Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your response more natural and concise by directly answering the question and avoiding redundancy. For example, say "Yes, I often write stories during my free time."

例: Yes, I often write stories during my free time because I enjoy creating new characters and plots.

提案: Your answer has good content but some phrases are awkward or unclear, such as "the poor and sincerely beauty." Try to use clearer vocabulary and link your ideas smoothly. For example, explain why you enjoy love stories and how they inspire your imagination.

例: I like to write love stories because they capture the deep emotions between people. Writing them allows me to imagine beautiful and sincere relationships, which inspires me creatively.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to answer directly and clearly, using linking words to explain your opinion. For example, say whether your stories will change and why, providing specific reasons.

例: I don't think the themes in my stories will change because they reflect my values, like loyalty and love. These ideas are important to me and will likely stay the same.

提案: Your answer is clear and well-structured, but watch for small grammar mistakes like "writing by hand feel" which should be "feels." Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: I prefer handwriting because phones are not allowed in schools in my country, so I have to use paper. Moreover, writing by hand feels more convenient and helps me focus better, which makes me more creative.

× Yeah, actually I often write, I love, often created my own stories in my leisure time.

✓ Yeah, actually I often write, I love, often create my own stories in my leisure time.

The verb 'created' is incorrectly used in the past participle form here. Since the sentence is about habitual actions, the simple present tense 'create' should be used to match 'often write' and 'I love'.

× I can feel the romance of love and the poor and sincerely beauty between people from my thoughts.

✓ I can feel the romance of love and the pure and sincere beauty between people from my thoughts.

The words 'poor' and 'sincerely' are incorrectly used as adjectives here. The correct adjectives are 'pure' and 'sincere' to describe 'beauty'. 'Poor' means lacking and 'sincerely' is an adverb, not an adjective.

× For example, the couple in my story's always been loyal to each other no matter what situation they are in.

✓ For example, the couple in my story has always been loyal to each other no matter what situation they are in.

The phrase 'story's' is a contraction of 'story is' which is incorrect here. The correct verb form is 'has' to agree with the singular subject 'couple'.

× The things I read were not changed.

✓ The things I read have not changed.

The sentence incorrectly uses the past tense 'were not changed' which implies passive voice. The correct form is present perfect 'have not changed' to indicate that the things remain unchanged up to now.

× Additionally, writing by hand feel more convenient and helps me become more immersed in the story I'm creating.

✓ Additionally, writing by hand feels more convenient and helps me become more immersed in the story I'm creating.

The verb 'feel' does not agree with the singular subject 'writing by hand'. It should be 'feels' to maintain subject-verb agreement.