Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Avoid awkward adverbs (e.g., "casually") and unclear phrases (e.g., "in the base"). Watch sentence grammar and word order ("particularly in the bedroom").

例: Yes, I love flowers. I often decorate my bedroom with different kinds of roses because their scent and color make the room feel calm and welcoming.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence and one clear specific detail. Use correct plural forms and remove vague adverbs. Use a linking word to connect the reason or result (e.g., "so" or "because").

例: Yes. My girlfriend loves flowers, especially white roses, so I usually give her a bouquet for birthdays and anniversaries to make the occasion feel more special.

提案: Be specific and correct word choice. Avoid contradictory phrases like "a lot" vs "a few." Correct location words (not "basements"). Use one or two clear supporting details linked logically (e.g., "for example").

例: Yes, there are many flowers where I live. For example, parks and residential gardens have roses and sunflowers, which make the neighborhood look brighter and more welcoming.

提案: Answer directly, then give one specific detail. Use correct verb forms and collocations (e.g., "save photos", "interesting patterns"). Keep sentences concise and avoid repetition ("picture gallery").

例: Yes, I often photograph flowers when I walk in the park and save the pictures to my phone. I focus on flowers with bright colors and interesting patterns to make my gallery more attractive.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence and one specific example. Fix grammar (singular/plural, articles) and remove filler words. Use a linking word to explain why people send flowers (e.g., "because").

例: Yes, people often send flowers because they symbolize love and respect. For instance, it is common to give bouquets at birthdays, weddings, and funerals as part of local traditions.

× I am casually decorating my room with different roses, particularly in bedroom.

✓ I am casually decorating my room with different roses, particularly in the bedroom.

Missing definite article before 'bedroom'. Use 'the bedroom' when referring to a specific room in your home. Suggestion: add 'the' before 'bedroom' to make the noun phrase definite.

× It makes my space more gentle and calming whenever I see the flowers in the base.

✓ They make my space gentler and more calming whenever I see the flowers on the table.

Agreement and word choice issues: 'It' refers to plural 'flowers' so use 'they'. 'Gentle' should be comparative 'gentler' when comparing states. 'In the base' is unclear; likely 'on the table' or 'in a vase'. Suggestion: match subject and verb number, use comparative form, and choose correct preposition for location.

× My girlfriend loves flowers, particularly the white roses.

✓ My girlfriend loves flowers, particularly white roses.

Definite article 'the' before 'white roses' implies specific roses previously mentioned; it's more natural without 'the' when speaking generally. Suggestion: remove 'the' for general statements about categories.

× Every occasions like birthdays and anniversaries, I casually give her the flower and to make the occasion extra special.

✓ On occasions like birthdays and anniversaries, I usually give her flowers to make the occasion extra special.

Multiple issues: 'Every occasions' is incorrect—use 'On occasions' or 'On special occasions'. 'Give her the flower' is awkward; use plural 'flowers' for general giving. 'Casually' is odd here; 'usually' fits frequency. Remove 'and to' and use infinitive 'to make'. Suggestion: use correct quantifier phrase, appropriate adverb, plural noun, and correct clause structure.

× Yes, definitely, there are few flowers that I can find in our parks and basements.

✓ Yes, definitely, there are a few flowers that I can find in our parks and gardens.

'There are few flowers' implies scarcity; use 'a few' to indicate some. 'Basements' is unlikely context for outdoor plants; 'gardens' fits better. Suggestion: use 'a few' for small but existent quantity and correct the location word.

× Sometimes we never do plant.

✓ Sometimes we don't plant anything.

Word order and auxiliary use incorrect: 'never do plant' is ungrammatical. Use 'don't' with base verb and add 'anything' for negative meaning. Suggestion: use standard negative construction 'don't/doesn't' + base verb.

× Also lots of sunflowers in their gardens.

✓ There are also lots of sunflowers in their gardens.

Sentence fragment missing verb and subject. Add 'There are' to form complete sentence. Suggestion: include 'there are' when stating existence and keep 'lots of' for quantity.

× This can make our environment more calming and welcoming to all the guests who arrives.

✓ This can make our environment more calming and welcoming to all the guests who arrive.

Relative clause subject 'guests' is plural, so verb should be 'arrive' not 'arrives'. Suggestion: ensure verb agrees with plural subject.

× Yes, I often take photos when I am walking in the park and savings that photo in my gallery to brighten up and sharpen my picture gallery.

✓ Yes, I often take photos when I am walking in the park and save those photos in my gallery to brighten and enhance my picture collection.

'Savings' is incorrect form; use base verb 'save'. 'That photo' should be plural 'those photos'. 'Sharpen my picture gallery' is unnatural; use 'enhance my picture collection'. Suggestion: use correct verb form after 'and', match number, and choose appropriate collocations.

× I usually take a photo to those flowers who have an interesting patterns and bright colors.

✓ I usually take photos of flowers that have interesting patterns and bright colors.

Preposition 'of' is required after 'take photos'. Use plural 'photos' and 'patterns' with no article. Use 'that' (or 'which') for defining relative clauses and avoid 'who' for things. Suggestion: use 'of', plural forms, and 'that/which' for things.

× Yes, of course flowers symbolizes love and affection and we are casually giving this flowers in special occasions like birthday weddings and it can make the in our hometown.

✓ Yes, of course flowers symbolize love and affection and we often give these flowers on special occasions like birthdays and weddings; it is part of our hometown traditions.

Multiple errors: 'flowers symbolizes' needs plural verb 'symbolize'. 'We are casually giving' should be 'we often give' (frequency). 'This flowers' incorrect demonstrative and number; use 'these flowers'. Preposition 'on special occasions'. 'Birthday weddings' unclear—separate items 'birthdays and weddings'. Last clause fragmented; rephrase to 'part of our hometown traditions'. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement, correct demonstratives, proper prepositions, and clearer sentence structure.

× It's it's one of our tradition.

✓ It's one of our traditions.

Redundant repetition 'It's it's' and singular 'tradition' should be plural 'traditions' when using 'one of'. Suggestion: remove duplicate and use plural noun after 'one of'.