Weather— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to avoid informal language and swear words in your answers. Also, organize your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, and avoid incomplete or unclear sentences. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: The weather where I live is very dry and extremely hot. Because of this, I often use air conditioning to stay comfortable. However, I was born in the north of Iran, where the climate is humid, which is quite different from here.

提案: Try to make your sentences clearer and more concise. Use linking words to connect your reasons smoothly and avoid repetition. Also, try to use a wider range of vocabulary to express your feelings.

例: I prefer hot weather because it reminds me of summer, which I really enjoy. In contrast, cold weather often makes me feel stressed and depressed. Additionally, I love summer fruits because they are delicious and refreshing.

提案: Work on sentence structure and grammar to make your answer clearer. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific reasons for your preference. Avoid redundancy and try to be more precise.

例: I have lived in wet weather before, but I prefer dry weather because I feel more comfortable. Although dry weather can dehydrate my skin, I drink plenty of water to stay hydrated.

提案: Your answer is unclear and confusing. Try to give a direct response to the question with a clear topic sentence, followed by specific details about when and how often you check the weather. Avoid incomplete sentences and unclear phrases.

例: Yes, I usually check the weather forecast every morning to plan my day. I find it helpful to know the temperature and whether it will rain or be sunny.

提案: Try to express your ideas more clearly and completely. Use linking words to connect your points and provide specific examples or explanations. Work on grammar and sentence structure to improve clarity.

例: Climate change has affected the food chain by disrupting the habitats of many animals. As the weather becomes hotter, some species are facing the risk of extinction.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by combining sentences more smoothly using linking words. Also, try to use a wider range of vocabulary to describe your experiences and feelings.

例: Absolutely, I would like to visit cities with different climates. For example, I have visited Tabriz in Iran, which is very cold and snowy in winter. I love snow because I didn't see much of it during my childhood.

× I need a lot of air conditioner

✓ I need a lot of air conditioners

The noun 'air conditioner' is countable, so when referring to multiple units, the plural form 'air conditioners' should be used with 'a lot of'. Using the singular form here is incorrect.

× I was born in north of Iran

✓ I was born in the north of Iran

When referring to a specific region like 'north of Iran', the definite article 'the' is required before 'north' to specify the area.

× and but I was born in north of Iran and it was humidity, but then I saw

✓ but I was born in the north of Iran where it was humid, but then I saw

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'and but' together, which is redundant. Also, 'it was humidity' is incorrect; the adjective 'humid' should be used to describe the weather. The sentence structure is improved by replacing 'and but' with 'but' and correcting the adjective.

× I like I love summer because in cold weather I got a lot of stress and be depressed

✓ I like, I love summer because in cold weather I get a lot of stress and become depressed

The sentence incorrectly mixes tenses and verb forms. 'Got' should be 'get' to match the present tense context, and 'be depressed' should be 'become depressed' to form a correct verb phrase.

× and also there is a specific reason is that I love fruits of summer and they are so delicious

✓ and also the specific reason is that I love summer fruits and they are so delicious

The phrase 'there is a specific reason is that' is redundant. It should be simplified to 'the specific reason is that'. Also, 'fruits of summer' is better expressed as 'summer fruits'.

× I had an experience living in a wet weather

✓ I have had experience living in wet weather

The phrase 'had an experience' is awkward; 'have had experience' is more natural. Also, 'a wet weather' is incorrect because 'weather' is uncountable and does not take an article here.

× despite of my skin get very dehydrated

✓ despite my skin getting very dehydrated

The phrase 'despite of' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'despite'. Also, after 'despite', a gerund ('getting') should be used instead of the base verb 'get'.

× I drink lots of water but I rather dry better

✓ I drink lots of water but I prefer dry weather

The phrase 'I rather dry better' is incorrect. The correct expression is 'I prefer dry weather'. 'Rather' is not used correctly here.

× I'm so comfortable with that

✓ I'm very comfortable with that

The adverb 'so' is informal and can be replaced with 'very' for clarity and correctness in this context.

× Yes I am and more. No, not that I check I'm I check the weather in the morning and I forgot everything I want to tell in Adam and Winter

✓ Yes, I am. No, not much. I check the weather in the morning and I forget everything I want to say in autumn and winter

The original sentence is confusing and contains errors. 'And more' is unclear and replaced with 'not much'. 'I forgot' should be 'I forget' to match present tense. 'Adam and Winter' likely means 'autumn and winter'. The sentence is restructured for clarity.

× It has been changing the life of food chain and because of the weather is going to be more hot and hot

✓ It has been changing the food chain because the weather is becoming hotter and hotter

The phrase 'the life of food chain' is awkward; 'the food chain' is better. 'Because of the weather is going to be more hot and hot' is incorrect; it should be 'because the weather is becoming hotter and hotter' to use correct tense and comparative form.

× Lots of animals are getting are in the face of

✓ Lots of animals are facing threats

The original sentence is incomplete and ungrammatical. 'Are getting are in the face of' is incorrect. The corrected sentence conveys the intended meaning clearly.

× I had an experience in living and visiting other cities like Tabriz in Iran, which is very cold and always in winter has a lot of snow

✓ I have had experience living in and visiting other cities like Tabriz in Iran, which is very cold and always has a lot of snow in winter

'Had an experience' is better expressed as 'have had experience'. The phrase 'always in winter has a lot of snow' is awkward; it should be 'always has a lot of snow in winter' for correct word order.

× I love snow because I didn't see a lot of snow back in my childhood

✓ I love snow because I didn't see much snow during my childhood

'A lot of snow' is less appropriate here; 'much snow' is better with negative sentences. 'Back in my childhood' is better expressed as 'during my childhood'.