Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có vẻ không tự nhiên và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không phù hợp (ví dụ: 'our weather is shutting down nose' không rõ nghĩa). Bạn nên sử dụng câu trả lời rõ ràng, mạch lạc và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp để câu trả lời tự nhiên và hiệu quả hơn.

例: Yes, I write almost every day, whether it's for work, journaling in the evening, or composing emails. Writing helps me organize my thoughts and express myself clearly, so it has become a regular part of my routine.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tốt, tự nhiên và có nội dung cụ thể. Tuy nhiên, bạn có thể sử dụng thêm một số từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và tránh lặp lại từ ngữ.

例: I enjoy writing personal journals the most because it allows me to reflect on my day and process my thoughts. Moreover, it's a great way to relieve stress and gain clarity, especially after a long day. Additionally, it helps me track my personal growth over time.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn rất tốt, có cấu trúc rõ ràng và nội dung cụ thể. Bạn có thể thêm một từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, definitely. As I grow older and my priorities shift, I believe my writing will reflect those changes. For instance, I might move from personal journaling to more professional or reflective writing depending on my career and life experiences.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn tốt và tự nhiên. Tuy nhiên, bạn có thể sử dụng thêm từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và tránh lặp lại từ ngữ.

例: I definitely prefer typing because it's much faster and more convenient, especially when I need to edit or organize my ideas. Furthermore, with digital tools, I can easily save and access my work anywhere, which makes the whole writing process more efficient.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có ý tưởng tốt nhưng có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không chính xác (ví dụ: 'keep track on our personal roles overtime' nên là 'keep track of my personal growth over time'). Bạn nên chú ý sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và ngữ pháp đúng để câu trả lời tự nhiên hơn.

例: Well, I write in my diary every evening as a daily habit. It helps me unwind and reflect on what happened during the day. Additionally, it gives me a chance to process my emotions and keep track of my personal growth over time.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có một số lỗi ngữ pháp và từ vựng không phù hợp (ví dụ: 'My life is a quick and meaningful way' không đúng nghĩa, 'helps me appreciate how far I become' nên là 'helps me appreciate how far I have come'). Bạn nên sử dụng câu trả lời rõ ràng, chính xác và tự nhiên hơn.

例: I mostly take photos to record my life. It's a quick and meaningful way to capture special moments, especially when I'm with family or traveling. Looking back at these pictures always brings back great memories and helps me appreciate how far I have come.

× Yes I do. I write almost every day our weather is shutting down nose or for work, journaling in the evening, or even composing emails or writing helps me organize my talks and express myself clearly, so it's become a regular part of my routine.

✓ Yes, I do. I write almost every day, whether it's about the weather shutting down, notes for work, journaling in the evening, or even composing emails. Writing helps me organize my thoughts and express myself clearly, so it's become a regular part of my routine.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence lacking proper punctuation and conjunctions, causing confusion. Breaking it into clearer parts and correcting 'talks' to 'thoughts' improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I write almost every day our weather is shutting down nose or for work, journaling in the evening, or even composing emails or writing helps me organize my talks and express myself clearly, so it's become a regular part of my routine.

✓ I write almost every day, whether it's about the weather shutting down, notes for work, journaling in the evening, or even composing emails. Writing helps me organize my thoughts and express myself clearly, so it's become a regular part of my routine.

The phrase 'shutting down nose' is incorrect; it should be 'notes'. Also, 'our weather is shutting down' is awkward; 'about the weather shutting down' is clearer. Prepositions and word choice need correction for clarity.

× It helps me unwind and reflect on what happened during the day. It also gives me a chance to process my emotions and keep track on our personal roles overtime.

✓ It helps me unwind and reflect on what happened during the day. It also gives me a chance to process my emotions and keep track of my personal goals over time.

The pronoun 'our' is incorrect here because the diary is personal. 'Keep track on' should be 'keep track of'. Also, 'roles' should be 'goals' to make sense in context. 'Overtime' should be two words 'over time'.

× It also gives me a chance to process my emotions and keep track on our personal roles overtime.

✓ It also gives me a chance to process my emotions and keep track of my personal goals over time.

The preposition 'on' is incorrect after 'keep track'; the correct preposition is 'of'. Also, 'overtime' should be two words 'over time' when referring to a period.

× I mostly take photos to record. My life is a quick and meaningful way to capture special moments, especially when I'm with family or traveling.

✓ I mostly take photos to record my life. It is a quick and meaningful way to capture special moments, especially when I'm with family or traveling.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'My life is a quick and meaningful way' is incorrect; it should be 'It is a quick and meaningful way' referring to taking photos. Combining sentences improves clarity.

× Looking back at these pictures always bring back great memories and helps me appreciate how far I become.

✓ Looking back at these pictures always brings back great memories and helps me appreciate how far I have come.

Subject-verb agreement error: 'pictures' is plural, so 'bring' should be 'bring' but 'Looking back' is singular subject, so 'brings' is correct. Also, 'how far I become' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'how far I have come' to indicate progress over time.