Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear and relevant, but it could be more natural and structured. Try to start with a direct response, then add specific examples with linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I love flowers, especially bright ones. For example, my favorites are roses and tulips because they look vibrant and cheerful.

提案: Your answer has some grammar and clarity issues. Use correct possessive pronouns and clearer sentence structure. Also, explain what 'folk flowers' means or use a more common term.

例: Yes, my mom loves wildflowers, and I often give them to her as gifts just to make her happy, even when there is no special occasion.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be more fluent and grammatically correct. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I don't think there are many flowers in Asana because the climate is very cold. Also, I haven't seen any special flower gardens or plantations in my city.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant. To improve, you could add a linking word and a bit more detail to make it sound more natural.

例: No, I don't usually take photos of flowers because I don't find it necessary, and also, my phone doesn't have enough storage space.

提案: Your answer has grammar and clarity issues. Use correct plural forms and sentence structure. Also, organize your ideas with linking words and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, especially men often give flowers to women during celebrations such as International Women's Day on March 8th or on their birthdays, as a way to show love and appreciation.

× Yes, my mom loves folk flowers and I try to give them it's without any reason just as a present to make my mom happier.

✓ Yes, my mom loves folk flowers and I try to give them gifts without any reason, just as a present to make my mom happier.

The pronoun 'it's' is incorrectly used here; it should be replaced with a noun like 'gifts' to correctly refer to the items being given. Using 'it's' (it is) is grammatically incorrect in this context.

× I don't think that there are many flowers in Asana because, uh, there is a really cold climate and I didn't see any special plantations where flowers in my city.

✓ I don't think that there are many flowers in Asana because there is a really cold climate, and I haven't seen any special plantations of flowers in my city.

The original sentence has a missing verb phrase after 'where flowers' making it incomplete. Also, 'didn't see' should be 'haven't seen' to match the present perfect tense appropriate for experiences up to now. The sentence structure is corrected for clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× No, I don't take photos of flowers because I don't find it necessary and also I don't have much storage to keep it in my phone.

✓ No, I don't take photos of flowers because I don't find it necessary and also I don't have much storage to keep them on my phone.

The pronoun 'it' incorrectly refers to 'photos' which is plural; the correct pronoun should be 'them' to agree in number. Also, 'in my phone' is better expressed as 'on my phone' when referring to storage.

× Yes, especially men's do this to women for example in different celebrations like 8th March, International Women's Day namely or their birthdays.

✓ Yes, especially men do this to women, for example, on different celebrations like March 8th, International Women's Day, or their birthdays.

The word 'men's' is a possessive form and incorrect here; it should be 'men' as the plural noun. Also, 'namely' is unnecessary and awkward in this context. Preposition 'on' is used for dates and celebrations.

× Women's birthdays especially men's give give it to their love.

✓ On women's birthdays, especially, men give flowers to their loved ones.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Women's birthdays especially men's give give it to their love' is incorrect in structure and pronoun use. The corrected sentence clarifies the meaning, uses proper subject-verb agreement, and replaces 'love' with 'loved ones' for clarity.