Flowers— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be careful with grammar and word choice. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Use correct adjective forms and avoid redundant phrases. For example, say “they smell really good” instead of “they're smelling really good,” and combine ideas more smoothly with a linking phrase.

例: Yes, I love flowers because they smell lovely and their bright colours lift my mood. For instance, when I have a vase of tulips on my desk I feel more energetic and focused.

提案: Correct grammar (subject-verb agreement) and avoid vague generalizations. Begin with a direct answer, then give specific, concise details. Use linking words like “for example” or “in fact.” Also avoid contradictions (every day vs every week).

例: Yes, several people I know love flowers, especially my mother. In fact, my father buys her fresh bouquets almost every week, so there are often new flowers in our living room.

提案: Provide a clearer, slightly expanded answer with correct phrasing. Avoid filler words and add one specific reason or example to make the answer more informative. Use linking words like “because” or “so.”

例: No, there aren't many flowers in my city because most green spaces are concrete parks. As a result, you only see potted plants or a few flowerbeds in the spring.

提案: Fix grammar and vocabulary (use past/simple present correctly) and eliminate typos. Answer directly, then give a concise example. Use correct pronouns and verb forms and avoid irrelevant details.

例: No, I don't usually take photos of flowers. However, one of my friends is obsessed with them—whenever she sees a rose she photographs it and shares the pictures with her friends.

提案: Use correct subject-verb agreement and clearer phrasing. Start with a direct statement, then give one or two specific occasions when people send flowers, using linking words like “for example” or “especially.”

例: Yes, people often send flowers to each other, especially for celebrations. For example, people give bouquets for birthdays, anniversaries and to congratulate someone on a new job.

× Yes, I love flowers because they're smelling really good and they're really colorful.

✓ Yes, I love flowers because they smell really good and they are really colorful.

Using 'are smelling' is incorrect here; 'smell' is a stative verb describing a sensory state and should use the simple present 'smell' rather than the progressive. Replace 'they're smelling' with 'they smell'. 'They're' can be expanded to 'they are' for 'are really colorful' which is correct.

× They're giving me positive energy.

✓ They give me positive energy.

Using the progressive 'are giving' with a general, habitual effect is unnatural. Use the simple present 'give' for habitual or general truths. Also 'they' is correct as the subject, so change 'They're giving' to 'They give'.

× I think most of the women loves flowers, but mostly I think my mom loves them a lot.

✓ I think most of the women love flowers, but I think my mom loves them a lot.

The subject 'most of the women' is plural, so the verb must be 'love' not 'loves'. 'My mom loves' is correct because 'mom' is singular; remove redundant 'mostly' to improve clarity.

× My dad is buying her lots of flowers every week.

✓ My dad buys her lots of flowers every week.

The progressive 'is buying' implies a temporary action; for a habitual regular action use the simple present 'buys'. Pronoun 'her' is acceptable if referring to the mother, but ensure context makes that clear.

× Every day when he comes home we are seeing new flowers.

✓ Every day when he comes home we see new flowers.

Use the simple present 'see' for habitual actions rather than the progressive 'are seeing'. The time phrase 'Every day' signals a repeated event.

× No, in my city there is not a lot of flowers actually.

✓ No, in my city there are not a lot of flowers, actually.

'Flowers' is plural so the correct form is 'there are', not 'there is'. Also place the adverb 'actually' with a comma for natural flow.

× No, I'm not taking photos of flowers, but one of my friends is really addicted to flowers.

✓ No, I don't take photos of flowers, but one of my friends is really into flowers.

For habitual actions use simple present 'I don't take' rather than present continuous 'I'm not taking'. 'Addicted to flowers' is unnatural; use 'is really into flowers' or 'loves flowers'.

× Whenever she saw a Phillies a rose, she's always taking photos of them and sending to their friends.

✓ Whenever she sees a rose, she is always taking photos of it and sending them to her friends.

Multiple errors: verb tense should be present 'sees' not 'saw' for habitual actions. Remove extraneous word 'Phillies'. 'A rose' is singular, so 'it' should be used, and 'sending them to her friends' uses plural 'them' for photos and singular 'her' for possession; use 'sending them to her friends'. Present continuous 'is always taking' is acceptable to emphasize habitual repeated action with emotion.

× Yes, people loves to send flowers to each other because it's really kind and special gift for celebrating.

✓ Yes, people love to send flowers to each other because it's a really kind and special gift for celebrating.

'People' is plural and requires 'love' not 'loves'. The noun phrase needs an article: 'a really kind and special gift'. Also 'it's' can refer to 'it is a', so include 'a' before 'really'. 'For celebrating' is awkward but acceptable; better: 'for celebrations' or 'to celebrate' depending on meaning.