Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat clear but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as "I don't try to a lot" and "text to say." To improve, focus on using correct sentence structures and clearer expressions. Also, try to keep your answer concise and avoid redundancy.

例: No, I don't write very often because I find it time-consuming and challenging. I usually prefer speaking or typing messages, and I often use digital communication methods like voice messages and texts.

提案: Your answer has repetition and unclear phrases such as "style life" and "interaction with my friends." To improve, avoid repeating words, use clearer vocabulary, and provide specific reasons for your preferences. Also, organize your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details.

例: I like to write social media posts because they allow me to share my lifestyle and connect with my friends. I enjoy expressing my personal style and creativity through my writing.

提案: There are grammatical mistakes and unclear expressions like "teams I write" and "have been evolved additionally." To improve, use correct verb tenses and clearer vocabulary. Also, explain why your writing might change with specific reasons.

例: I believe the things I write will change over time as I grow older because my perspectives and experiences will evolve, influencing my writing style and topics.

提案: Your answer is incomplete and contains many grammatical errors and unclear phrases like "Prefer writing" and "you Chan very convenient for share." To improve, provide a complete sentence with clear reasons and use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: I prefer typing because it is faster and more efficient, especially for long documents. Additionally, it's easier to edit and share typed documents compared to handwritten ones.

× No, I don't try to a lot.

✓ No, I don't try to write a lot.

The sentence is missing the verb 'write' after 'try to'. Modal verbs like 'try to' should be followed by the base form of a verb. Adding 'write' completes the meaning and corrects the sentence.

× I rely more on digital communication methods such as voice messages and text to say.

✓ I rely more on digital communication methods such as voice messages and text to communicate.

The phrase 'text to say' is incorrect. The verb 'say' is not used with 'text' in this context. Replacing 'say' with 'communicate' or 'send messages' makes the sentence grammatically correct and clearer.

× I like I like to write social media posts and share my style life with other and interaction with my friends and I prefer to showcase my style, writing and personalization.

✓ I like to write social media posts and share my lifestyle with others and interact with my friends. I prefer to showcase my style, writing, and personalization.

The sentence has several pluralization errors: 'style life' should be 'lifestyle', 'other' should be 'others', and 'interaction' should be 'interact' to match the intended meaning. Also, the sentence was repetitive and needed restructuring for clarity.

× I believe the teams I write will be changed over time as I grow older.

✓ I believe the things I write will change over time as I grow older.

The word 'teams' is incorrect; it should be 'things'. Also, 'will be changed' is passive and awkward here; 'will change' is the correct active future tense form. This correction aligns with the intended meaning.

× My perspective and experiences have been evolved additionally.

✓ My perspective and experiences have evolved as well.

The verb 'evolved' is incorrectly used in the passive form 'have been evolved'. 'Evolve' is an intransitive verb and should be used in the active form 'have evolved'. 'Additionally' is better replaced with 'as well' for naturalness.

× Prefer writing as it is faster and more efficient.

✓ I prefer typing as it is faster and more efficient.

The sentence lacks a subject; 'Prefer writing' is incomplete. Adding 'I' as the subject and correcting 'writing' to 'typing' (to match the question context) makes the sentence complete and clear.

× Additionally as a long document and it's very easily for edit and change a document and you Chan very convenient for share and.

✓ Additionally, for long documents, it's very easy to edit and change them, and it is very convenient to share them.

The original sentence is fragmented and contains incorrect conjunctions and word forms. 'Additionally as a long document' is unclear; it should be 'Additionally, for long documents'. 'Very easily for edit' should be 'very easy to edit'. 'You Chan' is likely a typo and should be removed. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.