Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more direct and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, correct vocabulary and capitalization, and give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid unnecessary hesitation and keep within 3–4 sentences. Use linking words (for example, “however” or “also”) to connect ideas and correct flower names (tulips instead of tulipani).

例: I don't love flowers passionately, but I often give them as gifts to my girlfriend and my mother. For example, I usually choose roses—white or red—because my girlfriend especially likes tulips. I give flowers on special occasions such as birthdays and anniversaries.

提案: Avoid repetition and filler words. Answer directly, then add a specific reason or example. Use correct collocations ("a large bouquet" not "a huge bouquet flowers") and clean sentence structure. Keep within 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, both my girlfriend and my mother really love flowers. I often give them a large bouquet on special days because they appreciate fresh blooms and the gesture.

提案: Start with a clear short answer, then add a specific location detail. Correct grammar ("no, there aren't many"), vocabulary ("tulips"), and prepositions ("near my town"). Use linking words like "however" to contrast. Keep sentences concise and correct sentence structure ("you can pick them there").

例: No, there aren't many flowers in my neighborhood. However, near my town there is a large field of tulips where people can pick flowers to give as gifts.

提案: Give a direct answer then expand with a clear reason and an example. Avoid awkward phrasing like "so nevertheless flowers"; say "including flowers" or "not even flowers." Use linking words such as "instead" and provide a short specific example of what you photograph.

例: No, I don't usually photograph flowers. Instead, I prefer taking photos of landscapes and historic buildings when I travel abroad, such as city skylines or mountain views.

提案: Provide a natural, grammatical topic sentence and support it with specific occasions and common recipients. Remove uncertain phrases like "I don't know" and use correct plural forms ("birthdays"). Use linking words like "for example" appropriately.

例: Yes, sending flowers is very common in my country. For example, people often send flowers on Valentine's Day, birthdays, and anniversaries, usually to their partners or close family members.

× I like roses, whites and Reds and also tulipani that are the favorite flowers of my girlfriend.

✓ I like roses, whites and reds and also tulips which are my girlfriend's favorite flowers.

Incorrect use of 'tulipani' (non-English plural) and relative clause wording. Use the English plural 'tulips' (verb form not present participle but fits list 10 as 'present participle' was closest to -ing confusion); also possessive should be 'my girlfriend's favorite flowers' or 'the favorite flowers of my girlfriend'. Capitalization of 'Reds' is incorrect. Suggestion: use correct English nouns and possessive structure and keep consistent capitalization.

× Yes, both of them uh, love flowers and I love to give them uh, a huge uh, bouquet flowers.

✓ Yes, both of them love flowers and I love to give them a huge bouquet of flowers.

Redundant and incorrect phrase 'bouquet flowers' and unnecessary fillers. Use 'a huge bouquet of flowers' or simply 'a huge bouquet'. The construction 'give them a huge bouquet of flowers' is correct. Remove filler 'uh' in formal responses.

× MMM no they don't. But uh, near my house near my town there is a huge field full of tulipani and you can go them there to take them and give them as a gift to the person you love.

✓ No, they don't. But near my house, near my town, there is a huge field full of tulips and you can go there to pick them and give them as a gift to the person you love.

'They don't' is vague; context implies 'a lot of flowers' so 'No, there aren't' would be better, but kept 'No, they don't' corrected punctuation. 'Tulipani' should be 'tulips'. Verb phrase 'go them there to take them' is ungrammatical: use 'go there to pick them'. Use commas for clarity. Suggestion: use 'there is/are' correctly ('there is a field') and correct verb collocation 'pick flowers'.

× No, I'm not really into taking pictures of any things, so nevertheless flowers.

✓ No, I'm not really into taking pictures of anything, let alone flowers.

Incorrect phrase 'any things' should be 'anything'. 'so nevertheless flowers' is ungrammatical; use 'let alone flowers' to express exception. Suggestion: use 'anything' for general negative contexts and idiomatic expression 'let alone'.

× Yes, send flowers to others in my country is a real passion and habit.

✓ Yes, sending flowers to others in my country is a real passion and habit.

Incorrect sentence structure: the gerund 'sending' is needed as the subject of the sentence, not the base verb 'send'. Use 'sending flowers' to form a noun phrase. Suggestion: start the sentence with a gerund when describing an activity as a subject.

× In fact, for example, for Valentine's Day or I don't know, birthday, we usually send flowers to our girlfriend or boyfriends.

✓ In fact, for example, for Valentine's Day or birthdays, we usually send flowers to our girlfriends or boyfriends.

Number and agreement issues: 'birthday' should be plural 'birthdays' to match general statement; 'our girlfriend or boyfriends' mixes singular/plural and gender; use 'our girlfriends or boyfriends' or better 'our partners'. Also avoid 'I don't know' in formal answer. Suggestion: ensure noun number agreement and consistent pluralization when speaking generally.