Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar (singular/plural and pronouns), reduce hesitations, and make the answer more concise with one clear topic sentence followed by 1–2 supporting details. Use linking words like "because" or "for example" smoothly without filler sounds (uh).

例: Yes, I love flowers because I find them beautiful and inspiring. For example, when you give someone flowers it usually makes them happy, so I often buy flowers as a thoughtful gift.

提案: Avoid overgeneralization and fix grammar (plural nouns, verbs, and pronouns). Speak clearly and give a specific example about one person. Limit to 2–3 sentences and use linking words like "for example" or "especially".

例: Yes, several people I know love flowers, especially the women in my family. For example, my wife really enjoys receiving flowers and she always smiles when I give her a bouquet.

提案: Reduce hesitation and make sentences more grammatical and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give a clear reason and a brief contrast using linking words like "because" and "only".

例: Not many — my city has few flowers because it is crowded with apartments and cars and there is little space. Only parks and a few green areas have flowers.

提案: Fix verb forms and word choice, remove redundancies like "beautiful beauty," and avoid fillers. Use one clear reason and a brief example of what you do and why, with linking words such as "because" and "for example."

例: Yes, I often take photos of flowers because they show the beauty of nature. For example, I photograph interesting blossoms and upload the best shots to my social media.

提案: Correct phrasing (e.g., "giving flowers is common"), improve sentence flow, and be specific about occasions. Use linking words like "especially" and avoid repeated fillers.

例: Yes, giving flowers is common in my country, especially on special days such as Mother's Day and International Women's Day. People often exchange bouquets to show appreciation.

× I love flowers very much because I think that flowers is very beautiful and inspiring and, uh, for example, when, uh, you gave uh, flower to anyone, uh, they make them happy and it's a very good, uh, gift for anyone, uh.

✓ I love flowers very much because I think that flowers are very beautiful and inspiring. For example, when you give a flower to someone, it makes them happy and it's a very good gift for anyone.

The sentence has multiple issues. 'flowers is' is incorrect because the plural noun 'flowers' requires the plural verb 'are' (subject-verb agreement: ID 27). 'you gave flower to anyone' uses wrong tense and article: use present simple 'you give a flower to someone' for a general statement and include the indefinite article 'a' (article errors: ID 22). 'they make them happy' incorrectly uses plural subject with plural object and wrong verb: 'it makes them happy' refers to 'a flower' (singular), so use 'it makes them happy' (singular agreement). Overall, simplify into two clear sentences and use consistent present simple for habitual facts. Suggestions: keep subject-verb agreement, use correct articles ('a'), and match singular/plural references.

× Actually, yes. Uh, I think that every woman, uh, in around of me loves flower and I think that, uh, most of the women, uh, love, uh, flowers. Uh, for example, my wife love flower and whenever I, uh, give him the flower ** *** makes, uh, she makes.

✓ Actually, yes. I think that every woman around me loves flowers and I think that most women love flowers. For example, my wife loves flowers and whenever I give her flowers she is happy.

Multiple singular/plural and pronoun errors. 'every woman ... loves flower' — 'every' requires singular noun but we normally say 'every woman around me loves flowers' (plural 'flowers' as a general preference) or 'loves a flower' is unnatural (singular/plural issue: ID 1). 'most of the women, uh, love, uh, flowers' is wordy; use 'most women love flowers'. 'my wife love flower' needs third person singular verb 'loves' (third person singular issue: ID 2) and 'flower' should be plural or 'a flower' depending on meaning (singular/plural: ID 1). 'give him the flower' uses wrong pronoun for wife; use 'give her' (incorrect use of pronouns: ID 12). The garbled ending was fixed to 'she is happy' to convey meaning. Suggestions: ensure noun number matches context, use 'loves' for he/she, and use correct object pronouns.

× Actually not uh, in my uh, city there is uh, there are not many flowers because uh, the city is full of apartment and cars and, and not enough space for flowers. Just in parks, uh, flowers exist and in other area of my city, uh.

✓ Actually not. In my city there are not many flowers because the city is full of apartments and cars and there is not enough space for flowers. Flowers only exist in parks and some other areas of my city.

Mixed and redundant 'there is/there are' usage and article/number errors. Use 'there are not many flowers' for plural (there be issue: ID 3) and 'the city is full of apartments and cars' plural 'apartments' (singular/plural: ID 1). 'not enough space' needs 'there is not enough space' (there be structure). 'Just in parks, flowers exist and in other area' is awkward; better 'Flowers only exist in parks and some other areas' and use plural 'areas' (singular/plural: ID 1). Suggestions: use 'there is/there are' appropriately, match plural nouns, and rephrase for natural English.

× Yes, actually I love to, uh, taking photos from flowers because I think, uh, the flowers is a unique thing that uh, shows the beautiful beauty of the nature and, uh, for example, I take a photos and uh, upload in the social medias.

✓ Yes, actually I love taking photos of flowers because I think flowers are a unique thing that shows the beauty of nature. For example, I take photos and upload them on social media.

'love to, uh, taking' mixes infinitive and gerund; after 'love' both 'to take' or 'taking' are possible, but here use 'love taking' (verb + -ing issue: ID 8). 'photos from flowers' should be 'photos of flowers' (preposition error: ID 11). 'the flowers is' requires plural verb 'flowers are' (subject-verb agreement: ID 27). 'a unique thing that shows the beautiful beauty of the nature' is redundant and awkward; 'shows the beauty of nature' is concise (incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs: ID 13). 'I take a photos' correct to 'I take photos' and 'upload in the social medias' should be 'upload them on social media' (article and plural: IDs 22 and 1; preposition: ID 11). Suggestions: choose gerund after 'love', use 'of' for photo subjects, match plurals, and avoid redundancies.

× Actually, yes, I think, uh, the giving flower in my country is very, uh, usual, uh, umm, uh, particularly in a special days such as Mother Day or uh, woman day, uh, the uh, people of my country uh, give each other flowers and they love flowers very.

✓ Actually, yes. I think giving flowers in my country is very common, particularly on special days such as Mother's Day or Women's Day. The people in my country give each other flowers and they really love flowers.

Several article and word-choice problems. 'the giving flower' is incorrect; use 'giving flowers' (article errors: ID 22). 'very usual' is non-idiomatic; use 'very common'. 'in a special days' should be 'on special days' (preposition ID 11 and article ID 22) and 'Mother Day' and 'woman day' should be 'Mother's Day' and 'Women's Day' (possessive forms and capitalization). 'people of my country give each other flowers' is fine after correction. 'they love flowers very' is awkward; use 'they really love flowers' (adverb placement: ID 20). Suggestions: use plural forms for general activities, correct prepositions ('on' for days), and use standard event names.