Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答内容较丰富，但句子结构较长且有些重复，比如“record my moods and record my thoughts”。建议简化句子结构，避免重复表达，使语言更自然流畅。

例: I don't write much now, but in Senior High School, I used to write diaries every evening to record my moods and thoughts, which helped me manage my emotions.

提案: 回答中有语法错误，如“Writing that things”应为“Writing these things”。建议注意语法准确性，同时可以使用更多连接词使表达更连贯。

例: I like to write about my feelings, thoughts, and moods because writing regularly helps me understand myself better and relieves stress when I feel anxious.

提案: 回答中时态使用不准确，如“prefer”应为过去时“preferred”，且句子有重复“when I when I”。建议注意时态一致和句子简洁。

例: Yes, the things I write change often. In Senior High School, I preferred to record my moods and thoughts, but now at university, I usually write about daily events.

提案: 回答中表达不够自然，如“write something very well”不太准确。建议使用更地道的表达，并避免重复描述“handwriting is very beautiful”和“my handwriting was very nice”。

例: I prefer handwriting because I have neat handwriting, and my friends often compliment it.

× Actually now I seldom write, but when I was in Senior High School, I always wrote Diaries every evening to record my moods and record my thoughts, which can help me transform my moods.

✓ Actually now I seldom write, but when I was in Senior High School, I always wrote diaries every evening to record my moods and thoughts, which could help me transform my moods.

这里的时态需要保持一致。前半句用现在时态，后半句描述过去的习惯动作，使用过去时态 wrote 是正确的。'can' 应改为 'could'，因为描述的是过去的能力或效果。

× I love to write my feelings, my thoughts and my moods. Writing that things regularly can help me to understand myself better and relieve stress, which is very useful when I feel stressful.

✓ I love to write my feelings, my thoughts and my moods. Writing those things regularly can help me to understand myself better and relieve stress, which is very useful when I feel stressed.

'that things' 应改为 'those things'，因为 'things' 是复数，指示代词应使用复数形式 'those'。另外，'feel stressful' 应改为 'feel stressed'，因为 'stressed' 是形容人的状态，'stressful' 是形容事物。

× Of course, I think it would change very often. When I was in Senior High School, I prefer to record my moods, my thoughts. But now when I when I am in university, I prefer to record the things happened every day.

✓ Of course, I think it changes very often. When I was in Senior High School, I preferred to record my moods and my thoughts. But now, when I am in university, I prefer to record the things that happen every day.

'would change' 应改为一般现在时 'changes'，因为谈论的是现在的情况。'prefer' 在过去时态描述过去习惯时应改为 'preferred'。'the things happened' 应改为 'the things that happen'，因为描述的是现在经常发生的事情，需要用现在时态和关系代词。

× But now when I when I am in university, I prefer to record the things happened every day.

✓ But now, when I am in university, I prefer to record the things that happen every day.

句子中重复了 'when I'，应删除多余部分。

× I prefer handwriting because I can write something very well and my handwriting is very beautiful. My friends all said that my handwriting was very nice.

✓ I prefer handwriting because I can write well and my handwriting is very beautiful. My friends all say that my handwriting is very nice.

'write something very well' 表达不自然，应改为 'write well'。'My friends all said' 应改为现在时 'say'，因为朋友们的评价通常是持续的。