Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition and filler (uh), and use correct vocabulary and grammar (e.g., 'roses and lotus' if that was intended). Add one specific detail to enrich the answer. Keep answers to no more than 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I love flowers, especially roses and lotuses. They lift my mood whenever I feel gloomy because their colors and scent are very soothing. For example, I keep a small vase of roses on my desk to cheer me up during work.

提案: The examiner asked if you know anyone else who loves flowers; instead of talking about yourself repeatedly, answer directly and give a specific example of someone you know (family, friend) and one detail about their habits. Use correct grammar and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, my sister loves flowers — she always keeps fresh blooms in her room and presses petals into her notebooks. For example, she buys a small bouquet every weekend and arranges them by color on her windowsill.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and then one or two specific details (types of flowers, places where they grow). Correct grammar (I live, varied kinds) and avoid filler words like 'actually' repeated.

例: Yes, I live in the countryside, so there are many flowers around me. For instance, wild daisies and marigolds grow along the paths, and nearby gardens have roses and jasmine with different colors and fragrances.

提案: This answer is clear and relevant but can be improved with a concise structure: state briefly you don't take photos, then give a reason and a short example. Avoid repetition and phrasing like 'all the times.'

例: No, I usually don't take photos of flowers because I prefer to enjoy the moment without my phone. For example, when I walk in the park I put my phone away and focus on the scents and colors instead.

提案: Use more natural collocations and precise reasons: say who sends flowers and on which occasions. Avoid awkward phrases like 'sow their happiness' and 'kudos others.'

例: Yes, people often send flowers as gifts for occasions like weddings, graduations, and birthdays. For example, friends usually send a bouquet to congratulate someone after they graduate or to express sympathy at funerals.

× As far as my little knowledge is concerned, I myself loves the flowers the most in my knowledge because I always want to have flowers in my in my bouquet or in my books and everywhere I see in a day.

✓ As far as my limited knowledge is concerned, I myself love flowers the most because I always want to have them in my bouquet, in my books, and everywhere I go during the day.

The verb 'love' should match the subject 'I'; use 'love' not 'loves'. Also improved wording for clarity: 'little knowledge' -> 'limited knowledge'; remove redundant phrases and correct 'everywhere I see in a day' to 'everywhere I go during the day'. Use pronoun 'them' to refer to flowers.

× Yes, I love flowers, especially the roses and Lotto summer favorite ones.

✓ Yes, I love flowers, especially roses and my favorite ones in summer.

Avoid mixing definite article 'the' with plural nouns when speaking generally: use 'roses' not 'the roses' here. 'Lotto' seems incorrect; replaced with 'my favorite ones in summer' to match intended meaning. Ensure plural form consistency.

× These make me happy whenever I, uh, I feel gloom.

✓ They make me happy whenever I feel gloomy.

Use adjective 'gloomy' to describe feeling, not the noun 'gloom' in this context. Maintain simple present tense 'make' for habitual action and remove filler repetition.

× They are my best friends actually in a way because they always make me happy whenever I feel gloomy.

✓ They are my best friends in a way because they always make me happy whenever I feel gloomy.

Sentence is mostly correct; removed unnecessary filler 'actually' for conciseness. Present tense usage is correct for a habitual truth.

× I like flowers to be out of here I see.

✓ I like flowers to be visible wherever I go.

Original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. Rewrote to meaningfully express preference: 'to be visible' and 'wherever I go' fit the intended idea. No third person singular mismatch in correction; original had awkward structure.

× Yes, actually I lives in countryside and here in my surrounding there are a lot of flowers actually and there are all cards as well where they are very various kinds of flowers.

✓ Yes, actually I live in the countryside, and in my surroundings there are a lot of flowers. There are also many gardens with various kinds of flowers.

Subject 'I' requires verb 'live' not 'lives' (third person singular error). Also article usage: 'the countryside' and 'my surroundings'. 'all cards' is likely 'gardens'; corrected noun and word order for clarity.

× They are with different different aroma and different colors.

✓ They have different aromas and different colors.

Use verb 'have' to indicate possession of qualities. 'Aroma' should be plural 'aromas' to match 'different'. Removed duplicate 'different' and corrected word order.

× Yes, actually I lives in countryside and here in my surrounding there are a lot of flowers actually and there are all cards as well where they are very various kinds of flowers. They are with different different aroma and different colors. They are very beautiful actually.

✓ Yes, actually I live in the countryside, and in my surroundings there are a lot of flowers. There are also many gardens with various kinds of flowers. They have different aromas and colors. They are very beautiful.

Combined corrections: 'I live' fixes third person singular error; added articles 'the countryside'; improved noun choices and plurality; corrected adjective/adverb usage and removed redundant 'actually' for conciseness.

× Actually no, because I don't prefer to use phone all the time and I don't use my mobile phone all the times.

✓ Actually no, because I prefer not to use my phone all the time and I don't use my mobile phone very often.

Use 'prefer not to' instead of 'don't prefer to' for natural expression. 'All the times' is incorrect; use 'all the time' or 'very often'. Maintain present tense habitual meaning.

× Whenever I get out of my house, I never use my phone.

✓ Whenever I leave my house, I never use my phone.

'Get out of my house' is acceptable but 'leave my house' is more natural. Present simple 'never use' correctly expresses habitual action; no tense change needed.

× I only feel the moment there and I only see the nature and my surrounding and feel that.

✓ I just enjoy the moment there; I only look at nature and my surroundings and appreciate it.

Original sentence has awkward structure and repetition. Rewrote with clearer verbs: 'enjoy the moment', 'look at nature', 'appreciate it'. Use plural 'surroundings'.

× Yes, they do send flowers to others as a gift or as a present to sow their happiness or to kudos others and it is their way to congratulate the next person by giving them a bouquet of flowers.

✓ Yes, they send flowers to others as a gift or present to show their happiness or to congratulate someone; it is a way to express congratulations by giving a bouquet of flowers.

Incorrect verbs 'sow their happiness' and 'kudos others' are wrong usage. Replaced with idiomatic verbs: 'show their happiness' and 'congratulate someone'. Removed unnecessary auxiliary 'do' for simple present; streamlined sentence structure.