Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，建议简化句子结构，避免重复用词，并且注意冠词和单复数的正确使用。可以用更自然的表达方式描述天气情况。

例: I live in the southwest of China, where it is mostly cloudy and rainy throughout the year, with very little sunshine and almost no snow.

提案: 回答中有语法错误和用词不当，如'sweet'应为'sweat'，'sick clothes'应为'warm clothes'。建议使用更准确的词汇，句子结构更清晰，避免口语化表达。

例: I prefer cold weather because hot weather makes me sweat a lot, which I find uncomfortable. In cold weather, I can stay warm indoors with heating, and when outside, I just wear warm clothes.

提案: 回答中有重复和语法错误，表达不清晰。建议简洁明了地表达观点，避免重复，使用正确的词汇和句子结构。

例: I prefer wet weather because it helps me feel cooler. When the weather is too dry, I feel uncomfortable and tired.

提案: 回答表达基本清楚，但语法有误，如'never been correct'应为'has never been correct'。建议注意时态和语法的正确使用，使表达更自然。

例: I don't usually check the weather forecast because I don't trust it. In my experience, the forecasts in my city have never been accurate.

提案: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不够流畅。建议简化句子，直接表达观点，并使用准确的词汇。

例: Although I'm not an expert, I have read that climate change has caused damage to agriculture in recent years.

提案: 回答中有语法和表达不清的问题，如'after I am born in the world'和'I really didn't have allies now'。建议使用更准确和自然的表达，避免不必要的口语化和模糊词汇。

例: Yes, definitely. If I had the chance, I would like to visit a city with snow because I have never seen snow before. For example, I would like to go to Harbin or Mount Emei.

× I live in the southwest of China, where is little sunshine almost the whole year and there is also hardly snowy days.

✓ I live in the southwest of China, where there is little sunshine almost the whole year and there are hardly any snowy days.

这里's little sunshine'中的'sunshine'是不可数名词，使用little正确；'hardly snowy days'中'days'是可数名词，前面应使用复数形式的谓语动词'are'，且'hardly'用法不当，应改为'hardly any'表示几乎没有。

× The most common weather is some gloom, gloom and raining days.

✓ The most common weather is gloomy, gloomy and rainy days.

形容词'gloom'用错，应使用形容词形式'gloomy'；'raining'是动词的现在分词，描述天气应使用形容词'rainy'。

× For me I prefer cold weather because you know sometimes the hot weather will make you sweet a lot.

✓ For me, I prefer cold weather because sometimes hot weather will make you sweat a lot.

'make you sweet'中的'sweet'是形容词，正确表达应为'make you sweat'，'sweat'为动词，表示出汗。

× But cold weather if you are in the indoor of your house you can use the air conditioner but if you outside and it also OK, you just need to wear some sick clothes.

✓ But in cold weather, if you are indoors in your house, you can use the air conditioner; but if you are outside, it's also OK, you just need to wear some thick clothes.

'in the indoor'应为'indoor'或'indoors'；'if you outside'缺少动词'are'；'sick clothes'应为'thick clothes'，表示厚衣服。

× I'm prefer I prefer wet weather because wet weather can make me cool down.

✓ I prefer wet weather because wet weather can help me cool down.

'I'm prefer'是错误的表达，应该直接说'I prefer'；'make me cool down'语义不自然，改为'help me cool down'更合适。

× If if the weather is too dry, I can't make sure my logic is OK because I will be disturbed by the by the dry and I will feel very tired.

✓ If the weather is too dry, I can't make sure my body is OK because I will be disturbed by the dryness and I will feel very tired.

'make sure my logic is OK'表达不当，应为'make sure my body is OK'；'disturbed by the by the dry'重复且用词错误，应为'disturbed by the dryness'。

× Now I'm not in this habit because I don't believe the weather forecast.

✓ Now I'm not in the habit because I don't believe the weather forecast.

'in this habit'应为'in the habit'，表示习惯；句子时态正确。

× For my own experience, the weather forecast in my city never been correct.

✓ From my own experience, the weather forecast in my city has never been correct.

'never been'缺少助动词，正确时态为现在完成时'have never been'。

× That's a tough question because I'm not a major in it and I just know a little of the aspect from the article that I read in Internet.

✓ That's a tough question because I'm not a major in it and I just know a little about the aspects from the articles that I read on the Internet.

'a little of the aspect'应为'a little about the aspects'；'read in Internet'应为'read on the Internet'。

× So I think one may in fact of the climate change, maybe it caused some damage in agriculture, yes.

✓ So I think one effect of climate change may be that it caused some damage in agriculture, yes.

'one may in fact of the climate change'结构混乱，应为'one effect of climate change may be'。

× Yes, definitely, If I can choose, I will go to a city with snow because I have never seen snow after I am born in the world.

✓ Yes, definitely. If I could choose, I would go to a city with snow because I have never seen snow since I was born.

虚拟语气中条件句应使用过去式'could'和'would'；'after I am born in the world'应为'since I was born'。

× You know, I really didn't have allies now, so if I can choose, I will choose cities like Harbin or Umei Mountain and all that.

✓ You know, I really don't have any friends now, so if I can choose, I will choose cities like Harbin or Umei Mountain and so on.

'didn't have allies now'时态和词汇错误，应为'don't have any friends now'；'and all that'口语化，改为'and so on'更正式。