Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中时态使用不够准确，且表达略显重复。建议使用更自然的时态转换，并避免重复表达。

例: Yes, I used to write a lot when I was younger, but now I have less time, so I usually write short articles instead.

提案: 回答中表达不够连贯，且部分词汇使用不准确。建议使用连接词使句子更流畅，并用更准确的词汇表达感受。

例: I enjoy writing poems and short stories because they help me express my daily feelings. Moreover, I find writing very relaxing.

提案: 回答结构不够清晰，表达含糊。建议明确主题句，并用连贯的句子详细说明观点。

例: Yes, I believe my writing will change over time because as I gain more knowledge and experience, I will have new feelings and ideas to write about.

提案: 回答中句子较长且缺少连接词，表达不够流畅。建议使用连接词分句，使表达更自然。

例: I prefer handwriting because my typing is slow. Also, writing on paper allows me to review my notes easily, and it feels more personal to me.

× Yes, I did write a lot when I was young, but now I may have less time to write long pages, so I may try to write small articles.

✓ Yes, I wrote a lot when I was young, but now I may have less time to write long pages, so I may try to write small articles.

这里使用了助动词'did'来强调过去时态，但在口语中直接使用一般过去时'wrote'更自然。建议去掉'did'，直接用'wrote'。

× I like to write poems and small articles like novels and so on. This can make me record my feeling of daily lives. What's more, I think that is a kind of relaxing.

✓ I like to write poems and short articles like novels and so on. This helps me record my feelings about daily life. What's more, I think that is kind of relaxing.

'small articles'应改为'short articles'更符合英语表达习惯；'make me record'应改为'helps me record'更自然；'feeling'应为复数'feelings'；'daily lives'应为'daily life'；'a kind of relaxing'应为'kind of relaxing'，去掉冠词'a'。

× Yes, I think maybe as the time goes by the things and feelings will change and we may have more. Knowledge as we gain and we can write more things about life.

✓ Yes, I think maybe as time goes by, things and feelings will change, and we may gain more knowledge and be able to write more about life.

句子结构混乱，'more. Knowledge as we gain'不连贯，应合并为'more knowledge as we gain'；'we can write more things about life'改为'be able to write more about life'更自然。

× I prefer handwriting because my typing is very slow and I want to record things on paper so that I can review it and it is more like a handcraft of me.

✓ I prefer handwriting because my typing is very slow and I want to record things on paper so that I can review them and it is more like a handcraft of mine.

'review it'中的'it'指代不明确，应改为'them'指代复数'things'；'a handcraft of me'应改为'a handcraft of mine'，mine是正确的物主代词形式。