Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在词汇错误（如“ride”应为“write”），句子结构不够自然，且表达重复。建议注意单词拼写和语法，避免冗余，保持回答简洁自然。

例: Yes, I write a lot because, as a clinical medical student, I need to record my daily tasks. Besides, I keep a diary every day to track my experiences.

提案: 回答中有词汇错误（“ride”应为“write”），表达不够清晰，句子结构混乱。建议使用准确词汇，简洁表达原因，并用连接词使句子连贯。

例: I like to write about my emotions and feelings in my diary because it helps me relieve stress and preserve memories.

提案: 回答表达基本清楚，但语法和用词有误（如“with the years goes”应为“as years go by”），句子稍显冗长。建议注意语法准确性，使用连接词使表达更流畅。

例: Yes, I believe what I write will change as I grow older. Currently, I focus on myself, but in the future, I might write more about my family and children.

提案: 回答中表达不清晰，存在语法错误和重复，且逻辑混乱。建议简化句子，明确表达偏好和原因，避免重复和无意义的词语。

例: I prefer handwriting because it's more convenient for me to quickly jot down urgent notes during my clinical studies.

× I have a habit of to keep Diaries every day.

✓ I have a habit of keeping diaries every day.

动词短语 'have a habit of' 后面应接动名词形式，不能接不定式 'to keep'。这里应使用 'keeping'。

× I'd like to ride all my emotions and feelings of a date on my diary because I regard it as a way to release my stress and express my emotions and also keep it as a memory.

✓ I'd like to write all my emotions and feelings of a day in my diary because I regard it as a way to release my stress, express my emotions, and also keep it as a memory.

这里 'ride' 应为 'write'，且 'of a date' 应为 'of a day'，表示一天的情绪和感受。

× I'd like to ride all my emotions and feelings of a date on my diary because I regard it as a way to release my stress and express my emotions and also keep it as a memory.

✓ I'd like to write all my emotions and feelings of a day in my diary because I regard it as a way to release my stress, express my emotions, and also keep it as a memory.

表达写日记时，应该用介词 'in' 而不是 'on'。

× I think with the years goes and my age grows I think definitely my things will change in the future.

✓ I think as the years go by and my age grows, definitely my things will change in the future.

'with the years goes' 语法错误，应为 'as the years go by'，表示随着时间的推移。

× maybe in the fu near future I will more focus on my families or even my daughters or sons.

✓ Maybe in the near future I will focus more on my family or even my daughters or sons.

'fu near future' 是拼写错误，应为 'near future'；'more focus' 应为 'focus more'；'families' 应为单数 'family'。

× I prefer handwriting because as a clinical medical student I'd always have a pain in my pocket, so it's easier for me and convenient for more convenient for me to write all the urgent thing.

✓ I prefer handwriting because as a clinical medical student I always have pain in my pocket, so it's easier and more convenient for me to write all the urgent things.

'have a pain in my pocket' 应为 'have pain in my pocket'；'convenient for more convenient for me' 结构重复，应简化为 'easier and more convenient for me'；'urgent thing' 应为复数 'urgent things'。

× That and my daily talks. Uh, on the On the contrary.

✓ That and my daily talks are important to me. On the contrary, ...

原句缺少谓语，导致句子结构不完整，应补充谓语使句子完整。