Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by avoiding filler words and improving sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and be more specific about your writing habits.

例: Yes, I write quite a lot, especially during the final exam period. For instance, I take notes both on paper and on digital devices like my iPad to help me study effectively.

提案: Focus on clear sentence structure and avoid repetition. Use linking words to organize your ideas logically. Be specific about what you write and why, and try to avoid filler words like 'uh' or repeated phrases.

例: I like to write notes for my exams because it helps me highlight important points for revision. Besides that, I also make lists to remind myself of daily tasks or things I need to buy.

提案: Improve clarity by using correct tenses and avoiding informal phrases like 'Guess'. Use linking words to connect your ideas and be more precise in your explanation.

例: I believe the things I write will change over time. As I gain more experience and knowledge, my writing style and ideas tend to evolve. For example, when I was younger, my writing was simple, but now I try to make it more complex and clear.

提案: Make your answer more coherent by using linking words and clearer sentence structure. Avoid repetition and filler words. Be specific about your preference and reasons.

例: It depends on the situation. For my final exams, I prefer handwriting my notes on paper because it helps me memorize the important parts more clearly and I am less likely to forget them.

× Like I will make some note taking even on the paper or in the digital gadgets like iPad.

✓ Like I will make some notes even on paper or in digital gadgets like an iPad.

The phrase 'note taking' is incorrectly used as a noun here; it should be 'notes' to indicate written items. Also, 'note taking' is a gerund phrase and does not fit the sentence structure. Additionally, 'on the paper' should be 'on paper' and 'in the digital gadgets' should be 'in digital gadgets' for correct preposition use.

× Like I will make some note taking even on the paper or in the digital gadgets like iPad.

✓ Like I will make some notes even on paper or in digital gadgets like an iPad.

The prepositions 'on the paper' and 'in the digital gadgets' are incorrect. We say 'on paper' (without 'the') and 'in digital gadgets' (without 'the') because these are general references, not specific items.

× Uh example I always try not for my exam so I can highlight the important part for me for for me to revision and beside the not taking I also always need some list for reminder what I need to do or what I need to buy of the day.

✓ For example, I always try to take notes for my exam so I can highlight the important parts for my revision, and besides note-taking, I also always need some lists as reminders of what I need to do or buy for the day.

The prepositions 'not for my exam' and 'beside the not taking' are incorrect. It should be 'take notes for my exam' and 'besides note-taking'. Also, 'for me to revision' should be 'for my revision'. Prepositions must correctly link the phrases to convey the intended meaning.

× Uh example I always try not for my exam so I can highlight the important part for me for for me to revision and beside the not taking I also always need some list for reminder what I need to do or what I need to buy of the day.

✓ For example, I always try to take notes for my exam so I can highlight the important parts for my revision, and besides note-taking, I also always need some lists as reminders of what I need to do or buy for the day.

The word 'part' should be plural 'parts' because it refers to multiple important sections. Similarly, 'some list' should be 'some lists' to indicate multiple reminders.

× Guess I believe the thing I wrote will change over time.

✓ I guess I believe the things I write will change over time.

The verb 'wrote' is past tense, but the sentence talks about a general truth or ongoing situation, so present tense 'write' is appropriate. Also, 'thing' should be plural 'things' to match the context.

× As I gained more experience and knowledge my writing style and ideas tend to evolve.

✓ As I gain more experience and knowledge, my writing style and ideas tend to evolve.

The phrase 'As I gained' suggests past tense, but the sentence refers to a continuing process, so present tense 'gain' is better. Also, a comma is needed after the introductory clause for clarity.

× So for example when I was younger my writing was simple but now I try to Max it to more complexity and more clearly.

✓ So, for example, when I was younger, my writing was simple, but now I try to make it more complex and clearer.

'Max it to more complexity' is incorrect; it should be 'make it more complex'. Also, 'more clearly' is an adverb, but the sentence needs an adjective 'clearer' to describe 'writing'. Commas are added for clarity.

× I think this depends lie for my final exam.

✓ I think this depends on my final exam.

The phrase 'depends lie' is incorrect; it should be 'depends on'. The preposition 'on' is required after 'depends' to indicate the condition.

× What I said just now is I prefer not taking like handwriting my note on the paper so I can memorize more clearly for my exam and I'm not really and not easy to forget it the important part.

✓ What I said just now is I prefer note-taking like handwriting my notes on paper so I can memorize more clearly for my exam and it's not easy to forget the important parts.

'Not taking' should be 'note-taking' as a noun. 'Handwriting my note' should be 'handwriting my notes' (plural). 'On the paper' should be 'on paper'. The phrase 'I'm not really and not easy to forget it the important part' is corrected to 'it's not easy to forget the important parts' for clarity and grammar.