Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并使用更准确的词汇表达。

例: Yes, I write quite often. When I was a child, my parents encouraged me to keep a diary, which helped me improve my writing skills. I still maintain this habit because I really enjoy writing.

提案: 回答内容不够清晰，词汇使用不当，建议明确表达写作内容和原因，避免使用“watch”错误动词。

例: I like to write short sentences and keep diaries because they help me record my happy moments and inspirations. I also enjoy writing articles on various topics.

提案: 回答中动词使用错误，表达不够连贯，建议使用正确动词并增加连接词使表达更流畅。

例: Yes, definitely. When I was a child, I liked to write about my school and friends to capture my feelings. Nowadays, I prefer to write about my personal experiences.

提案: 回答表达基本清楚，但句子结构略显重复，建议简化表达并使用更自然的连接词。

例: I prefer typing because it saves time. For example, I use apps like Memo to quickly record my feelings when I feel inspired.

× I can use writing Diaries to help me in helping me improve my ability of writing.

✓ I can use writing diaries to help me improve my writing ability.

这里“help me in helping me improve”结构重复且冗余，应简化为“help me improve”。另外，“ability of writing”应改为“writing ability”，更符合英语表达习惯。

× I can use writing Diaries to help me in helping me improve my ability of writing.

✓ I can use writing diaries to help me improve my writing ability.

“Diaries”首字母不应大写，且应保持小写形式。

× When I was a kid my parents told me I I could use to.

✓ When I was a kid, my parents told me I could use it.

句中“I I”重复，应删除一个“ I ”，且“could use to”结构不完整，需补充宾语“it”。

× I like to watch some short sentence and Diaries and because I think it can record the feeling when I feel very happy and sometimes when I get inspired experience.

✓ I like to write some short sentences and diaries because I think they can record my feelings when I feel very happy and sometimes when I have inspiring experiences.

“watch”用错，应为“write”；“short sentence”应为复数“short sentences”；“Diaries”不应大写；“it”指代不明，应改为“they”；“get inspired experience”表达不正确，应为“have inspiring experiences”。

× Absolutely yes. When I was a kid, I would like to write something about my school and my friends because I wanted to record the feeling when I played with my friends and nowadays I prefer to watch something about my experience.

✓ Absolutely yes. When I was a kid, I liked to write something about my school and my friends because I wanted to record the feelings when I played with my friends, and nowadays I prefer to write about my experiences.

“would like to”用于过去习惯时不准确，应改为“liked”；“watch”用错，应为“write”；“feeling”应为复数“feelings”；“experience”应为复数“experiences”。

× I prefer to type in because I think it can help me shorten the time when I'm writing something.

✓ I prefer to type because I think it can help me shorten the time when I'm writing something.

“type in”通常指输入（如输入密码），此处表达“打字”应去掉“in”。

× For example, I'd like to use some apps such as Memo to record my feeling when I experience the very inspired expressions.

✓ For example, I'd like to use some apps such as Memo to record my feelings when I have very inspiring experiences.

“feeling”应为复数“feelings”；“experience the very inspired expressions”表达不自然，应改为“have very inspiring experiences”。