Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy by not repeating similar ideas. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, you can say: "Yes, I often write diaries and make lists on my smartphone and notebook because it helps me record my experiences and feelings. This habit reminds me of meaningful moments from my childhood."

例: Yes, I often write diaries and make lists on my smartphone and notebook because it helps me record my experiences and feelings. This habit reminds me of meaningful moments from my childhood.

提案: Your answer is generally clear but can be improved by avoiding repetition and completing your last sentence. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide a complete thought. For example, you can say: "I enjoy writing a daily diary because it reflects my experiences, feelings, and events in my life. For instance, I often write about interesting things that happen at school and how I feel after attending events. Writing also helps me to relax and understand myself better."

例: I enjoy writing a daily diary because it reflects my experiences, feelings, and events in my life. For instance, I often write about interesting things that happen at school and how I feel after attending events. Writing also helps me to relax and understand myself better.

提案: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas more clearly and use linking words to organize your answer. For example: "I don't think the things I write will change because they reflect my past experiences and feelings. However, they help me recognize my past mistakes, so I can find solutions and handle similar situations better in the future."

例: I don't think the things I write will change because they reflect my past experiences and feelings. However, they help me recognize my past mistakes, so I can find solutions and handle similar situations better in the future.

提案: Good answer with clear reasons and examples. To improve, you can use linking words to make your answer more coherent and add a concluding sentence. For example: "I prefer handwriting because it feels more personal and connected to my real-life experiences. Writing by hand allows me to express my feelings more naturally, and it helps me remember things better. For instance, when I write notes or letters, I feel more engaged. Therefore, handwriting is my preferred method."

例: I prefer handwriting because it feels more personal and connected to my real-life experiences. Writing by hand allows me to express my feelings more naturally, and it helps me remember things better. For instance, when I write notes or letters, I feel more engaged. Therefore, handwriting is my preferred method.

× Yes, I usually write Diaries and to the list in my smartphone and notebook because I think it helps me to record my experience, feeling and daily life in this period and it represents that I have a meaningful experience when I was a kid.

✓ Yes, I usually write diaries and make lists in my smartphone and notebook because I think it helps me to record my experiences, feelings, and daily life during this period, and it shows that I had meaningful experiences when I was a kid.

The word 'Diaries' should be lowercase 'diaries' as it is a common noun, not a proper noun. 'Feeling' should be plural 'feelings' to match the plural 'experiences'. 'To the list' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'make lists'. Also, 'it represents that I have a meaningful experience' should be 'it shows that I had meaningful experiences' to match past tense and plural form.

× I enjoy writing a daily diary in my daily life because it reflects my experience, feeling and events that happen in my life.

✓ I enjoy writing a daily diary because it reflects my experiences, feelings, and events that happen in my life.

The phrase 'in my daily life' is redundant after 'daily diary' and can be omitted for clarity. 'Experience' and 'feeling' should be plural to match 'events'.

× For example, I often write about interesting things that occur in school and how I feel after I join some events, and writing also helps.

✓ For example, I often write about interesting things that occur in school and how I feel after I join some events, and writing also helps me.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'writing also helps'; it needs an object like 'me' to complete the meaning.

× I don't think so because it is my past experience and represent that my feelings and experiences and it also shows me that my mistakes that I make it in the past and I would find some solution and change the methods on handling the same things in the future.

✓ I don't think so because it is my past experience and represents my feelings and experiences, and it also shows me the mistakes I made in the past. I would find some solutions and change the methods of handling the same things in the future.

The verb 'represent' should be 'represents' to agree with singular 'experience'. 'My mistakes that I make it' is incorrect; it should be 'the mistakes I made'. 'Some solution' should be plural 'some solutions'. 'Change the methods on handling' should be 'change the methods of handling'.

× I prefer handwriting because it feels more personal and connected to my real life experience.

✓ I prefer handwriting because it feels more personal and connected to my real-life experience.

'Real life' should be hyphenated as 'real-life' when used as an adjective before a noun.

× Writing by hand allows me to express my feelings and experience more naturally, and it helps me to remember things better, for example when I write a note or letter.

✓ Writing by hand allows me to express my feelings and experiences more naturally, and it helps me to remember things better, for example when I write a note or a letter.

'Experience' should be plural 'experiences' to match 'feelings'. Also, 'note or letter' should be 'a note or a letter' for parallel structure.