Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatically accurate, concise and coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct subject-verb agreement, avoid irrelevant words, and give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Reduce hesitations and unclear phrases.

例: Yes, I love flowers. They cheer me up and brighten my room, so I often place fresh roses or lilies on my bedside table to improve the atmosphere.

提案: Use clearer sentence structure and correct grammar (plural forms and verb agreement). Give a concise reason and a specific example, using a linking word to connect ideas.

例: Yes, my mother loves flowers. For example, she often buys tulips and lilies to decorate our living room because they make the house feel warm and cheerful.

提案: Avoid repetition and incorrect vocabulary (e.g., 'turnips' are vegetables). Answer directly and add a specific location or detail, using linking words to connect cause and effect.

例: Yes, we have many flowers at home because my mother buys fresh lilies and roses to decorate our rooms, which makes the home feel warm and cheerful.

提案: Be concise and keep focus on flowers if asked specifically. Use correct article and plural forms, and connect ideas with linking words. Provide one clear example of when or why you take photos.

例: Yes, I often photograph flowers as well as animals and landscapes. For instance, I take pictures of wildflowers when I hike to preserve memories of the scenery.

提案: Clarify the occasions and use correct vocabulary. Avoid repetition and unfinished sentences. Give two specific occasions and a reason, using linking words for coherence.

例: Yes, many people send flowers for occasions such as birthdays and graduations. Sending flowers is a common way to show respect and celebrate important events.

× Absolutely, I'm fond of flowers because it makes me cheerful and bring my home.

✓ Absolutely, I'm fond of flowers because they make me cheerful and brighten my home.

Subject-verb agreement and pronoun reference error: 'flowers' is plural so use plural pronoun 'they' and plural verb 'make' (Grammar Problem Type ID 6 and 27). Also 'bring my home' is incorrect collocation; use 'brighten my home' to express improving the home's mood. Suggestion: match subject number with pronouns/verbs and choose appropriate verbs for intended meaning.

× I bring my room of example some fresh 2 leaves and lettuce can uh, make me happy and the.

✓ For example, I put some fresh leaves and lettuce in my room because they can make me happy.

Multiple sentence structure issues: word order and unnecessary words ('2', 'of example', 'and the') make the sentence ungrammatical (Grammar Problem Type ID 26). Also 'can' placement and plural agreement with 'leaves and lettuce' require correction. Suggestion: remove extraneous words, use 'for example' at start, correct noun phrases and verb placement.

× My mom loves flowers because she purchased some flowers like Tulip and lilies to decorate our rooms because it make us cheerful and umm bringing up the room.

✓ My mom loves flowers because she buys or bought flowers like tulips and lilies to decorate our rooms; they make us feel cheerful and brighten the room.

Tense and agreement problems: 'purchased' can be past but context suggests habitual so 'buys' fits; 'Tulip' should be lowercase plural 'tulips'; 'it make' is incorrect subject-verb agreement — plural subject 'they' requires 'make' (Grammar Problem Type ID 2 and 6 and 27). 'Bringing up the room' is awkward; use 'brighten the room'. Suggestion: ensure verb tense consistency and match plural subjects with plural verbs, correct noun capitalization and pluralization.

× There are a lot of flowers in my house because my mom purchased the some fresh flowers such like turnips and lilies to decorate the room.

✓ There are a lot of flowers in my house because my mom bought some fresh flowers such as tulips and lilies to decorate the room.

Quantifier and article misuse: 'the some' is incorrect; use 'some'. 'Such like' is nonstandard; use 'such as'. 'Turnips' is the wrong word for a flower; likely 'tulips' required (Grammar Problem Type ID 14 and 11). Suggestion: use correct quantifiers ('some'), correct phrases ('such as'), and correct vocabulary.

× It makes us feel cheerful and warm. Warm.

✓ They make us feel cheerful and warm.

Pronoun reference and number agreement: 'It' refers back to 'flowers' (plural), so use 'they' and plural verb 'make' (Grammar Problem Type ID 6 and 27). Also avoid sentence fragment 'Warm.' Suggestion: combine ideas into one sentence and match pronoun number.

× To be honest, I take a photos of flowers as well as animals, plants and landscapes.

✓ To be honest, I take photos of flowers as well as animals, plants, and landscapes.

Article and number errors: 'a photos' mixes singular article with plural noun; remove 'a' (Grammar Problem Type ID 22 and 1). Also add comma before 'and' for clarity. Suggestion: use correct article or plural noun forms.

× I would love to capture and preserve the mountain from our daily life because I think it's a good way to keep the memories.

✓ I would love to capture and preserve mountains and other scenery from our daily life because I think it's a good way to keep memories.

Awkward singular 'the mountain' and phrase 'keep the memories' — 'memories' without 'the' is more natural. Sentence structure needs pluralization and clearer object (Grammar Problem Type ID 26 and 1). Suggestion: use plural general nouns and omit unnecessary articles.

× Definitely a lot of people in my country give flowers to their families or friends on such on such education, educations like birthday university and birthday festival.

✓ Definitely many people in my country give flowers to their family or friends on occasions such as birthdays, university graduations, and festivals.

Incorrect word choice and repetition: 'such on such education, educations' is incorrect; use 'occasions such as'. 'A lot of' can be replaced with 'many'; 'families' better as 'family' in this context. Also corrected items to plural forms and proper collocations (Grammar Problem Type ID 4 and 11 and 14). Suggestion: use 'occasions such as' plus correct event names and pluralization.

× I think it's a good way to show their respect and.

✓ I think it's a good way to show respect.

Sentence fragment: ends abruptly with 'and.' Remove conjunction and complete idea (Grammar Problem Type ID 26 and 23). Suggestion: finish the sentence or remove the trailing 'and' to form a complete thought.