Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，建议使用正确的时态和句式，避免重复和冗余，使回答更简洁流畅。

例: I used to write a lot when I was in high school because I was preparing for my college entrance exam. However, now I only type short notes on my phone since I don't have such stressful goals.

提案: 回答中语法和表达不够准确，建议使用完整句子并清晰表达原因，同时避免模糊词汇。

例: I like to write down important things, such as my schedule for the next day, because it helps me remember and organize my tasks clearly.

提案: 回答不够清晰，语法错误较多，建议简洁明了地表达观点，并使用合适的词汇。

例: I don't think the things I write will change because writing helps me remember them. If there are changes, it might be because someone else edited them.

提案: 回答中语法和表达不自然，建议使用正确的句式和词汇，表达清楚自己的偏好和原因。

例: I prefer typing because it's easier to use a laptop or phone than to find a pen and notebook, which is less convenient nowadays.

提案: 回答中存在语法错误，建议使用正确的动词形式和表达方式，清晰说明频率和原因。

例: I rarely keep a diary because it takes a lot of time. Instead, I prefer taking photos or videos when I experience interesting or important events.

提案: 回答中语法和表达不够准确，建议使用连贯的句子和正确的词汇，清楚描述记录生活的方法。

例: I like to record my life by taking photos and videos. Then, I select the best photos to share on social media platforms like TikTok, QQ, or WeChat Moments.

× I have read it a lot when I was a high school student.

✓ I read it a lot when I was a high school student.

这里描述的是过去发生的动作，应该使用一般过去时，而不是现在完成时。

× At that time I'm preparing for my college entrance examination.

✓ At that time I was preparing for my college entrance examination.

句子描述过去的时间点，应该使用过去进行时，而不是现在进行时。

× But now I not have this stressful target so I just typing my word on the phone.

✓ But now I do not have this stressful target so I just type my words on the phone.

否定句中缺少助动词'do'，动词时态应为一般现在时，且'typing'应改为'type'。

× I like write down something important like the schedule of the next turn, because I can't forget it.

✓ I like to write down something important like the schedule of the next turn, because I can't forget it.

动词'like'后面应接不定式'to write'，而不是直接用动词原形。

× If I write it, I can renew it clearly.

✓ If I write it, I can review it clearly.

'renew'用法不当，应使用'review'表示复习或查看。

× I don't think the Staffs are right would change because if I write it I will remember it and look at it clearly.

✓ I don't think the staff's rights would change because if I write it I will remember it and look at it clearly.

'Staff'作为集合名词通常不可数，复数形式不常用，且'right'应为复数形式'rights'。

× If it changes, maybe somebody modified it.

✓ If it changes, maybe somebody has modified it.

表示过去发生且对现在有影响的动作，应使用现在完成时。

× I prefer typing because the laptop and the cell phone is easy to find into typing, but the right hand you should find a pen and a book.

✓ I prefer typing because the laptop and the cell phone are easy to use for typing, but with the right hand you should find a pen and a book.

主语'laptop and cell phone'为复数，谓语动词应使用'are'，且表达更自然。

× the laptop and the cell phone is easy to find into typing

✓ the laptop and the cell phone are easy to use for typing

'find into typing'表达不正确，应使用' easy to use for typing'。

× but the right hand you should find a pen and a book.

✓ but with the right hand you should find a pen and a book.

缺少介词'with'，使句子结构完整。

× It's not so convenient because now there had no more pen and the book during our life.

✓ It's not so convenient because now there are no more pens and books in our life.

时态错误，'had'应为现在时'are'，且'pen'和'book'应使用复数形式。

× Actually, I seldom keeps a diary because I think it could take a lot of my time.

✓ Actually, I seldom keep a diary because I think it could take a lot of my time.

主语'I'后动词应为原形'keep'，而不是'keeps'。

× I prefer takes a photo or videos when I suffer some interesting things or some big stuffs.

✓ I prefer taking photos or videos when I experience some interesting things or some big stuff.

'prefer'后应接动名词'taking'，'suffer'用法不当，应改为'experience'，'stuffs'应为不可数名词'stuff'。

× I prefer text videos and takes photo and I will choose the most beautiful photo to download on my social media like Tiktok and QQ or WeChat moment.

✓ I prefer texting videos and taking photos and I will choose the most beautiful photo to upload on my social media like TikTok, QQ, or WeChat Moments.

'text videos'应为'texting videos'，'takes photo'应为'taking photos'，'download'应为'upload'，且社交媒体名称拼写及格式调整。