Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tự nhiên và hiệu quả, tuy nhiên bạn nên tránh việc bắt đầu câu bằng trạng từ như "Really" mà không có chủ ngữ để câu hoàn chỉnh hơn. Ngoài ra, bạn có thể sử dụng thêm các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I write quite a lot, especially notes and reminders on my phone because it helps me focus on my thoughts and remember important information more easily. For example, I often jot down ideas or tasks, which helps me stay organized and efficient throughout the day.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý sử dụng thì động từ cho phù hợp (quá khứ hoặc hiện tại) và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như "I like writing some vocabularies" (nên là "I liked writing vocabulary words"). Câu trả lời cần rõ ràng, mạch lạc và có cấu trúc tốt hơn.

例: When I was at university, I liked writing down vocabulary words to help with my studies and tests. However, when I became busy with work, I started listing many tasks I had to complete each day.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự rõ ràng và hoàn chỉnh, có nhiều câu chưa kết thúc hoặc thiếu thông tin. Bạn nên sử dụng các câu hoàn chỉnh và thêm từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Absolutely yes, the things I write change according to my career path. When I was at university, I used to write about my tests and lessons, but now at work, I write about tasks and projects related to my job.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp, ví dụ "when I typing" nên là "when I type". Ngoài ra, tránh lặp từ như "and it's also and it is also". Câu trả lời nên ngắn gọn, rõ ràng và có liên kết tốt giữa các ý.

例: Actually, I prefer typing because it's fast and convenient. When I type on my phone, it helps me improve my typing skills, and my notes are saved on the cloud for easy access.

× Actually, when I was in the university, I like writing some vocabularies for my journey, for my test.

✓ Actually, when I was in the university, I liked writing some vocabulary for my journey, for my test.

The sentence refers to a past time ('when I was in the university'), so the verb 'like' should be in the past tense 'liked' to maintain tense consistency. Also, 'vocabularies' is incorrect; 'vocabulary' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized.

× Actually, when I was in the university, I like writing some vocabularies for my journey, for my test.

✓ Actually, when I was in the university, I liked writing some vocabulary for my journey, for my test.

The word 'vocabulary' is an uncountable noun and should not be pluralized as 'vocabularies'. Using 'some vocabulary' is correct.

× But when it was crowded and when the work I used to list down, I used to drop down a lot of things I have to do in one day.

✓ But when it was crowded and when I had a lot of work to list down, I used to drop a lot of things I had to do in one day.

The original sentence has unclear structure and missing subjects. 'The work I used to list down' is incomplete; it should be 'I had a lot of work to list down'. Also, 'drop down a lot of things' is awkward; 'drop a lot of things' is better. Verb tenses should be consistent in past tense.

× But when it was crowded and when the work I used to list down, I used to drop down a lot of things I have to do in one day.

✓ But when it was crowded and when I had a lot of work to list down, I used to drop a lot of things I had to do in one day.

The phrase 'I have to do' should be in past tense 'I had to do' to match the past context of the sentence.

× Absolutely yes, because other things always change according to my career path.

✓ Absolutely yes, because other things always changed according to my career path.

Since the context is about past experiences, 'always change' should be 'always changed' to maintain past tense consistency.

× And when I was in the university, I used to write something about my test or my studying, my lesson.

✓ And when I was in the university, I used to write something about my tests or my studies, my lessons.

Plural forms 'tests', 'studies', and 'lessons' are more appropriate here to indicate multiple instances. Also, 'studying' should be 'studies' as a noun.

× But when I was in the the company I used to write something about.

✓ But when I was in the company, I used to write about work-related things.

The original sentence is incomplete and unclear. Adding 'about work-related things' completes the thought. Also, 'the the' is a typo and should be corrected to 'the'.

× Actually I prefer typing because it's really fast and convenient and when I typing on my phone it helps me to enhance my typing skills and it's also and it is also saved on the cloud.

✓ Actually, I prefer typing because it's really fast and convenient, and when I type on my phone, it helps me to enhance my typing skills, and it is also saved on the cloud.

The verb 'typing' after 'when I' should be in base form 'type' to be grammatically correct. Also, the sentence needs commas for clarity and removal of repeated phrases 'and it's also and it is also'.