Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 在回答中注意句子简洁和衔接，避免重复表达（例如“write a lot”和多次提到写作童年）并将信息按时间或因果顺序组织。可以用一两句概括主要观点，再补充一两句具体细节（如写作类型、投稿经历和结果）。同时注意时态一致性和自然表达，如用“I've been writing since I was a child.”代替笨拙的结构。

例: Yes, I write a lot. I've been writing since I was a child and my dream was to become a novelist. Recently I completed a short novel and submitted it to a publisher, but they rejected it, which motivated me to revise and improve my manuscript.

提案: 回答要更具体并避免“imitate”这类可能显得缺乏原创性的词。说明你喜欢奇幻的具体原因（比如世界构建、想象力、角色成长），并用连接词让逻辑更清晰。最后可简短提到灵感来源而不重复事实。

例: I prefer writing fantasy because I enjoy creating imaginative worlds and complex characters. Fantasy lets me explore themes like friendship and courage in a vivid setting, and J.K. Rowling's work inspired me to develop my own magical elements rather than copy hers.

提案: 回答应更自然并修正语法，比如将时态统一为现在完成或过去时。补充更具体的变化细节（例如写作主题、风格或视角的变化），并说明原因或影响。避免句子碎片（“Doing interesting.”应改为完整句）。

例: Yes, they have changed. As I've grown older I no longer write only fantasy; I also write historical novels because I'm interested in portraying authentic daily life and social issues of past eras, which gives my work more depth and variety.

提案: 用更自然的表达并修正细节错误（例如“order things”用词不当，应为“organize”或“edit”）。将理由按逻辑顺序列出并使用连接词。避免夸张或不准确表述。

例: I prefer typing on a computer or smartphone because my handwriting is messy and hard to read. Also, typing makes it easy to organize ideas and edit my work quickly.

提案: 回答要更简洁并注意时态与措辞（不要混淆读与写）。可提供具体频率或过去习惯，并解释原因和感受。避免重复词汇并使用自然表达如“I stopped keeping a diary.”

例: I don't keep a diary now. When I was a child my parents read my entries without permission, so I stopped keeping one, which I sometimes regret because it would have been nice to look back on those memories.

提案: 把回答合并为1-2个完整句子并补充具体细节（例如你用视频、照片还是 voice memos，频率或内容类型）。用连接词使句子更流畅并注意习惯用法（“look back”而非“look it back”）。

例: I usually record my life with a camera and make short videos or photo diaries. I find visual records more vivid, and I enjoy watching them years later to remember everyday moments.

× I even write my own novels, like writing since I was a child.

✓ I have been writing my own novels since I was a child.

句中要表达从过去某时开始持续到现在的动作，应使用现在完成进行时（have been + V-ing）。原句“like writing since I was a child”结构不正确且含义不明确，改为“I have been writing my own novels since I was a child.”更符合时态和语义。建议：遇到表示从过去持续到现在的动作，用现在完成进行时。

× When I was young, my dream was to become a writer, and I stick to this dream for a long time.

✓ When I was young, my dream was to become a writer, and I stuck to this dream for a long time.

句中讲过去的情况，应保持过去时态一致。主句为过去时（was），后半句也应使用过去时（stuck），而不是现在时（stick）。建议：讲述过去发生的动作时，注意整个描述保持过去时。

× I wrote a short novel. I sent it to the publisher house, but they refused me.

✓ I wrote a short novel. I sent it to the publishing house, but they rejected me.

1) “publisher house”不是固定搭配，正确说法是“publishing house”。2) “refused me”常用于拒绝请求，关于稿件应使用“reject”更自然，且过去式“rejected”。建议：使用正确名词搭配“publishing house”，用“reject”描述稿件被拒。

× My favorite subject of writing is fantasy because I want to imitate Harry Potter.

✓ My favourite type of writing is fantasy because I want to imitate Harry Potter.

“subject of writing”不自然，表达文体类别应使用“type/kind/genre of writing”或直接“genre”。建议使用“type of writing”或“genre”。（注：英式拼写为“favourite”，美式为“favorite”，可按考生习惯选择。）

× I'm a big Harry Potter fan and I was inspired by the writer of the Harry Potter series, JK Rowling.

✓ I'm a big Harry Potter fan and I was inspired by the writer of the Harry Potter series, J.K. Rowling.

此句语法本身基本正确，但人名写法需加点或空格以更规范（J.K. Rowling）。无时态问题，因为“was inspired”表示过去受影响。建议书写人名时注意规范标点和空格。

× She started writing when she was a child too.

✓ She started writing when she was a child, too.

句子语法正确，仅建议在尾部加逗号或保留“too”位置以增强自然性。此处主要为标点建议，无重大语法错误。

× Yes, as I grew older I stopped writing just fantasy novels.

✓ Yes, as I grew older I stopped writing only fantasy novels.

“just”在这里可以用“only”更符合标准用法表示“仅仅”，语法无其他问题。建议在正式写作或口语中用“only”。

× I started writing historic novels too.

✓ I started writing historical novels too.

应使用形容词“historical”修饰“novels”，而不是“historic”（两者差别细微，但常用“historical novels”）。建议使用“historical novels”。

× I want to show people the authentic life experience in that era.

✓ I want to show people authentic life experiences from that era.

名词复数“experiences”更合适表示不同人的生活经历；介词用“from that era”比“in that era”更自然。建议：复数化“experience”并用“from”引出时代来源。

× Doing interesting.

✓ I want to make it interesting.

原句“Doing interesting.”不是完整句子，缺主语和谓语，属于句子结构错误。根据上下文应表达“这样做会很有趣”或“我觉得这很有趣”，改为“I want to make it interesting.”或“It would be interesting.” 建议：保证句子有主语和谓语，避免片段句。

× I prefer typing on my smartphone or computer because my handwriting is awful.

✓ I prefer typing on my smartphone or computer because my handwriting is awful.

此句语法正确，无需修改。仅保留以示无错误。

× I couldn't even recognize what I wrote after three days.

✓ I couldn't even recognize what I had written after three days.

句中涉及在过去某一时刻回头看更早写的内容，应使用过去完成时（had written）表示写作发生在“三天前”的更早时间点。建议：描述过去的先后关系时使用过去完成时。

× And you can order things and you rectify your writing on computer.

✓ And you can order things and you can edit your writing on a computer.

1) “rectify”用得不自然，通常用“edit”或“correct”来表示修改文字。2) 需要冠词“a computer”。建议使用“edit”并加冠词。

× I don't do Diaries. I mean, I don't keep a journal.

✓ I don't keep diaries. I mean, I don't keep a journal.

“Diaries”不应大写且结构重复。把第一句改为“I don't keep diaries.”更自然；第二句可保留为补充说明。建议：不要随意大写普通名词，注意单复数和一致性。

× When I was a child, my parents read my diary and I was angry, so I stopped reading Diaries since then.

✓ When I was a child, my parents read my diary and I was angry, so I stopped keeping a diary since then.

1) “read my diary and I was angry”逻辑上可，但后半句“stopped reading Diaries since then”错误：如果是停止写日记，应用“stopped keeping a diary”或“stopped keeping diaries”。2) “since then”与“stopped”搭配，通常用现在完成时更恰当（have stopped），但原意可改为“and since then I haven't kept a diary.” 建议：用固定表达“keep a diary”，并注意时态与单复数。

× It's a bit of pity.

✓ It's a bit of a pity.

常用固定表达是“a pity”或“a bit of a pity”。原句缺冠词“a”。建议记住固定搭配“a pity”。

× Recordings. I bought a camera. I record my daily lives.

✓ I make recordings. I bought a camera. I record my daily life.

1) “Recordings.”作为独立句太短且不完整，改为“I make recordings.” 2) “daily lives”不常用，通常用“daily life”表示个人的日常生活。建议：保持完整句子并使用不可数名词“daily life”。

× I think it might be interesting to look it back years later.

✓ I think it might be interesting to look back at it years later.

短语顺序错误，应为“look back at it”表示回顾某事，且“years later”置句末。建议记住固定搭配“look back at something”。