Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and organize your answer with a clear topic sentence, then one or two specific details. Avoid fillers like 'just' and 'stuff.' Also correct small grammar issues (e.g., 'on a day-to-day basis I write about one to two pages, mostly emails for coordinating projects').

例: I write fairly often. On a typical workday I write about one to two pages, mainly emails to coordinate project tasks and updates with colleagues.

提案: This answer is unclear and ungrammatical. Start with a clear topic sentence saying what you like to write, then give a reason and an example. Use linking words like 'because' and 'so' to show purpose. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer writing short, practical texts such as emails and meeting notes because they help me share information clearly. For example, I write concise instructions so colleagues can easily check and follow up.

提案: Clarify your position and give a specific reason. Begin with a direct answer (Yes/No) and follow with a short explanation and an example. Avoid hesitations and irrelevant fragments.

例: I don't think they'll change much. At work I mostly write messages to confirm everyone is on the same page or to chase up tasks, so the purpose and style stay consistent.

提案: Express a clear preference and give two specific reasons with linking words (for example, 'because' and 'however'). Correct unclear phrases (e.g., 'I can sketch diagrams more quickly by hand'). Keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer typing because I can write ideas quickly and edit them easily. However, I use handwriting when I need to sketch diagrams or brainstorm, since drawing is faster on paper.

提案: Give a direct answer and a specific frequency, then explain briefly why. Avoid confusing phrases. Use a linking word like 'because.'

例: I don't keep a diary. At most I might write in one very rarely, perhaps once every few years, because I prefer recording important moments with photos rather than daily entries.

提案: Make your answer coherent: state the method first (e.g., taking photos), then explain why and give a specific example. Remove unclear personal comments and repetitions. Use linking words like 'so' or 'for example.'

例: I mainly use photos to record my life because they capture moments quickly. For example, I post a short summary with a few photos each year on social media to look back at how things have changed.

× I think on a day-to-day basis, just probably like 1 to 2 pages of private, mostly in e-mail for coordination of projects and stuff.

✓ I think on a day-to-day basis I probably write about one to two pages privately, mostly in emails to coordinate projects and other things.

Original sentence uses noun/phrase ordering and form issues rather than a present participle error per se; however the main grammar problems are article/number formatting and noun forms (emails) and word order. Corrected version fixes word order, uses 'write' to show the action explicitly, spells out numbers in words for clarity, pluralizes 'emails', and uses 'to coordinate' (infinitive) to show purpose. Suggestion: use clear subject-verb structure ('I write') and place purpose phrases after the main clause.

× I don't have any particular words into my writing just for one way for shaking things because then if I need to pass through to other people to check in.

✓ I don't have any particular style in my writing; I use it mainly to make quick notes so I can pass them to other people to check.

The original sentence has unclear phrase 'words into my writing' and incorrect prepositions ('for one way for shaking things', 'pass through to other people to check in'). This is a sentence structure and word choice problem. Correction clarifies meaning: 'style' for 'words into my writing', 'make quick notes' expresses intent, and 'pass them to other people to check' uses correct verbs and prepositions. Suggestion: simplify sentences, use standard collocations (have a style, make notes, pass to someone, check them).

× Yeah, no, I say I'm the contest. Like what? My work is pretty much the same thing. Just confirm that everyone's on the same page and probably chasing up someone. They didn't say what you would have promised, but that's about it.

✓ Yes, it's the same. My work is pretty much the same: I just confirm that everyone is on the same page and sometimes chase people up. They don't usually promise anything else, and that's about it.

Original contains unclear fragments ('I say I'm the contest'), misplaced tense and pronoun use ('chasing up someone', 'They didn't say what you would have promised'). The correction uses coherent sentence structure, present simple for habitual actions ('is', 'confirm', 'chase'), and natural phrasing ('chase people up', 'that's about it'). Suggestion: use consistent tense (present simple for routines) and clear subjects for each clause.

× Typing is much better and if I watch it straight, some ideas very quickly, but because on my day-to-day basis I need to do some station as well and that's where handwriting comes into play because I can draw much quicker on the camera.

✓ Typing is much better and I can type ideas quickly, but in my day-to-day work I also need to do some sketches by hand, and that's where handwriting comes into play because I can draw more quickly on paper.

Original misuses pronouns and verbs ('if I watch it straight'), uses incorrect nouns ('station', 'camera') and vague structures. The correction replaces unclear phrases with clear pronouns and verbs ('I can type ideas quickly'), corrects nouns to logical choices ('sketches', 'paper'), and fixes comparative adverb ('more quickly'). Suggestion: choose precise nouns and maintain subject-verb clarity; use 'more quickly' rather than 'much quicker' when comparing actions.

× No, not at all. If I have to keep due to preferences, probably once every 10 years or so, maybe I become a very good word. One page, we'll stick to it and then just quit it.

✓ No, not at all. If I had to keep a diary due to preference, it would probably be only once every ten years or so. Maybe I would write one page and stick to it for a while, then stop.

Original mixes tenses and uses incorrect modal/tense forms ('If I have to keep due to preferences', 'maybe I become a very good word', 'we'll stick to it'). The correction uses the second conditional ('If I had to... it would probably...') to express a hypothetical, and adjusts verbs accordingly ('would write', 'stick', 'stop'). Suggestion: use conditional structures correctly: 'If I had to..., I would...' for hypothetical situations, and use consistent verb forms.

× Taking photos the likes of photos and this is not my girlfriend hit not me particularly, but to try to convince me to follow her.

✓ I take photos, mostly photos my girlfriend likes; not all are of me, but she tries to convince me to follow her.

Original has incorrect prepositions and awkward phrases ('the likes of photos', 'girlfriend hit not me particularly'). The correction uses natural prepositions and possession ('photos my girlfriend likes') and clarifies meaning ('not all are of me'). Suggestion: use concise noun phrases and correct possessive structure ('girlfriend likes' rather than 'likes of photos').

× It's basically summarizing you like one Facebook post into weekend every year and how much you have for like over the years.

✓ It's basically like summarizing your year into one Facebook post each year to show how much has changed over the years.

Original sentence has unclear structure and incorrect word order ('summarizing you like one Facebook post into weekend every year'). The correction reorders words into a clear comparative structure and uses proper time expressions ('each year', 'over the years'). Suggestion: express time phrases clearly ('each year', 'over the years') and place objects next to verbs they relate to.

× This is quite fascinating for me to to really actually.

✓ I find this quite fascinating.

Original repeats words and uses unnecessary adverbs ('to to really actually'), creating redundancy and broken structure. The correction uses a simple, direct clause 'I find this quite fascinating.' Suggestion: avoid redundant adverbs and repeated words; use concise expressions.