Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Améliorez la précision grammaticale et la fluidité. Par exemple, corrigez les accords et utilisez une structure plus naturelle : commencez par une phrase directe, puis ajoutez 1–2 détails concrets et un lien logique. Évitez les répétitions comme « magical » deux fois et préférez un vocabulaire varié.

例: Yes, I do. Flowers, to me, are symbols of happiness and love, and their scent and vivid colors always lift my spirits. For example, a bouquet of roses or lilies brightens my day and makes my home feel more welcoming.

提案: Corrigez l'accord des verbes et améliorez la cohérence des informations. Commencez par une phrase claire sur la personne, puis donnez des détails précis (où, quand, comment) et utilisez un lien logique (« because », « so », « for example »). Évitez les adjectifs vagues comme « magical » sans exemple.

例: Yes, my mother loves flowers. She often picks them from our garden and arranges them in vases around the house, which makes the rooms feel brighter and more inviting. For example, she puts fresh flowers on the dining table every weekend.

提案: Clarifiez vos idées et corrigez les structures incorrectes. Commencez par répondre directement, puis expliquez pourquoi avec specificités (e.g. few gardens, lots of buildings). Utilisez des mots de liaison pour la cohérence et évitez des phrases confuses comme « likes from gardens ».

例: Not really. We have some parks and small public gardens with flowers, but the city is mostly crowded with buildings, so green spaces are limited. As a result, I don’t see many flowers near my apartment.

提案: Améliorez la précision lexicale et la complétude des idées. Corrigez les erreurs de vocabulaire (« boats »→« pots ») et la grammaire, puis terminez la phrase de manière complète. Ajoutez un détail temporel ou un plan concret pour montrer progression (« next month I will buy »).

例: Unfortunately no, because I live in an apartment and don’t have a garden to plant them. However, I plan to buy some pots of colorful flowers next month so I can decorate my balcony and take photos of them.

提案: Corrigez le nombre et la précision des noms et améliorez la fluidité. Répondez clairement puis ajoutez exemples variés et des différences culturelles si possible. Évitez les erreurs comme « Marriage are » et préférez « weddings » ou « marriages ».

例: Yes, people often send flowers on special occasions like anniversaries and weddings. For example, on Valentine’s Day couples commonly give bouquets, while families bring floral arrangements to wedding ceremonies and funerals.

× I believe that flowers are symbol of happiness, love and magic.

✓ I believe that flowers are a symbol of happiness, love and magic.

The noun 'symbol' is singular and requires an article. Use 'a' before singular, countable nouns. Suggestion: use 'a symbol' or pluralize to 'symbols' if referring generally.

× Yes, my mom admire flowers.

✓ Yes, my mom admires flowers.

With third person singular subjects (my mom), the verb requires an -s in the present simple. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'she admires.'

× She always picks flowers from garden and mix them in a vase that is very welcoming and magical at home.

✓ She always picks flowers from the garden and mixes them in a vase that is very welcoming and magical at home.

'Garden' needs the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific garden. Also, 'mix' should be 'mixes' to agree with third person singular subject 'She'. Keep consistent subject-verb agreement and use articles for specific places.

× Not really, actually. My city likes from gardens and parks involving flowers, trees and beautiful nature.

✓ Not really. My city has many gardens and parks with flowers, trees and beautiful nature.

'Likes from' is incorrect; use 'has' to indicate possession. 'Involving' is awkward here; use 'with' to describe features. Also combine sentences properly and use quantifiers like 'many' if appropriate.

× We are a crowded city.

✓ It is a crowded city.

The subject 'We' (people) doesn't match 'a crowded city' (a place). Use 'It' to refer to the city. Alternatively rephrase: 'We live in a crowded city.'

× Unfortunately no, because I live in an apartment and we don't have a garden where I can plant flowers.

✓ Unfortunately, no, because I live in an apartment and we don't have a garden where I can plant flowers.

Add a comma after 'Unfortunately' for clarity. The sentence is otherwise correct regarding modal/ability 'can'. Ensure punctuation for spoken responses.

× However, in the future I think of buying some boats of flowers with different colors and they will.

✓ However, in the future I think of buying some pots of flowers with different colors and arranging them at home.

'Boats of flowers' is likely a typo for 'pots of flowers.' Also the clause 'and they will' is incomplete; complete the thought (e.g. 'and arranging them at home'). Use consistent future-intention phrasing: 'I plan to buy' or 'I think of buying.'

× People in my country often send flowers in special occasions such as anniversaries.

✓ People in my country often send flowers on special occasions such as anniversaries.

Use 'on' with 'occasions' ('on special occasions'). 'In' is incorrect for this collocation.

× Marriage are special events.

✓ Marriages are special events.

'Marriage' should be plural 'Marriages' to match the plural verb 'are', or use 'Marriage is' if speaking about the concept. Ensure noun number matches the verb.

× For example, in Valentine's Day, couples always offer flowers as a gift.

✓ For example, on Valentine's Day, couples always give flowers as a gift.

Use 'on' with days: 'on Valentine's Day.' Also 'offer' is acceptable but 'give' is more natural here. Maintain article usage: no article before 'Valentine's Day.'