Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is generally clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy like 'too hot and dry' and 'very cold and dry' by combining ideas smoothly. Also, avoid subjective statements like 'local people are irritated' without examples. Try to use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Istanbul has hot, dry summers and cold, dry winters, which many locals find uncomfortable. Because of this, people often wish for milder weather throughout the year.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but has some grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Try to use clearer sentence structures and avoid redundancy. Also, use linking words like 'because' and 'therefore' properly to connect your ideas.

例: I prefer hot weather because cold weather requires wearing many layers, which I find uncomfortable. In contrast, summer clothes are light and comfortable, so I enjoy the warmer season more.

提案: Your answer is understandable but repetitive and uses informal phrases like 'very bothering.' Try to use more precise vocabulary and avoid repeating the same ideas. Also, provide a bit more explanation to support your preference.

例: I prefer wet weather because dry conditions can cause skin irritation and discomfort. Moist air helps keep the skin hydrated, which I find much more pleasant.

提案: Your answer is relevant but has some grammatical mistakes and could be more detailed. Use the present tense consistently and add linking words to improve coherence. Also, explain why checking the forecast is important.

例: Yes, I usually check the weather forecast on my phone before traveling by car. I think it's important because it helps me prepare for different weather conditions and ensures a safer trip.

提案: Your answer shows awareness but is too brief and contains grammatical errors. Try to expand your response with specific effects and use more formal vocabulary. Avoid informal phrases like 'they smoke a lot.'

例: I believe climate change has caused temperatures to rise recently, mainly due to pollution from factories and vehicles emitting greenhouse gases. This leads to more extreme weather and environmental problems, which concerns me deeply.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains confusing phrases like 'I love getting no to all readers.' Make sure your sentences are clear and directly answer the question. Also, explain why you prefer Mediterranean weather with specific reasons.

例: Yes, I would like to visit cities with different climates. For example, I enjoy Mediterranean weather because it is mild and sunny, which makes me feel energetic and happy.

× But in the summer we can wear summer clothes that are very comfortable and therefore I choose summer and.

✓ But in the summer we can wear summer clothes that are very comfortable, and therefore I choose summer.

The conjunction 'and' at the end of the sentence is unnecessary and incorrect. The sentence should end after 'summer' to be grammatically correct.

× I checked the weather forecast by my phone when we want to travel by car.

✓ I check the weather forecast on my phone when we want to travel by car.

The preposition 'by' is incorrect when referring to using a phone; the correct preposition is 'on'. Also, the tense should be present to match the habitual action.

× I checked the weather forecast by my phone when we want to travel by car.

✓ I check the weather forecast on my phone when we want to travel by car.

The verb 'checked' is past tense, but the sentence describes a habitual action, so present tense 'check' is appropriate.

× Yes, I love getting no to all readers, but my favorite is Mediterranean weather.

✓ Yes, I love getting to know all regions, but my favorite is Mediterranean weather.

The phrase 'getting no to all readers' is incorrect and unclear. It seems the intended phrase is 'getting to know all regions' or similar. The pronouns and words need correction for clarity and grammar.