Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“to reading”应为“to read”，“while the writing made me more”表达不完整且不清晰。建议简化句子结构，使用正确的动词形式，并使表达更流畅自然。

例: Actually, I don't write very often because I prefer reading books and listening to soft music, which help me relax more than writing does.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，如“to light it”应为“to write”，动词时态错误“expressed”应为“express”。建议使用简单明了的句子，直接回答问题并提供具体理由。

例: If I have to write something, I would choose stories about my daily life because they are realistic and help me express my emotions and record my experiences.

提案: 回答中时态使用不当，如“expressed”应为“express”，“may changed”应为“may change”。建议注意时态一致性，并用连接词使句子更连贯。

例: Yes, definitely. For example, I write about my feelings on a certain day, but these feelings may change as different situations happen over time.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不完整的问题，如“in that ways”应为“in that way”，“I may usually to erase”应为“I usually erase”。建议简化句子，确保表达完整且语法正确。

例: I prefer typing to handwriting because it is easier to edit my work. Since I'm not very confident in writing, typing allows me to make changes without much trouble.

× I'm not very interested in writing compared to the reading.

✓ I'm not very interested in writing compared to reading.

在英语中，'compared to'后面不需要加定冠词'the'，直接使用动名词形式即可。这里应去掉'the'。

× I prefer to have some books to reading and to listening to some soft music that could make me feel relaxing while the writing made me more.

✓ I prefer to have some books to read and to listen to some soft music that could make me feel relaxed while writing makes me feel better.

动词不定式后面不应接动名词，应该用动词原形。'feel relaxing'应改为'feel relaxed'，因为这里是感受状态。'the writing made me more'表达不完整，应改为'writing makes me feel better'。

× If I have to choose something to light it, definitely write the stories that happened around me because it is realistic and easy for me to say something to expressed my emotions and to record that something.

✓ If I have to choose something to write, I would definitely write stories that happened around me because they are realistic and easy for me to express my emotions and to record those things.

'to light it'应为'to write'，'expressed'应为原形'express'，'that something'应为复数形式'those things'，代词和动词形式使用错误。

× If I have to choose something to light it, definitely write the stories that happened around me because it is realistic and easy for me to say something to expressed my emotions and to record that something.

✓ If I have to choose something to write, I would definitely write stories that happened around me because they are realistic and easy for me to express my emotions and to record those things.

动词不定式后面应使用动词原形，'expressed'应改为'express'。

× For example, I write the things to expressed my feelings of one day, and the feelings may changed when the days changed when the different situations happened.

✓ For example, I write things to express my feelings of one day, and the feelings may change when the days change and different situations happen.

'to expressed'应为不定式原形'to express'，'may changed'应为'may change'，时态错误。

× For example, I write the things to expressed my feelings of one day, and the feelings may changed when the days changed when the different situations happened.

✓ For example, I write things to express my feelings of one day, and the feelings may change when the days change and different situations happen.

'may changed'中'may'后应接动词原形，'changed'应改为'change'。

× Compared to the handwriting, I may choose the typing because in that ways it makes me easier to edit.

✓ Compared to handwriting, I may choose typing because in that way it makes it easier for me to edit.

'the handwriting'和'the typing'前不需要定冠词，'in that ways'应为单数形式'in that way'，'makes me easier'应为'makes it easier for me'。

× Because I'm not very good at writing, I may usually to erase something to change and that typing is.

✓ Because I'm not very good at writing, I usually erase something to change it, and typing helps with that.

'may usually to erase'结构错误，应为'usually erase'，句子不完整，需补充完整表达。