Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答较为简洁，但表达稍显生硬，缺少连贯性。建议使用更自然的表达方式，并适当扩展细节，使回答更丰富。

例: Yes, I write quite often because it helps me express my thoughts clearly and capture my feelings at the moment, which I find very valuable.

提案: 回答内容较完整，但句子结构重复，缺少连接词。建议使用连接词使句子更流畅，并丰富词汇表达。

例: I enjoy writing personal journals and short essays in my notebook because they help me preserve my experiences and emotions, allowing me to reflect on them later.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议注意时态和句子结构，使用更准确的表达，并增加连接词。

例: Yes, I believe my writing will change as I grow older. For instance, when I was younger, I used to write short stories, but in the future, I might prefer writing essays to share my thoughts and opinions on various topics.

提案: 回答不够连贯，表达含糊且有语法错误。建议使用连贯的句子结构，明确表达观点，并避免模糊词汇。

例: I prefer typing because it is more convenient and faster for me to record my thoughts. Additionally, digital documents are easier to organize and store compared to handwritten notes.

× What do you like to write? Why?

✓ What do you like to write? Why?

该句无语法错误，时态使用正确。

× I like writing personal journals and short essays on my notebook because I think writing personal journals is a good way to remember my personal experience and my emotions.

✓ I like writing personal journals and short essays in my notebook because I think writing personal journals is a good way to remember my personal experiences and my emotions.

“on my notebook”应改为“in my notebook”，因为写在笔记本里用介词“in”；“personal experience”应使用复数形式“personal experiences”，因为这里指多次经历。

× Yes I do. I think as the age I'm growing the things I write may change.

✓ Yes, I do. I think as I grow older, the things I write may change.

“as the age I'm growing”表达不自然，应改为“as I grow older”，更符合英语习惯。

× For example when I was young I may write about short stories, but maybe in the future I prefer writing essay to express my mind and ideas about the comment.

✓ For example, when I was young I might write about short stories, but maybe in the future I will prefer writing essays to express my thoughts and ideas about the topic.

“may write”应改为过去时“might write”，因为描述过去的习惯；“prefer writing essay”中“essay”应为复数“essays”；“express my mind”应改为“express my thoughts”；“about the comment”应改为“about the topic”，更符合语境。

× I like writing personal journals and short essays on my notebook because I think writing personal journals is a good way to remember my personal experience and my emotions.

✓ I like writing personal journals and short essays in my notebook because I think writing personal journals is a good way to remember my personal experiences and my emotions.

“on my notebook”应改为“in my notebook”，因为写在笔记本里用介词“in”。

× I think as the age I'm growing the things I write may change.

✓ I think as I grow older, the things I write may change.

“the age I'm growing”表达不正确，应使用主语“I”来表达“我变老”。

× writing essay to express my mind and ideas about the comment.

✓ writing essays to express my thoughts and ideas about the topic.

“essay”应使用复数形式“essays”，表示泛指多篇文章。

× but maybe in the future I prefer writing essay to express my mind and ideas about the comment.

✓ but maybe in the future I prefer writing essays to express my thoughts and ideas about the topic.

“about the comment”应改为“about the topic”，更符合表达习惯。

× I prefer typing. There are several reasons. Firstly, typing is more convenient for me to record. Secondly, writing can better store the things.

✓ I prefer typing. There are several reasons. Firstly, typing is more convenient for me to record things. Secondly, writing can better store things.

“to record”后应加宾语“things”；“the things”中“the”不必要，改为“things”更自然。