Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to reduce the use of filler words like 'uh' and 'you know' to make your answer sound more natural and fluent. Also, avoid repeating phrases such as 'they're the best' twice. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and provide more specific reasons for your preferences.

例: Yes, I love flowers, especially red roses and lilies. I find their vibrant colors and pleasant scents very appealing, which makes them my favorite flowers.

提案: Focus on speaking more fluently by minimizing filler words. Also, improve grammar by using correct verb forms, for example, 'my mom really enjoys'. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide more vivid descriptions to enrich your answer.

例: Yes, my mom really enjoys buying and receiving flowers as gifts. In fact, when I was younger, we always had a vase of fresh flowers on our dining table, which brightened up the room.

提案: Try to avoid excessive hesitation and filler words to improve fluency. Use more precise vocabulary and linking words to make your answer coherent. Also, provide more specific details about the environment to enrich your response.

例: Unfortunately, there aren't many flowers where I live because there are no national parks or green spaces nearby. The only flowers I often see are monkey flowers planted around the area.

提案: Reduce filler words to improve fluency and make your answer sound more natural. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly. Also, try to be more concise and avoid unnecessary phrases like 'to kick off'.

例: Yes, I am an amateur photographer. Whenever I go for a brisk walk, I take my camera with me and photograph beautiful flowers I come across.

提案: Avoid filler words and improve sentence structure for clarity. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, correct phrases like 'at my con in my country' to 'in my country' and provide more specific examples.

例: Yes, in my country, flowers are often sent as a symbol of love, kindness, and happiness. For example, people usually bring flowers when visiting a patient or welcoming someone to a new house.

× I can't get enough of, uh, them.

✓ I can't get enough of them.

The original sentence has an unnecessary comma before 'them', which interrupts the flow and is grammatically incorrect. Removing the comma improves clarity and correctness.

× And uh, you know, I mostly prefer roses.

✓ And, uh, you know, I mostly prefer roses.

A comma is needed after 'And' to separate the introductory phrase and improve sentence flow.

× I mean, particularly red roses and lilies, uh, they're the best, uh, they're the best flowers I've ever seen.

✓ I mean, particularly red roses and lilies; they're the best flowers I've ever seen.

The original sentence is a run-on with repeated phrases and unnecessary fillers. Using a semicolon separates the two independent clauses properly, and removing repetition improves clarity.

× And uh, they have, uh, somehow pleasant, uh, scents and it's really enjoyable.

✓ And, uh, they have somehow pleasant scents, and it's really enjoyable.

Removing unnecessary commas and fillers improves sentence clarity and grammatical correctness.

× Yes, uh, actually my mom, uh, really enjoy, uh, buying or even, uh, receiving flowers as gifts.

✓ Yes, uh, actually my mom, uh, really enjoys, uh, buying or even, uh, receiving flowers as gifts.

The subject 'my mom' is singular, so the verb should be 'enjoys' to agree in third person singular form.

× And, uh, I remember that when I was younger, we used to have, uh, a vase of flowers on our dining table every day and that was really good.

✓ And, uh, I remember that when I was younger, we used to have a vase of flowers on our dining table every day, and that was really good.

Adding a comma before 'and' separates the two independent clauses properly, improving sentence structure.

× I just, uh, see some monkey flowers, uh, around the, uh, place I live because, uh, this place, uh, unfortunately doesn't have any national parks or green spaces.

✓ I just, uh, see some monkey flowers around the place I live because this place unfortunately doesn't have any national parks or green spaces.

Removing unnecessary commas improves sentence flow and clarity.

× So just, uh, monkey flowers, uh, are planted there.

✓ So, just monkey flowers are planted there.

Removing unnecessary commas improves sentence clarity and flow.

× So, uh, from time to time when I decide to go out for a brisk walking, I take my camera and, uh, of course whenever I see a beautiful flower, I try to, uh, take a photo of that.

✓ So, uh, from time to time when I decide to go out for a brisk walk, I take my camera and, uh, of course whenever I see a beautiful flower, I try to, uh, take a photo of it.

The phrase 'go out for a brisk walking' is incorrect; 'walk' is the correct noun form. Also, 'take a photo of that' is better as 'take a photo of it' to refer to the flower properly.

× Uh, yes, just like any other countries.

✓ Uh, yes, just like any other country.

The phrase 'any other countries' is incorrect here because 'any other' should be followed by a singular noun when comparing to 'my country'.

× At my con in my country, flowers can, uh, be a sign of love or kindness and happiness.

✓ In my country, flowers can, uh, be a sign of love, kindness, and happiness.

The phrase 'At my con in my country' is unclear and likely a mistake. 'In my country' is the correct prepositional phrase. Also, adding commas improves the list clarity.

× Uh, so whenever, uh, they want to, for example, visit a patient, they might bring, uh, some flowers or for welcoming, uh, to a new house.

✓ Uh, so whenever, uh, they want to, for example, visit a patient, they might bring, uh, some flowers or to welcome someone to a new house.

The phrase 'for welcoming to a new house' is incorrect. The correct form is 'to welcome someone to a new house' to express purpose properly.