Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện ngữ pháp cơ bản (chủ-động từ và số ít/ nhiều), trả lời rõ ràng với một câu chủ đề rồi tối đa 2–3 câu hỗ trợ, tránh ngắt quãng. Nên dùng tính từ phù hợp và nối câu bằng từ liên kết như “because” hoặc “and”. Ví dụ: mở đầu trực tiếp “Yes, I love flowers.”, giải thích lý do cụ thể và kết luận ngắn.

例: Yes, I love flowers because they are beautiful and brighten my home. For example, I often buy roses for my living room to create a pleasant atmosphere. Overall, flowers make me feel happier.

提案: Sửa lỗi ngữ pháp quan trọng (who's => who/ who loves; 'left' không đúng ý). Trả lời trực tiếp, dùng từ nối như “for example” hoặc “such as” và liệt kê ngắn gọn, đúng trật tự ngữ pháp. Giữ tối đa 3 câu.

例: Yes, I know many people who love flowers, such as my cousins, my friends, and my mother. For example, my cousin often buys tulips for special occasions. They enjoy arranging flowers at home.

提案: Cải thiện cấu trúc câu phủ định và thì (sử dụng “There are not many” hoặc “There weren’t many in the past”). Trả lời trực tiếp, cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ: nơi có hoa, mùa nào nhiều hoa). Tránh lặp từ và ngắt quãng.

例: Not many, unfortunately. There are only a few flower beds in local parks, but in spring many people plant bulbs and the streets look much nicer. In the past there used to be more gardens in my neighborhood.

提案: Sửa lỗi từ vựng ('Notes' và 'text' sai ngữ cảnh). Trả lời trực tiếp với cấu trúc “No, I don't usually…” và đưa thêm chi tiết ngắn gọn (khi nào thì chụp, vì sao). Dùng liên từ như “but” hoặc “however” để mở rộng ý.

例: No, I don't usually take photos of flowers in my daily life. However, I sometimes photograph them when I visit parks or attend weddings because they look beautiful. I only take pictures occasionally.

提案: Cải thiện trật tự từ và chia động từ (People in my country often send flowers on special occasions). Nên nêu rõ ví dụ cụ thể (đám cưới, sinh nhật, lễ tang) và dùng linking words như “for example” hoặc “such as”. Giữ ngắn gọn tối đa 3 câu.

例: Yes, people in my country often send flowers on special occasions, such as weddings and birthday parties. For example, it is common to give bouquets at weddings or to send sympathy flowers at funerals. Flowers are seen as an appropriate gift for many events.

× I love flowers because it's beautiful and they. No.

✓ I love flowers because they are beautiful.

The student used 'it' and 'they' incorrectly. 'Flowers' is plural, so use the plural pronoun 'they' and plural verb 'are'. Remove the fragment 'No.' which is unclear. Improve by identifying the subject (flowers) and matching pronoun and verb: 'they are beautiful'.

× Oh, I know many people who's left flowers, such as my cousins, my friends and my mom.

✓ Oh, I know many people who leave flowers, such as my cousins, my friends and my mom.

The student used 'who's' (who is/has) incorrectly. For a relative referring to people who perform a habitual action, use 'who' + base verb. Also 'left' is past participle and doesn't fit meaning; use present simple 'leave' to express habit. Suggest: 'people who leave flowers' or 'people who have left flowers' if past action intended.

× Oh, no much, but it's still have some flowers in in the past and.

✓ Oh, not many, but there were still some flowers in the past.

Multiple errors: 'no much' is incorrect for countable plural nouns — use 'not many'. 'it's still have' mixes contractions and verbs incorrectly; use 'there were' to report existence in the past. Duplicate 'in' and trailing 'and' are fragments. Suggest: 'not many, but there were still some flowers in the past.'

× Notes I don't usually text photos of flowers in my daily life.

✓ No, I don't usually take photos of flowers in my daily life.

The student wrote 'Notes' (likely intending 'No') and used 'text' instead of 'take'. The original sentence had wrong verb choice causing meaning error. Replace with 'take' for photographing. Ensure negative response 'No,' then complete clause: 'I don't usually take photos of flowers in my daily life.'

× People in my countries often send flowers to others is special seasons such as uh, when's someone get married or they have a special party.

✓ People in my country often send flowers to others on special occasions, such as when someone gets married or has a special party.

Errors: 'countries' should be singular 'country' to match speaker's area. Use 'on special occasions' instead of 'is special seasons'. 'when's someone get married' is incorrect contraction and verb form; use 'when someone gets married'. 'they have a special party' is awkward — better 'has a special party' to agree with 'someone'. Suggest: 'People in my country often send flowers to others on special occasions, such as when someone gets married or has a special party.'