Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear but short and has simple sentence structure. To improve, start with a direct topic sentence, add one or two specific reasons or feelings using linking words, and keep it under five sentences. Use slightly richer vocabulary (e.g., “delicate,” “blossom season”).

例: Yes, I love flowers, especially cherry blossoms. I find their delicate pink petals very beautiful, and when they bloom in spring they create a peaceful atmosphere in the park. Because of that, I always look forward to blossom season each year.

提案: Your response is relevant but grammatically incorrect and unclear. Improve by using a clear topic sentence, correct possessive and vocabulary (e.g., “husband”), and one specific detail using a linking word. Avoid awkward phrasing like “one of her hobby is on harvesting.”

例: Yes, my mother loves flowers and so does her husband. For example, my father enjoys growing and harvesting roses in our garden, so they often spend weekends tending to the plants together.

提案: The answer is confusing and contains unrelated or incorrect phrases (“Dungeon Lion,” “town's simple”). To improve, answer directly, give a specific description or reason, and use linking words for clarity. Keep sentences natural and meaningful.

例: Yes, there are many flowers where I live because our town is known for its public gardens. For instance, the central park has seasonal flower beds and an annual flower festival that attracts many visitors.

提案: This answer communicates the idea but has grammar mistakes and repetition. Improve by using a clear topic sentence, correct verb tenses, and a specific detail about frequency, equipment, or style. Use linking words like “because” or “for example.”

例: Yes, I usually take photos of flowers because photography is my hobby. I often use my own camera to capture close-up shots, and I especially like photographing purple flowers in the mornings when the light is soft.

提案: The response is short and ungrammatical. Improve by giving a direct answer followed by a specific reason or example, using linking words such as “however” or “instead.” Use natural phrasing like “It is not common” and add cultural context.

例: No, it is not very common to send flowers in my country. Instead, people usually give practical gifts or food on special occasions, although flowers may be given for funerals or weddings.

× Yes, I love to see flowers.

✓ Yes, I love seeing flowers.

The verb 'love' is commonly followed by a gerund (-ing form) when talking about general likes; 'love to see' is not ungrammatical but 'love seeing' is more natural in this context. Use gerund for habitual/general preferences.

× My favorite one is cherry blossom.

✓ My favorite one is the cherry blossom.

When referring to a specific type or single-named flower as a favorite, use the definite article 'the' or make it plural. Adding 'the' clarifies the noun as a specific thing. Alternatively: 'My favorite flowers are cherry blossoms.'

× My mother loves flowers and her hubby, one of her hobby, is on harvesting the flowers.

✓ My mother loves flowers and her husband, whose hobby is harvesting flowers, does so too.

Use 'husband' instead of informal 'hubby'. The clause 'one of her hobby' is ungrammatical; use 'whose hobby is' to show possession and correct noun form 'hobby'. Also simplify 'is on harvesting the flowers' to 'harvests flowers' or 'does so too'.

× Yes, there are a lot of flowers in my place.

✓ Yes, there are a lot of flowers in my area.

The phrase 'in my place' is unnatural; use 'in my area' or 'where I live'. This is not strictly an article error but fits common article/phrase usage; adjusting wording improves naturalness.

× My place is very famous for Dungeon Lion.

✓ My town is very famous for Dungeon Lion.

'My place' is vague; 'town' matches 'our town's' later. Use consistent noun choice. Also ensure proper noun 'Dungeon Lion' is correct name; keep capitalization.

× It is our town's simple.

✓ It is our town's symbol.

The original phrase is ungrammatical and unclear. Likely intended 'symbol' or 'simple' is incorrect noun choice. Provide a correct noun to convey meaning. Check context and choose appropriate word.

× Yes, I usually take photos of flowers.

✓ Yes, I usually take photos of flowers.

This sentence is grammatically correct. 'Usually' with present simple is appropriate for habitual actions; no change needed.

× Actually my hobby is taking picture by my own camera and I took I take flowers purple sometimes.

✓ Actually, my hobby is taking pictures with my own camera, and sometimes I take photos of purple flowers.

Use plural 'pictures' and preposition 'with' for the instrument. Remove extra 'I took I take'. Place 'sometimes' before the verb or after the clause. Use 'take photos of purple flowers' to be clear.

× Do people in your country often send flowers to others?

✓ Do people in your country often send flowers to others?

The question is fine as written; no correction needed. 'Often' correctly expresses frequency.

× It is honestly it is not usual things in my country.

✓ Honestly, it is not common in my country.

Reduce redundancy by removing the repeated 'it is'. Use 'common' instead of 'usual things' and keep singular structure. Place 'honestly' at the start for emphasis.