Writing— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make the answer more natural and concise. Begin with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and avoid redundancy. Add one specific detail about what you write and how it helps, using a linking word to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I write a lot because I’m preparing for a major writing exam. For example, I write one practice essay every day, which helps me improve my vocabulary and correct common grammar mistakes.

提案: Provide a direct topic sentence and complete your thoughts. Remove hesitations and avoid unfinished sentences. Give one clear reason and one specific example or consequence, linked logically.

例: I like to write about artificial intelligence because I’m fascinated by its potential to solve real-world problems. For instance, I’ve written about AI tools that help doctors diagnose diseases, but I also discuss risks such as privacy issues.

提案: This answer is generally good but can be improved with a brief specific example of how your writing changed. Use linking words to show cause and effect and keep it concise.

例: Yes, my writing has changed a lot. As I learned more, my vocabulary and ideas became more sophisticated; for example, I now plan essays with clear introductions and conclusions, which makes my arguments easier to follow.

提案: Make the response more natural and avoid repetition. Start with a clear preference, give a reason, and then add a contrasting point with a linking word.

例: I prefer handwriting because it helps me think more clearly and feel more connected to my ideas. However, I use a computer when I need to write quickly or edit documents more efficiently.

提案: Provide a clear and grammatically correct answer about frequency. State past or present habit and explain briefly with a specific detail and linking word. Avoid repeating and correct tense mistakes.

例: I tried keeping a diary for three months last year, but I don’t keep one regularly now because I’m very busy; as a result, I find it hard to write every day.

提案: This is a good, specific answer. To improve, add one more brief method and use a linking word to connect ideas for coherence.

例: I often take photos with friends and family to record special moments; for example, I have many travel photos and family gathering pictures. I also keep short voice memos when I want to capture a memory quickly.

× Yes, I write a lot because I have been preparing for the years writing test.

✓ Yes, I write a lot because I have been preparing for the year's writing test.

Use the possessive form 'year's' to modify 'writing test' (article/possessive error). Also the present perfect continuous 'have been preparing' is correct for an ongoing preparation. Suggestion: use 'year's' when indicating a test that belongs to a specific year.

× I write every day, practice essays and showed responses which really helps me improve my vocabulary and grammar.

✓ I write every day, practice essays and show responses, which really help me improve my vocabulary and grammar.

The list of verbs should be in the same form (parallel structure): 'write, practice, and show' (base forms). 'Showed' is past tense and breaks parallelism. Also 'responses' is plural so the relative clause should use 'help' not 'helps'. Suggestion: keep verbs in the same tense and ensure subject-verb agreement in relative clauses.

× I don't write very often, but uh, when I do, I like to write about artificial intelligence because I'm fascinated by how it can help users and solve real problems because.

✓ I don't write very often, but when I do, I like to write about artificial intelligence because I'm fascinated by how it can help users and solve real problems.

Remove the extra filler 'uh' and the duplicated 'because' at the end; the final 'because' is incomplete and creates a sentence fragment. Suggestion: avoid unnecessary fillers in formal responses and ensure conjunctions introduce a complete clause.

× But sometimes AI bring about negative consequence so I need a.

✓ But sometimes AI brings about negative consequences, so I need to be careful.

'AI' (treated as singular) requires 'brings' (third person singular). 'Consequence' should be plural 'consequences' to match 'sometimes' and general meaning. The sentence was incomplete; add a phrase like 'to be careful' to complete it. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and complete clauses.

× Yes, my writing has changed a lot.

✓ Yes, my writing has changed a lot.

This sentence is correct. The present perfect 'has changed' appropriately describes a change that occurred over time; no correction needed.

× As I grew up and learned more, my vocabulary and ideas became more sophisticated.

✓ As I grew up and learned more, my vocabulary and ideas became more sophisticated.

This sentence is correct. Past simple 'grew up' and 'learned' describe past development; 'became' correctly follows. No correction needed.

× I prefer handwriting because I've always been used to writing on paper and find it helps me think more clearly, so I accustomed to write on paper.

✓ I prefer handwriting because I'm used to writing on paper and find it helps me think more clearly, so I am accustomed to writing on paper.

Use 'I'm used to' or 'I am accustomed to' plus a noun or verb-ing. 'I've always been used to' is acceptable but 'I've always been used to writing' or simpler 'I'm used to writing' is clearer. 'Accustomed to write' is incorrect because 'accustomed to' should be followed by a gerund 'writing.' Suggestion: use 'accustomed to writing' or 'used to writing.'

× I also type on PC when I need to finish work quickly or edit document.

✓ I also type on my PC when I need to finish work quickly or edit documents.

Add the possessive 'my' before 'PC' for natural English and make 'document' plural 'documents' to match the general activity. Suggestion: include articles/possessives and match noun number to context.

× Actually I have write diary for three months, but I I don't write yet because I have no time every day, so it is difficult to write.

✓ Actually I kept a diary for three months, but I don't write it now because I don't have time every day, so it is difficult to keep writing.

'Have write' is incorrect; use past simple 'kept' or present perfect 'have kept' with correct form 'kept a diary.' 'I don't write yet' is unidiomatic; 'I don't write it now' or 'I no longer write' is clearer. 'I have no time every day' should be 'I don't have time every day.' Suggestion: use correct past forms and common collocations like 'keep a diary.'

× I often take photos with my friends and family to record special moments.

✓ I often take photos with my friends and family to record special moments.

This sentence is correct; pronoun and article use are appropriate. No correction needed.

× For example, I have many travel photos and pictures from family gathering which help me remember those happy times.

✓ For example, I have many travel photos and pictures from family gatherings, which help me remember those happy times.

'Family gathering' should be plural 'family gatherings' because multiple events are implied. Also add a comma before the non-restrictive relative clause 'which help me...' Suggestion: pluralize countable nouns when referring to multiple events and use commas with non-restrictive clauses.