Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Старайтесь избегать слов-паразитов, таких как "umm" и "uh", чтобы ваша речь звучала более естественно и уверенно. Также постарайтесь строить предложения более связно и избегать повторов, например, "scent" повторяется дважды подряд. Попробуйте использовать более разнообразную лексику и структурировать ответ в 2-3 предложения.

例: Yes, I love flowers because of their pleasant fragrance. My favorite flowers are dandelions since they have a bright yellow color and a lovely scent.

提案: Избегайте нечетких и неполных предложений, старайтесь выражать мысли ясно и логично. Используйте связующие слова для плавного перехода между идеями. Также обратите внимание на грамматические ошибки и порядок слов. Постарайтесь давать конкретные детали, например, название книги или почему вы выбираете именно такой подарок.

例: Yes, my little sister loves flowers. Every year on her birthday, we give her a book about different flowers, including dandelions and others, because she enjoys learning about them.

提案: Старайтесь строить предложения более грамотно и избегать длинных, запутанных фраз. Используйте связующие слова, чтобы сделать ответ более логичным. Также уточните детали, например, кто именно занимается посадкой цветов и почему это важно.

例: Yes, there are many flowers in Tashkent because the government has a policy to maintain the city's beauty. Every spring, workers plant flowers in gardens and parks to keep the city attractive.

提案: Избегайте незавершенных предложений и старайтесь выражать мысли полностью. Используйте связующие слова для логичности. Также постарайтесь использовать более точные выражения и избегать ошибок, например, "makes me to escape" лучше заменить на "helps me escape".

例: Yes, I love taking photos of flowers because it helps me escape from a hectic lifestyle. When I look at these photos, I feel relaxed and connected to nature.

提案: Старайтесь говорить более ясно и избегать повторов и запинок. Постарайтесь структурировать ответ, чтобы он был логичным и полным. Также уточните, кому обычно дарят цветы и в каких случаях.

例: No, in my country, especially in Tashkent, people usually send flowers only between lovers. For example, men often give roses to their partners on special occasions.

× Yes, I like flowers because of their umm, scent so the most, uh, my favorite ones are dandelions because they are uh, yellow and with beautiful scent.

✓ Yes, I like flowers because of their umm, scent, so the most, uh, my favorite ones are dandelions because they are uh, yellow and have a beautiful scent.

The phrase 'with beautiful scent' is incorrect because 'with' is not the proper preposition here and 'scent' needs an article 'a' to be grammatically correct. The correct form is 'have a beautiful scent' to describe the flowers' characteristic.

× Uh yes, the person who adores flowers is my little sister and every her birthday we try to give us a present book it umm of different flowers, for instance dandelions then umm dandelions and other like.

✓ Uh yes, the person who adores flowers is my little sister and every year on her birthday we try to give her a present, a book about different flowers, for instance dandelions and others like them.

The phrase 'every her birthday' is incorrect; it should be 'every year on her birthday'. Also, 'give us a present book it' is incorrect; it should be 'give her a present, a book'. The pronouns and word order were misused, causing confusion.

× Yes, in my country in Tashkent there are lots of gardens, parks where flowers are planted and this is because of the policy in my country to keep the countries aesthetic view workers every spring plant.

✓ Yes, in my country, in Tashkent, there are lots of gardens and parks where flowers are planted, and this is because of the policy in my country to keep the country's aesthetic view. Workers plant every spring.

The original sentence lacks proper punctuation and has awkward phrasing. 'Countries aesthetic view' should be 'country's aesthetic view' with a possessive apostrophe. Also, 'workers every spring plant' is incorrect word order; it should be 'Workers plant every spring'.

× Yes, I adore taking photos in my everyday life because it makes me to escape from the hectic lifestyle reminding me about the peace of the nature and when I see those photos, I feel myself relaxed and I can also make.

✓ Yes, I adore taking photos in my everyday life because it helps me escape from the hectic lifestyle, reminding me of the peace of nature, and when I see those photos, I feel relaxed and can also create more.

The phrase 'makes me to escape' is incorrect; it should be 'helps me escape' or 'makes me escape' without 'to'. Also, 'reminding me about the peace of the nature' should be 'reminding me of the peace of nature'. 'Feel myself relaxed' is incorrect; it should be 'feel relaxed'. The sentence ends abruptly with 'I can also make' which is incomplete; adding 'create more' or similar completes the thought.

× Uh, no, I guess in my country, especially in Tashkent, only lovers can can give to each other. Not to each other, but men, uh, gifts gifted uh, roses, roses for, for.

✓ Uh, no, I guess in my country, especially in Tashkent, only lovers can give gifts to each other. Not to everyone, but men give gifts, especially roses, to women.

The phrase 'only lovers can can give to each other' has a repeated word and is incomplete. 'Not to each other, but men, uh, gifts gifted' is confusing and incorrect. The corrected sentence clarifies that only lovers exchange gifts, specifically men giving roses to women. Pronouns and sentence structure were misused causing confusion.