Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains some grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to make your sentences more concise and grammatically correct, and avoid repeating words. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I used to write a lot during my school years because it helped me improve my critical thinking and express my opinions and emotions clearly.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and contains incomplete sentences. Try to be more specific about what you write and why, and use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Avoid unclear phrases and ensure your sentences are complete.

例: I enjoy writing about the scenery I see to record my daily experiences. For example, after travelling, I write about the places I visited to express my emotions and keep memories.

提案: Your answer is confusing and grammatically incorrect. Try to clearly explain how your writing has changed over time, using proper sentence structure and linking words to make your ideas coherent.

例: Yes, I believe my writing has changed since I was a child. Back then, I wrote simple things like flowers, but now I write more detailed and thoughtful content.

提案: Your answer is generally clear but contains repetition and minor grammatical errors. Try to avoid repeating words and use linking words to make your answer more fluent and natural.

例: I prefer handwriting because it helps me concentrate better and gives me a sense of achievement when I finish writing.

× Yes, I write a lot, especially during my school years because writing not only improves my critical thinking skills and logic skills but also express my opinions and and emotion and recording my.

✓ Yes, I write a lot, especially during my school years because writing not only improves my critical thinking skills and logic skills but also expresses my opinions and emotions and records them.

The verbs 'express' and 'recording' need to be consistent with the subject 'writing' which is singular. Therefore, 'express' should be 'expresses' (third person singular) and 'recording' should be 'records' to maintain parallel structure and correct verb form.

× I enjoy writing scenery to record what happened in my daily life. For instance, after traveling, I would write down writing give a love me to express my emotion and record.

✓ I enjoy writing scenery to record what happens in my daily life. For instance, after traveling, I would write down my thoughts to express my emotions and record them.

The phrase 'write down writing give a love me' is unclear and grammatically incorrect. It should be replaced with a clear expression such as 'write down my thoughts'. Also, 'emotion' should be plural 'emotions' to match the context.

× Yes, I consider the things I write would change because there was a child. My mind is simple so that I just can write down some regular things like flowers and so and right now.

✓ Yes, I consider the things I write will change because when I was a child, my mind was simple so I could only write down some regular things like flowers and so on, but now...

The sentence mixes tenses incorrectly. 'There was a child' should be 'when I was a child' to indicate past time. 'My mind is simple' should be past tense 'was simple'. 'Just can write' should be 'could only write' to reflect past ability.

× I prefer handwriting because I I think it is fascinating because it helps me concentrate with my writings and give me a sense of achievement.

✓ I prefer handwriting because I think it is fascinating; it helps me concentrate on my writing and gives me a sense of achievement.

The phrase 'concentrate with my writings' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'concentrate on'. Also, 'give me' should be 'gives me' to agree with the singular subject 'it'. The repeated 'I' is a typo and should be removed.