Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to improve grammatical accuracy and sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and avoid redundancy. Also, be more specific about the types of flowers and how they affect your mood.

例: Yes, I love flowers. I have a variety of flowers at home, including roses and lilies. They help me feel less stressed after a hectic day because their pleasant scent makes my room more comfortable and relaxing.

提案: Focus on clear and grammatically correct sentences. Avoid filler words like 'uh'. Use linking words to connect ideas and provide more specific details about your mother's interest in flowers.

例: Yes, my mother loves flowers. She often sends me different kinds of flowers on my birthday and other special occasions. Moreover, she enjoys gardening, and we have a small garden in front of our house where she grows many flowers.

提案: Improve sentence clarity and grammar. Use linking words to organise your answer logically. Be specific about the types of flowers and how they contribute to your home's atmosphere.

例: Yes, I live in a small town with a big house that has a small garden in front. Since my mother loves flowers, we have many beautiful plants there, which make our home feel more comfortable and welcoming.

提案: Work on sentence structure and grammar. Avoid filler words and be more precise. Use linking words to connect ideas and explain why you enjoy taking photos of flowers.

例: Yes, I really enjoy taking photos of flowers in my daily life because there are many beautiful flowers around, such as roses and tulips, in places like roads, schools, and my home. Taking these photos makes me feel relaxed and happy.

提案: Improve grammar and vocabulary, especially words like 'respect' and 'appreciation'. Use linking words to make your answer coherent and avoid repetition. Be more specific about occasions and cultural significance.

例: Yes, in my country, people often send flowers as birthday gifts or during special festivals. Flowers are a way to express respect and appreciation, and I believe they help strengthen friendships and social bonds.

× I have variety of flowers in my home and one solid flowers.

✓ I have a variety of flowers in my home and one solid flower.

The phrase 'variety of flowers' requires the article 'a' before 'variety' to be grammatically correct. Also, 'one solid flowers' is incorrect because 'one' refers to a singular noun, so 'flowers' should be singular as 'flower'.

× It made me feel less stressed and it can melt with just after a hectic day.

✓ It makes me feel less stressed and it can melt away just after a hectic day.

The verb tense should be present to match the general statement about feelings. 'Made' is past tense, but the context suggests a habitual action, so 'makes' is correct. Also, 'melt with just after' is incorrect; the phrase 'melt away just after' is more appropriate to express the intended meaning.

× And the flowers also smell very good and it can let your room more comfortable.

✓ And the flowers also smell very good and they can make your room more comfortable.

The pronoun 'it' is singular but refers to 'flowers', which is plural, so 'they' should be used. Also, 'let your room more comfortable' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'make your room more comfortable'.

× My mom is a flower lover and she will send me different flowers when I was in birthday or other days and she's very uh, keen on playing flowers.

✓ My mom is a flower lover and she sends me different flowers on my birthday or other days and she's very, uh, keen on planting flowers.

The modal verb 'will' is incorrectly used with a past time reference 'when I was in birthday'. The correct tense is present simple 'sends' for habitual actions. Also, 'playing flowers' is incorrect; the intended verb is likely 'planting'.

× Uh, there is a small garden in front of my house.

✓ Uh, there is a small garden in front of my house.

This sentence is correct; no correction needed.

× Yes, I live in a small town and I have a big house with a small garden in front of it and as I say, my mother was a flower lover and those stands, beautiful sands make our home more comfortable and welcoming.

✓ Yes, I live in a small town and I have a big house with a small garden in front of it and as I said, my mother was a flower lover and those plants, beautiful sands make our home more comfortable and welcoming.

The phrase 'those stands, beautiful sands' is unclear and likely incorrect. Possibly 'stands' should be 'plants' and 'sands' is a mispronunciation or error. Also, 'as I say' should be 'as I said' to match past tense. However, since 'plants' and 'sands' are unclear, the correction assumes 'plants' is intended.

× Yes, I very like take photos of the flower in our daily life because there are many flowers in our infrastructures, in our roads, in our school, our home.

✓ Yes, I really like to take photos of flowers in our daily life because there are many flowers in our infrastructure, on our roads, in our school, and at our home.

'I very like' is incorrect; the correct adverb is 'really'. 'Take photos of the flower' should be 'take photos of flowers' (plural). 'In our infrastructures' is incorrect; 'infrastructure' is uncountable and singular. Prepositions are corrected to 'on' roads and 'at' home for accuracy.

× So, uh, why see the beautiful flowers like roses or two tulips? I will take photo of the IT made me feel, uh, most comfortable.

✓ So, uh, when I see beautiful flowers like roses or tulips, I will take photos of them because they make me feel, uh, most comfortable.

'Why see' is incorrect; 'when I see' is appropriate. 'Two tulips' likely means 'tulips' in general. 'Take photo of the IT' is incorrect; 'take photos of them' is correct. The phrase 'made me feel' should be present tense 'make me feel' to match the habitual action.

× Yes, we usually send flowers in others birthday gift or some specific festival and we will send flowers to express our respection and appreciation and I think it's a good way to build someone's friendship or membership bonds and and.

✓ Yes, we usually send flowers as birthday gifts or on specific festivals and we send flowers to express our respect and appreciation. I think it's a good way to build someone's friendship or membership bonds.

'Send flowers in others birthday gift' is incorrect; 'as birthday gifts' is correct. 'Some specific festival' should be 'specific festivals'. 'Respection' is a misspelling of 'respect'. The sentence is also split for clarity and to avoid repetition.