы объединить предложения и сделать ответ более плавным.

例: Yes, there are many beautiful flowers where I live. For example, in my home garden, we have lots of roses and other colorful flowers.

提案: Ответ содержит грамматические ошибки и немного неестественные выражения. Используйте правильные времена и более естественные фразы. Также добавьте связующие слова для плавности.

例: Yes, whenever my friends, dad, or boyfriend give me flowers, I like to take photos and videos of them for my TikTok channel because they look very beautiful.

提案: Ответ неясен и содержит много пауз и повторов. Постарайтесь говорить более связно и структурировано, избегая лишних звуков и уточняя информацию.

例: Yes, in my country, people often send flowers to celebrate special occasions like birthdays. For example, my dad, friends, and boyfriend usually give me flowers on my birthday.

× Yes, I love flowers, it makes me happy, it's very beautiful and I think every girl like flowers and like when boyfriend, dad or other people present for your flowers.

✓ Yes, I love flowers, they make me happy, they're very beautiful and I think every girl likes flowers and likes when her boyfriend, dad or other people present flowers to her.

The subject 'flowers' is plural, so the verb should be 'make' instead of 'makes'. Also, 'every girl' is singular, so the verb should be 'likes'. The phrase 'like when boyfriend, dad or other people present for your flowers' is incorrect; it should be 'likes when her boyfriend, dad or other people present flowers to her' to correctly use possessive pronouns and verb forms.

× Yes, all my friends love flowers, my mom loves flowers. All my old people, what I know, loves flowers because it's very beautiful. And other people love another flowers, other flowers.

✓ Yes, all my friends love flowers, my mom loves flowers. All the old people I know love flowers because they're very beautiful. And other people love other flowers.

'All my old people, what I know' is incorrect; it should be 'all the old people I know'. The verb 'loves' should be 'love' to agree with the plural subject. 'It's very beautiful' should be 'they're very beautiful' referring to flowers (plural). 'Another flowers' is incorrect; 'other flowers' is correct.

× Yes, in my country people always send flowers or, uh, other. Celebrations, uh, to my birthday, my dad, my friends, my boyfriend and uh, other take me flowers.

✓ Yes, in my country people always send flowers or, uh, other gifts for celebrations, uh, on my birthday. My dad, my friends, my boyfriend and others give me flowers.

The phrase 'other. Celebrations' is fragmented and unclear; it should be 'other gifts for celebrations'. The preposition 'to my birthday' is incorrect; 'on my birthday' is correct. 'Other take me flowers' is incorrect; it should be 'others give me flowers' to use the correct pronoun and verb.