Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，建议使用更准确的时态和句式，避免重复和断句不当，使表达更流畅自然。

例: No, I don't write a lot because I don't consider myself talented in writing. When I was young, I often received low grades in writing despite putting in a lot of effort.

提案: 回答中有语法和表达不清晰的问题，建议简洁明了地表达观点，并使用连词使句子更连贯。

例: If I have to say what I like to write, it would be diaries. I find diaries easy to write because they don't require advanced writing skills, and they help me record my daily experiences, whether good or bad.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不清晰，建议理清思路，使用正确的时态和词汇，避免重复，表达情绪变化时用更准确的词汇。

例: Yes, what I write changes depending on my mood. If I'm feeling down, I tend to write about unpleasant things, but when I achieve something, my writing becomes more positive and excited.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和用词不当，建议使用正确的动词形式和表达方式，描述手写的感受时更具体。

例: Actually, I prefer handwriting because I enjoy the feeling of the pen scratching the paper. Writing by hand helps me calm down and focus my thoughts.

× No, I didn't write a lot because I think I don't have this kind of talent at all.

✓ No, I didn't write a lot because I thought I didn't have this kind of talent at all.

这里时态不一致。前半句是过去时，后半句应该用过去时态，表示过去的想法。

× When I was young. I I have been getting low grades about writing since I was a kid and I have made a lot of effort to.

✓ When I was young, I had been getting low grades in writing since I was a kid and I had made a lot of effort.

句子结构不完整，句号使用错误，应使用逗号连接。时态应统一为过去完成时，表示过去持续的动作。

× You if you have to say what I like to write, the only thing I can write recent years is the Diaries, because I think Diaries don't need too much writing skills and it's just the task.

✓ If you have to say what I like to write, the only thing I have written in recent years is diaries, because I think diaries don't need too much writing skill and it's just a task.

句首多余的'You'应去掉。'recent years'前应加介词'in'。'Diaries'不需要大写。'writing skills'应为单数'skill'。

× It's just a note to remember some good thing or bad thing I have experienced in a day.

✓ It's just a note to remember some good or bad things I have experienced in a day.

'thing'应使用复数形式'things'，表示多件事。

× Yes, I think the same size right will change.

✓ Yes, I think the same size of writing will change.

原句中'size right'表达不清，应为'size of writing'。

× It will be change depends on my mood.

✓ It will change depending on my mood.

'be change'错误，应为主动语态'change'。'depends on'应改为现在分词形式'depending on'。

× If you if recently I, I I just suffer my time and in a bad mood I prefer to maybe I will write something unpleasant.

✓ If recently I am having a hard time and am in a bad mood, I may write something unpleasant.

句子结构混乱，重复使用'if'和'I'。应简化并调整时态。

× But if I have got something achievement, I got some achievement, I will be right with excite excitement.

✓ But if I have some achievement, I will write with excitement.

'have got'和'got'重复且时态混乱。'right'应为'write'。'excite excitement'用词错误，应为'excitement'。

× Uh, actually I prefer to riding by handwriting because I love the view.

✓ Uh, actually I prefer writing by handwriting because I love the feeling.

'prefer to riding'错误，应为'prefer writing'。'view'用词不当，应为'feeling'或'feeling of writing'.

× I write with the pen, the pen just scratch the paper and and also I think riding by hand can makes me calm down and think focused on myself.

✓ I write with a pen; the pen just scratches the paper, and also I think writing by hand can make me calm down and focus on myself.

'the pen'前应加不定冠词'a'。'scratch'应为第三人称单数'scratches'。'riding'应为'writing'。'can makes'应为'can make'。'think focused'应为'focus'。