Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は感情を表現していますが、文法の誤りや意味の不明瞭な部分があり、内容が伝わりにくいです。より明確で自然な表現を心がけ、例を具体的に述べると良いでしょう。

例: Yes, I really love flowers because they make me feel happy and relaxed. For example, when I receive flowers from my mother or friends, it brightens my day. My favorite flower is the sunflower because of its vibrant color.

提案: 内容は伝わりますが、文法の誤りや言葉の繰り返しがあり、流れがぎこちないです。接続詞を使い、文をつなげて自然な会話にしましょう。

例: Yes, I do. My mother loves flowers because she used to work at a flower shop. She often brings a variety of beautiful flowers home, which always makes me feel cheerful.

提案: 具体的な花の名前を挙げている点は良いですが、文法の誤りや不自然な表現が目立ちます。文を簡潔にし、正しい文法で表現しましょう。

例: Yes, there are many flowers around my house, such as cosmos and sunflowers. They are very beautiful and always cheer me up and brighten my room and garden.

提案: 内容は良いですが、動詞の単数・複数の一致や表現の自然さに注意しましょう。接続詞を使って文をつなげるとより良いです。

例: Yes, I often take pictures of various flowers, such as sunflowers and cosmos. I like them because they make me feel peaceful and add vibrancy to my daily life.

提案: 質問に対して直接的な答えが不明瞭で、文法や語彙の誤りが多いです。質問に対して明確に答え、具体例を簡潔に述べる練習をしましょう。

例: I'm not sure if people often send flowers to others in my country. However, on social media, my friends frequently post pictures of colorful flowers, which I find beautiful and cheerful.

× Yes, I really love flowers because flowers make me feel happy and enjoyable.

✓ Yes, I really love flowers because flowers make me feel happy and joyful.

The word 'enjoyable' is an adjective used to describe things, not feelings. The correct adjective to describe feelings is 'joyful'.

× For example when I did something grateful I yay I got from my mother of my friends.

✓ For example, when I receive something grateful from my mother or my friends, I feel happy.

The original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. It lacks proper structure and connectors. The correction clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence structure.

× My favorite colour flower is sunflower.

✓ My favorite color flower is the sunflower.

The noun 'sunflower' is singular and should be preceded by the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific type. Also, 'colour' is British English; 'color' is American English, but either is acceptable depending on context.

× Yes I do, my house mother loves flowers because actually she used to work at flower shop and always bring it to my home umm a variety of flowers.

✓ Yes, I do. My house mother loves flowers because she used to work at a flower shop and always brings a variety of flowers to my home.

The sentence has pronoun and verb agreement errors. 'Bring' should be 'brings' to agree with 'she'. 'It' is incorrect referring to 'a variety of flowers'; it should be omitted or replaced with 'them'. Also, 'flower shop' needs an article 'a'.

× It was so beautiful and make makes me cheerful.

✓ They are so beautiful and make me cheerful.

The subject refers to 'a variety of flowers' which is plural, so the verb should be plural 'make' not 'makes'. Also, 'It' should be 'They' to agree with plural subject.

× Yes, there are a variety of flowers around my house such as umm, cosmos and sunflower.

✓ Yes, there are a variety of flowers around my house such as cosmos and sunflowers.

The noun 'sunflower' should be plural 'sunflowers' to match 'a variety of flowers'.

× This which is so beautiful and always keep me cheer up and bright up my room and around my house.

✓ They are so beautiful and always keep me cheerful and brighten up my room and the area around my house.

'This which' is incorrect; 'They' refers to flowers (plural). 'Keep me cheer up' is incorrect; it should be 'keep me cheerful'. 'Bright up' should be 'brighten up'. Also, 'around my house' needs clarification as 'the area around my house'.

× I really like them because they makes me feel peaceful and vibrant my daily life.

✓ I really like them because they make me feel peaceful and brighten my daily life.

The verb 'makes' should be 'make' to agree with plural subject 'they'. 'Vibrant' is an adjective and cannot be used as a verb; 'brighten' is appropriate here.

× OK I'm not sure people sending flowers to others but on SNS or in Internet my friends often post flowers such as pink flowers or yeah colourful flower.

✓ OK, I'm not sure if people send flowers to others, but on SNS or the Internet, my friends often post pictures of flowers such as pink flowers or colorful flowers.

'People sending' should be 'people send' to form correct verb phrase. 'In Internet' should be 'on the Internet'. 'Colourful flower' should be plural 'colorful flowers' to match 'flowers'. Also, 'post flowers' is unclear; 'post pictures of flowers' is better.

× It is so beautiful I think and makes me feel cheerful and bright in.

✓ I think they are so beautiful and make me feel cheerful and bright.

The sentence is incomplete and awkward. 'Bright in' is incorrect; 'bright' is an adjective and should be used properly. The correction clarifies the meaning and corrects grammar.