Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“I’m really like to writing”应改为“I really like writing”。建议简化句子结构，避免冗余，同时注意时态和词汇的正确使用。

例: Yes, I do. I really enjoy writing at the end of the day. For example, when I feel happy or when something important happens, I write about it in my diary.

提案: 回答中语法和表达不够准确，句子结构混乱。建议使用更清晰的句子表达原因，并且注意时态和词汇的准确性。

例: Most of the time, I write about what happened during the day because I like to remember those moments. Writing also helps me improve my memory for the future.

提案: 回答不够清晰，表达含糊且有语法错误。建议直接回答问题，并用简单明了的句子表达观点。

例: No, I don't think what I write will change because I only write about what really happened and my true feelings at that time.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达重复。建议简化句子，使用连贯的表达，并明确说明原因。

例: I prefer handwriting because it helps me write more beautifully. Also, handwriting is a traditional way to record my memories.

× I'm really like to writing something at the end of the day.

✓ I really like writing something at the end of the day.

动词 'like' 后面直接跟动名词形式，不能用 'to writing'，应改为 'like writing'。

× if happens some important things will be seen, I also will write down in my diary.

✓ if some important things happen, I will also write them down in my diary.

句中 'if happens some important things will be seen' 结构不正确，缺少主语且时态错误，应改为 'if some important things happen'。另外，'write down in my diary' 应为 'write them down in my diary'，需要加宾语。

× I think the most of time I will write down what happened in these days.

✓ I think most of the time I will write down what happened these days.

'the most of time' 应为 'most of the time'，'these days' 不需要 'in'。

× I like to remember everything what happened and also I will write down my mind in these days and I think it helped me, it helped me memory.

✓ I like to remember everything that happened and also I will write down my thoughts these days and I think it helps my memory.

'everything what happened' 应为 'everything that happened'，'my mind' 应为 'my thoughts'，'helped me memory' 语法错误，应为 'helps my memory'。

× No, I don't because I just want to write down the really happened in these days and I think we could wish.

✓ No, I don't because I just want to write down what really happened these days and I think we could wish.

'the really happened' 结构不正确，应为 'what really happened'。

× I must believe at that time my feelings and my rhetoric feelings.

✓ I must believe in my feelings and my true feelings at that time.

'believe at that time my feelings' 结构不正确，应为 'believe in my feelings at that time'，'rhetoric feelings' 用词不当，应为 'true feelings'。

× I think I prefer to like a handwriting because I think handwriting also is a way to help me to write down more beautiful words and also I think handwriting is more traditional and way to record my memories.

✓ I think I prefer handwriting because I think handwriting is also a way to help me write more beautiful words and I also think handwriting is a more traditional way to record my memories.

'prefer to like a handwriting' 结构错误，应为 'prefer handwriting'，'help me to write down' 中 'write down' 不合适，应为 'write'，'more traditional and way' 缺少冠词，应为 'a more traditional way'。