Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat off-topic at the beginning, mentioning driving instead of writing. To improve, start directly by addressing the question about writing. Also, avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise and relevant. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I write quite a lot because my job requires me to prepare detailed reports on data analysis every week. This involves carefully tracking and organising important information to ensure accuracy.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains grammatical errors and unclear phrases, such as 'help me to understand the lack'. To improve, use correct grammar and clarify your ideas. Also, use linking words to connect your points logically.

例: I enjoy writing about scientific research, particularly disease control. For instance, I like exploring how pharmaceutical interventions have been used to manage COVID-19 because it helps me understand the challenges in public health.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical mistakes. To improve, express your ideas clearly and use correct sentence structures. Also, avoid redundancy and use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: Yes, I believe my writing will change in the near future as I plan to focus more on viral infections, especially those affecting paediatric respiratory health.

提案: Your answer is generally clear but incomplete at the end. To improve, complete your sentences and avoid repetition. Use linking words to contrast your preferences effectively.

例: When I have many ideas to jot down quickly, I prefer handwriting because it is faster and more flexible. However, for presentations or formal documents, I usually choose typing because it looks neater and is easier to edit.

× I like to explore how pharmaceutical intervention have been used to manage COVID-19.

✓ I like to explore how pharmaceutical interventions have been used to manage COVID-19.

The noun 'intervention' should be plural 'interventions' to agree with the plural verb 'have'. This is a singular and plural agreement issue. When the verb is plural, the subject must also be plural.

× I think about this subject help me to understand the lack.

✓ I think about this subject helps me to understand the lack.

The verb 'help' should be in the third person singular form 'helps' to agree with the singular subject 'this subject'. This is a subject-verb agreement issue related to present tense.

× I'm planning to see my research focus through viral infection especially specifically shows that effect pediatric respiratory health.

✓ I'm planning to focus my research on viral infections, especially those that specifically affect pediatric respiratory health.

The original sentence is unclear and structurally incorrect. The correction clarifies the intended meaning and corrects the sentence structure errors by properly ordering words and phrases.

× However, when I had to write a form of presentation or documents, I usually choose typing, so it's.

✓ However, when I have to write a form of presentation or documents, I usually choose typing, so I do.

The tense inconsistency between 'had' (past) and 'usually choose' (present) causes confusion. Changing 'had' to 'have' maintains present tense consistency. Also, the sentence ending 'so it's' is incomplete and corrected to 'so I do' for clarity.