Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to give a direct response first, then add clear supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and improve sentence structure for better clarity.

例: No, I don't write much since I started working because I use a laptop for most tasks. I rarely write by hand nowadays, but when necessary, I type letters on my computer.

提案: Your answer is understandable but could be improved by using more natural expressions and linking words. Also, try to explain your feelings with specific reasons to enrich your response.

例: I don't enjoy writing much, especially by hand, because it feels like a burden to me. Therefore, I usually avoid it whenever possible.

提案: Your answer is quite unclear and lacks coherence. Try to organize your ideas logically using linking words and provide specific examples or explanations. Avoid filler words and incomplete sentences.

例: Yes, I believe writing can help change your thoughts. For example, when I write down my problems clearly on paper, it helps me understand them better and sometimes reduces my worries.

提案: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by using smoother linking words and clearer sentence structure. Also, avoid filler sounds like 'uh' and be more specific about your preferences.

例: I prefer typing for official work because it is faster and more convenient. However, for personal things like writing goals or wishes, I like to write by hand as it feels more personal.

× there is a practice of writing is a, a almost valid.

✓ there is a practice of writing that is almost valid.

The original sentence has a redundant 'is' and awkward phrasing. Correcting it to 'there is a practice of writing that is almost valid' clarifies the meaning and fixes the sentence structure.

× I don't write after starting a job and, uh, having a laptop or computer

✓ I haven't written since starting a job and, uh, having a laptop or computer

The phrase 'write after starting a job' is incorrect. The correct preposition to indicate time from a point is 'since'. Also, the present perfect tense 'haven't written' fits better to express an action not done from that time until now.

× I'm not a fond of writing

✓ I'm not fond of writing

The article 'a' is incorrectly used before 'fond'. 'Fond' is an adjective and does not require an article before it. Removing 'a' corrects the sentence.

× I type letter using my laptop.

✓ I type letters using my laptop.

The noun 'letter' should be plural 'letters' to match the context of writing generally. Also, 'using' is correctly used here.

× Sometimes when it comes to write by hand using pen or marker, I feel burden so I usually avoid that.

✓ Sometimes when it comes to writing by hand using a pen or marker, I feel burdened so I usually avoid that.

The phrase 'comes to write' is incorrect; it should be 'comes to writing'. Also, 'pen' and 'marker' need the article 'a' before them. 'Feel burden' is incorrect; it should be 'feel burdened' to express the feeling properly.

× the things you are thinking about. So those problems comes 50% if it is clearly able to write on a paper.

✓ the things you are thinking about. So those problems come 50% if you are clearly able to write on paper.

'Problems' is plural, so the verb should be 'come' not 'comes'. Also, 'it is clearly able to write' is incorrect; it should be 'you are clearly able to write'. 'On a paper' is better as 'on paper' in this context.

× I want to manifest something.

✓ I want to manifest something.

This sentence is grammatically correct and needs no correction.

× For official jobs, any UH office work, I need to prefer UH typing,

✓ For official jobs, any office work, I prefer typing,

The phrase 'I need to prefer' is incorrect; 'I prefer' is the correct expression. Also, 'UH' seems unnecessary or unclear and is removed for clarity.

× but when it comes to my personal things like some goals, some wishes, or anything I have to give personally so I prefer to write on paper.

✓ but when it comes to my personal things like some goals, some wishes, or anything I have to give personally, I prefer to write on paper.

A comma is needed before 'I prefer' to separate the clauses properly. The rest of the sentence is correct.