Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to use more natural English expressions and correct grammar. For example, say "especially red roses" instead of "roses color red". Also, avoid redundancy by combining ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I love flowers, especially red roses, because they always lift my mood when I see them.

提案: Improve sentence structure and use linking words to connect ideas. For example, use "and" or "such as" to list types and colors. Also, correct subject-verb agreement and plural forms.

例: Yes, my parents love flowers. We have many in our backyard, including different types such as bougainvilleas, which come in white, pink, red, and yellow.

提案: Make your answer more coherent by linking ideas and clarifying details. Avoid repeating the same idea and ensure sentences are complete and clear.

例: Yes, there are many flowers in our backyard in the Philippines because my parents love gardening. We even enjoy having breakfast in our small garden surrounded by flowers.

提案: Avoid short, fragmented sentences and use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. Also, try to vary your vocabulary to sound more natural.

例: Yes, of course. I love taking photos of flowers because they are vibrant and beautiful, and looking at them always improves my mood.

提案: Avoid filler words like "umm" and "uh". Also, clarify your ideas and use correct expressions. For example, say "if someone is unwell" instead of "hurting you". Use linking words to connect ideas.

例: Yes, people often send flowers, especially when someone is unwell or to express their love and care.

× Yes, I love flowers, especially roses color red.

✓ Yes, I love flowers, especially red roses.

The phrase 'roses color red' is incorrect because the adjective 'red' should directly modify the noun 'roses' to form 'red roses'. This is the correct adjective-noun order in English.

× It gives me good mood when I see flowers.

✓ They give me a good mood when I see flowers.

The subject 'flowers' is plural, so the verb should be 'give' instead of 'gives'. Also, 'good mood' needs the article 'a' to be grammatically correct.

× Yes, my father and my mother loves flowers we have in our backyard and we have a lot of it, different types like bougainvilleas.

✓ Yes, my father and my mother love the flowers we have in our backyard, and we have a lot of them, different types like bougainvilleas.

The compound subject 'my father and my mother' is plural, so the verb should be 'love' not 'loves'. Also, 'a lot of it' should be 'a lot of them' to agree with the plural noun 'flowers'. The definite article 'the' is needed before 'flowers' to specify them.

× Colors are white, pink, red, yellow.

✓ The colors are white, pink, red, and yellow.

Adding the definite article 'The' before 'colors' makes the sentence clearer. Also, adding 'and' before the last item in the list is standard in English.

× We have the breakfast in a small garden.

✓ We have breakfast in a small garden.

The article 'the' before 'breakfast' is unnecessary here. 'Have breakfast' is a fixed expression and does not require an article.

× It gives me. A good mood.

✓ It gives me a good mood.

The sentence is incorrectly split into two parts. It should be one complete sentence without a period between 'me' and 'a'.