Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ содержит много пауз и слов-паразитов, что снижает естественность речи. Рекомендуется использовать более связные и чёткие предложения без лишних звуков и повторов.

例: Yes, I love flowers very much because they always brighten my mood and make me feel happy.

提案: Ответ не совсем ясен и содержит грамматические ошибки. Следует строить предложения более логично и использовать правильные формы глаголов, а также избегать лишних пауз.

例: Yes, I have friends who really enjoy flowers. They often buy or give flowers as presents to brighten their mood.

提案: Ответ неструктурирован и содержит много повторов и неуверенности. Рекомендуется давать конкретные примеры и строить предложения логично и грамматически правильно.

例: Yes, in Kazakhstan, we have many kinds of flowers. For example, some flowers bloom even in winter, which is quite special.

提案: Ответ содержит много пауз и повторов, а также нечеткую структуру. Следует говорить более связно и избегать излишних повторов.

例: When my close friends give me flowers as presents, I often take photos of them throughout the day because they make me feel cheerful.

提案: Ответ содержит много пауз, повторов и нечетких выражений. Рекомендуется строить предложения более чётко, избегать лишних слов и использовать правильные выражения.

例: Definitely yes. In Kazakhstan, sending flowers is a common tradition. Unlike some other countries, people often give flowers as daily gifts to brighten someone's mood, especially for girls.

× they really like to giving the present or to buy a flower for their uh, brighten up mood and they.

✓ they really like to give presents or to buy flowers to brighten up their mood.

The verb 'like' should be followed by the base form 'to give' instead of 'to giving'. Also, 'brighten up' is a verb phrase, so 'brighten up their mood' is correct, not 'to brighten up mood'. Additionally, 'present' should be pluralized to 'presents' to match the context.

× we also have a lot of kind of flowers, which is like for example, we have a flower.

✓ we also have a lot of kinds of flowers, for example, we have flowers.

The phrase 'a lot of kind of flowers' is incorrect; it should be 'a lot of kinds of flowers' to indicate multiple types. Also, 'we have a flower' is too specific and singular; 'we have flowers' is more appropriate here.

× I think that it is grow up in winter.

✓ I think that it grows in winter.

The verb 'grow' should be in the third person singular present tense 'grows' to agree with the subject 'it'. 'Grow up' is incorrect here; 'grow' is the correct verb.

× they really like to giving the present or to buy a flower for their uh, brighten up mood and they.

✓ they really like to give presents or to buy flowers to brighten up their mood.

The preposition 'for' is incorrectly used before 'brighten up mood'. The correct preposition is 'to' when indicating purpose, as in 'to brighten up their mood'.

× If my, uh, close people give me the present as a present, the flowers, I also, uh, for a, for a day, I every hour I take the photo of this beautiful flowers.

✓ If my close people give me flowers as a present, I also take photos of these beautiful flowers every hour during the day.

'The present as a present, the flowers' is redundant and awkward; 'flowers as a present' is clearer. 'Photo' should be plural 'photos' when referring to multiple pictures. 'This beautiful flowers' should be 'these beautiful flowers' because 'flowers' is plural.