Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains many hesitations and repetitions. Try to give a direct response first, then add specific details with clear linking words. Avoid filler words and improve sentence structure for clarity.

例: Yes, I love flowers very much. In my country, we have a special flower called Nargis, which has beautiful colors. I especially enjoy flowers with vibrant and diverse colors because they brighten up the environment.

提案: Your answer is too general and contains grammatical errors. Try to give a more precise answer with correct grammar and use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I believe many women around the world love flowers because receiving them often makes them feel happy and appreciated.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical mistakes. Provide a clear topic sentence followed by specific reasons using linking words. Avoid incomplete sentences.

例: No, there are not many flowers where I live because my country has a very hot climate. Since flowers usually need moderate temperatures to grow well, they are quite rare here.

提案: Your answer is relevant but could be more fluent and structured. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct minor grammar errors for better clarity.

例: Yes, I often take photos of flowers. For example, when someone gives me flowers as a gift, I like to capture their beauty. Also, if I see interesting flowers in gardens or outside, I take pictures because I appreciate their colors and shapes.

提案: Your answer is understandable but contains many hesitations and repetitive words. Try to speak more confidently and use linking words to organize your answer logically.

例: Yes, people in my country often send flowers to others, especially when someone is sick or during special celebrations. Sending flowers is a common way to express care and congratulations.

× I like flowers, especially flowers. Uh, uh, has a different color.

✓ I like flowers, especially flowers that have different colors.

The original sentence lacks a subject for the verb 'has'. Adding 'that' introduces a relative clause correctly describing the flowers. Also, 'color' should be plural 'colors' to indicate variety.

× I think every girls in the world or women like flowers, uh, they feel happy when a anyone, uh, give uh, the women flowers.

✓ I think every girl in the world or woman likes flowers; they feel happy when anyone gives women flowers.

The word 'every' should be followed by a singular noun ('girl' not 'girls'). Also, 'women' is plural, so 'woman' is used to match 'every'. The verb 'like' should be 'likes' to agree with singular subject. 'Anyone' does not need 'a'. The verb 'give' should be 'gives' to agree with singular subject 'anyone'. 'The women' should be 'women' without 'the'.

× I think no, my country is very hot country so the flower can't grow up in my country.

✓ I think no, my country is a very hot country so flowers can't grow in my country.

'Country' needs an article 'a' before it. 'The flower' should be plural 'flowers' because it refers to flowers in general. 'Grow up' is incorrect here; 'grow' is sufficient.

× So I think not more flowers. Flowers need normal.

✓ So I think there are not many flowers. Flowers need normal conditions.

'Not more flowers' is incorrect; 'not many flowers' is the correct quantifier. 'Flowers need normal' is incomplete; it should specify 'normal conditions' or 'normal climate'.

× Or when I see some flower in the garden or outside the place, I take a photo for the flower because I like the color or I like the shape of the flow.

✓ Or when I see some flowers in the garden or outside, I take a photo of the flowers because I like the color or the shape of the flower.

'Some flower' should be plural 'some flowers'. 'Outside the place' is awkward; 'outside' alone suffices. 'Take a photo for the flower' should be 'take a photo of the flowers'. 'Flow' is a typo for 'flower'.

× People umm, uh, often uh, send flowers to other when they uh, sick or they have a special celebrate or special moment.

✓ People often send flowers to others when they are sick or they have a special celebration or special moment.

'Other' should be plural 'others'. 'They sick' is missing the verb 'are'. 'Special celebrate' is incorrect; the noun form 'celebration' is needed.